Comment from George 1

Excellent

"Spandex and Spree" reads like a Cajun ballad from the past and it reveals how the English language can embrace diverse influences. The story that the poem tells expresses that same idea that the country benefits from being open to those influences. Nice work.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021

Thanks so very much.......I moved a lot growing up and heard lots of accents.....God Bless you and Best Wishes going forward .....Stu Harrell

Comment from Leann DS

Excellent

This is a great story with oodles of very detailed imagery, nice rhyme and two firefly heroic characters! if I were to change anything, it would be to make the syllable count for each line consistent throughout the poem so the flow and rhythm would be improved. i'm thinking it would be worthy of six stars with that change. Well done! Hugs to you.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so much....you are right ..it is a bit rough tough and scramble jambled....my main interest is the deadline and the in house copyright.......very good suggestions....I need to do a little more study on form.....Thanks again and Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Wow, these are two very busy and bright fireflies to lead boats through mist and fog. This is a cute story in abcb rhyming quatrains with a smooth meter.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpet

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thank you so very much.......Yikes...not sure I understand all of the whizzbang quatrains.....but these are fun to splash together....Godspeed to you and yours.......Stu Harrell

reply by dragonpoet on 12-Mar-2021

You are most kindly welcome, Stu.
Joan

Comment from crzypnter

Excellent

I liked your well composed poem of Spandy and Spree as a young lad I was told of some of the old stories and sadly I don't think they are as popular stories as they used to be. Thanks for sharing
God bless
August

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so much.....You are right....when I was younger...there always seemed to be some grungy old guy....like me now... who told us tales that we knew he sort of just made up .....Godspeed and Good Luck to you......Stu Harrell

Comment from Susan Larson

Excellent

This is delightful. If seems to follow the same cadence as Casey at the Bat, The cremation of Sam McGee, Little Orphan Annie and other story poems. Keep writing these. Wish I still had a six.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so much.....these are fun to bounce around with although a little sloppy......Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

I like the following paragraph: "Guiding the small fishing boats
Through the marshes and the bog, Spandy and Spree led the anglers Through the grim and darkening fog..."

This reminds me that everything on earth has its purpose and its meaning. People should live a meaning full life.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so very much......I like to scribble these little spickles and spackles.....mostly for kids.......Godspeed and Best Wishes......Stu Harrell

Comment from palmart

Excellent

Great Story direct to readers` hearts! Fireflies can also be characters in an old tale like this one. You put your magnifying glass directly in those tiny insects that can relate this nice story. Unfortunately, your decision of not placing an artwork to "fill the glass of the story" might be reconsidered. But it is fully respectable!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Yikes.....where do they get those whizbang illustrations?....I am scribbling on yellow legal pads...then retyping.....Thanks for your kind thoughts and good luck to you....."Dark Ages" Stu Harrell

reply by palmart on 12-Mar-2021

You´re very welcome, Stuart!!

Have a great weekend!!

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

your narrative poem is well-written, charming, and entertaining. The idea of the little fireflies helping the slaves escape to freedom is a[[ealing and uplifting.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so very much......obviously written for kids but fun to fiddle together.....Godspeed and Best Wishes......Stu Harrell

Comment from T.A. Walk

Excellent

Very cool, I remember a time when old legends and stories like this were commonplace. A shame these old tales from the past have gotten lost along the road of technology. Cool piece, good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021

Thanks so very much.....miss the old tale tellers who just made stuff up....Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell

reply by T.A. Walk on 12-Mar-2021

Yeah me too!! Sasquatches and Nessie?s and things... Good times!

Comment from QC Poet

Excellent

A very attention getting short tale and very interesting, great job on this themed writing. Liked it so much hope to read many more like this. Blessings to you and Thanks for Sharing your tale.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021

Thanks so much....I enjoy these little slap dash skits....admitting that many other contestants are more polished and literate...but I figure there is always a place for a little levity.....Godspeed and Best Wishes to you ....Stu Harrell