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Comment from Leann DS
this is an amusing script. I can picture the guy talking to all his different selves. Some corrections for your consideration are as follows:
Mmm, let's see what new torture my good twin will come up with it. Job, it's
My good twin will come up with.
already a broken record, pretending to be somebody else, already played that tune, and even I had made a fool of myself in multiple languages and roles. The only image I can't get rid of it's
can't get rid of is
I am depressed. Nothing goes as planned. I need ...thinking about tomorrow. I just want to leave in today!
Should it say... Leave it today?
Well done. Hugs.
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this is an amusing script. I can picture the guy talking to all his different selves. Some corrections for your consideration are as follows:
Mmm, let's see what new torture my good twin will come up with it. Job, it's
My good twin will come up with.
already a broken record, pretending to be somebody else, already played that tune, and even I had made a fool of myself in multiple languages and roles. The only image I can't get rid of it's
can't get rid of is
I am depressed. Nothing goes as planned. I need ...thinking about tomorrow. I just want to leave in today!
Should it say... Leave it today?
Well done. Hugs.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
Comment from DonandVicki
A fun monologue and this one if expanded could be played out on a stage. I enjoyed the images that you created and cannot wait for the continuation of the story.
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A fun monologue and this one if expanded could be played out on a stage. I enjoyed the images that you created and cannot wait for the continuation of the story.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
Comment from estory
This was a nice one as the two sides of yourself come up with an improvised Mexican vacation; featuring home made margarittas in the bathtub and the evil me playing marriachi. I liked the barbed dialogue and it really does speak to the frustrations of the epidemic and not being able to travel and get a break from the endless monotony. estory
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This was a nice one as the two sides of yourself come up with an improvised Mexican vacation; featuring home made margarittas in the bathtub and the evil me playing marriachi. I liked the barbed dialogue and it really does speak to the frustrations of the epidemic and not being able to travel and get a break from the endless monotony. estory
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL I am wondering from previous skits, if he can't pay his rent, how can he afford to go to Mexico, with or without COVID. Just saying? LOL I always enjoy reading your skits. To be honest, I happen to know a teacher who does that, she is always behind on her rent and etc, but takes trips to Las Vegas and stuff.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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LOL I am wondering from previous skits, if he can't pay his rent, how can he afford to go to Mexico, with or without COVID. Just saying? LOL I always enjoy reading your skits. To be honest, I happen to know a teacher who does that, she is always behind on her rent and etc, but takes trips to Las Vegas and stuff.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2021
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Ooops that's me🤭See I'm writing from experience 🤗
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
this is a slightly strange dispute to me. It seems that evil and normal have changed roles and positions. Therefore it is perhaps not surprising that they both declared their (fraternal) love for each other at the end.
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this is a slightly strange dispute to me. It seems that evil and normal have changed roles and positions. Therefore it is perhaps not surprising that they both declared their (fraternal) love for each other at the end.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
Comment from robyn corum
Iza,
I agree. hahaha I think these poor gals/guys DO need a break. Methinks they've been cooped up with each other far too long. Bless their hearts!
One nit:
--> here, you know (Corona) and all.
Thanks!
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Iza,
I agree. hahaha I think these poor gals/guys DO need a break. Methinks they've been cooped up with each other far too long. Bless their hearts!
One nit:
--> here, you know (Corona) and all.
Thanks!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! At least, they will have a mini-vacation even though it's imaginary. I do like the creativity and the hot water in the tub - but will both fit? Maybe enough margaritas and they won't care! Cute picture of Garfield!
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Lol! At least, they will have a mini-vacation even though it's imaginary. I do like the creativity and the hot water in the tub - but will both fit? Maybe enough margaritas and they won't care! Cute picture of Garfield!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
More snide and snappy banter between the two of "you"! Dark humor re Coronella mandating a stay-cation. Witty dialog--love the multi-language play and clever rhyme.
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More snide and snappy banter between the two of "you"! Dark humor re Coronella mandating a stay-cation. Witty dialog--love the multi-language play and clever rhyme.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2021
