haiku (old ones)
Observing trout.28 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Chris,
While not a fisherman, I have heard lots of stories about lures in season and the big one that got away (-; My guess the scarred ones may be smarter, but methinks that fish are low on the totem pole for intelligence. So I will give those that live longer a little credit for their wisdom. Good Haiku topic for future posts!
Mark
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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Chris,
While not a fisherman, I have heard lots of stories about lures in season and the big one that got away (-; My guess the scarred ones may be smarter, but methinks that fish are low on the totem pole for intelligence. So I will give those that live longer a little credit for their wisdom. Good Haiku topic for future posts!
Mark
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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Thanks Mark!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You make a valid point that wisdom comes with age. I like the image and the use of the word scars. I believe this could be about trout and the old, wiser generation of humans.
Your last line is six syllables in length. Maybe write memory as mem'ry as most pronounce it that way.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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You make a valid point that wisdom comes with age. I like the image and the use of the word scars. I believe this could be about trout and the old, wiser generation of humans.
Your last line is six syllables in length. Maybe write memory as mem'ry as most pronounce it that way.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thanks Jan. I removed {the) from the first line. Now it is a 4-7-6.
Comment from AnnaLinda
C2,
No advance apologies needed. This is a unique haiku you've crafted. It has meaning beyond the obvious...at least to me.
I think it has 18 syllables...now that I went back to count.
I'm not one stuck on syllable count, however, traditionally 17 syllables or less is the accepted form of haiku.
It would be easy to adjust the last line from 6 syllables to 5 by using
Mem'ry or something lame like that. Or you could use "recall"
Maybe I counted wrong...
Who knows?
Good haiku. I look forward to reading more of them...Even though they may be about fish.
Anna
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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C2,
No advance apologies needed. This is a unique haiku you've crafted. It has meaning beyond the obvious...at least to me.
I think it has 18 syllables...now that I went back to count.
I'm not one stuck on syllable count, however, traditionally 17 syllables or less is the accepted form of haiku.
It would be easy to adjust the last line from 6 syllables to 5 by using
Mem'ry or something lame like that. Or you could use "recall"
Maybe I counted wrong...
Who knows?
Good haiku. I look forward to reading more of them...Even though they may be about fish.
Anna
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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You counted right; it is eighteen. Memory only counts as a two-syllable word in the South! Still noodling on a solution. That is why I have not entered this one into a contest. Rules, rules.
Could just drop (the) from the first line???
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LOL...mem'ry
if you don't like 'recall'
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Yes! Brilliant! I don't know I did not think of it. haha
Comment from Boogienights
I love fishing as well, at least in my younger days. I've had a few fish tales to tell in my days, you should check out my poem Husky Muskie.....I think you'd like it. A nice haiku, thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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I love fishing as well, at least in my younger days. I've had a few fish tales to tell in my days, you should check out my poem Husky Muskie.....I think you'd like it. A nice haiku, thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Thanks Boogienights! I?ll check it out.
Comment from papa55mike
That's why you always catch the little Bass first without a sniff from a big one. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Havea great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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That's why you always catch the little Bass first without a sniff from a big one. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Havea great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 15-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2021
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Isn?t that the truth! Thank you!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Chris!
Much wisdom is offered in you well-crafted haiku!
I was my father's only "son," and as such, we fished together many times. How I loved those lazy afternoons...
Beautiful imagery.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Hello Chris!
Much wisdom is offered in you well-crafted haiku!
I was my father's only "son," and as such, we fished together many times. How I loved those lazy afternoons...
Beautiful imagery.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thanks Diane!
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
C2:
My brother would really like this haiku about these beautiful trout.
He has been a fishing addict for as long as I can remember, but he is more into bass fishing. I really like your last line: "memory is wisdom."
Rare have words been any truer than that.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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C2:
My brother would really like this haiku about these beautiful trout.
He has been a fishing addict for as long as I can remember, but he is more into bass fishing. I really like your last line: "memory is wisdom."
Rare have words been any truer than that.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you. Bass are my passion, too. More to come!
Comment from palmart
You packed wisdom in just three lines and a handful of words. Not many writers have such capacity, but you do! Picture brings shapes to your words and it is more than welcome. Recognition is a very well deserved one! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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You packed wisdom in just three lines and a handful of words. Not many writers have such capacity, but you do! Picture brings shapes to your words and it is more than welcome. Recognition is a very well deserved one! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
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You´re welcome, C2!!
Have a great weekend!!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is well done. I like the fishing analogy for life, if this is one, that is. Even if you didn't mean it to be it still is worth noting. I like it all but especially the last line, "memory is wisdom" is true for all of us I'd say. Your approach to the haiku is accurate. Thank you for sharing your deep love of fishing. Welcome to Fan Story.
Jesse
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This is well done. I like the fishing analogy for life, if this is one, that is. Even if you didn't mean it to be it still is worth noting. I like it all but especially the last line, "memory is wisdom" is true for all of us I'd say. Your approach to the haiku is accurate. Thank you for sharing your deep love of fishing. Welcome to Fan Story.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thanks Jesse!
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You're welcome.
Happy fishing!
Jesse
Comment from RodG
This haiku has all the earmarks of a poet/fisherman who knows his fish. I like the subtle message conveyed here that we ALL learn wisdom from our mistakes. Rod
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This haiku has all the earmarks of a poet/fisherman who knows his fish. I like the subtle message conveyed here that we ALL learn wisdom from our mistakes. Rod
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thanks Rod!
