Betrayal
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Comment from DSchlosser
Woo! Things are heating up again. I've dealt with mothers in my line of work who have disregarded their children's welfare, but the hatred of her son in this novel is pretty severe. Usually that only comes from people are fairly crazy in real life. I look forward to seeing how Grant will deal with the two villains in this book.
Great writing! Again no errors that I could find in this chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Woo! Things are heating up again. I've dealt with mothers in my line of work who have disregarded their children's welfare, but the hatred of her son in this novel is pretty severe. Usually that only comes from people are fairly crazy in real life. I look forward to seeing how Grant will deal with the two villains in this book.
Great writing! Again no errors that I could find in this chapter.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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She is a nasty peice of work, as you'll see soon. I had plenty of suggestions from reviewers as to what I should do with her, Lol, not nice ones, either. Thank you for another lovely review and for those lovely six stars. You're so kind. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Good stuff once again. The mum is a nasty piece fo work and the legal wrangling begins!
Grant had kept tabs on what was happening with Colin. After the surgeon had wired his jaw, he'd been transferred to the prison hospital to await the first hearing of his trial. At least, that was what Grant had first been told- this is a little repetitive as you tell us the same information at the start of the previous section.
I know the truth of what really happened when I was a toddler,- it may just be me but I feel 'toddler' be be too young to be fully aware of this kind of thing, certainly to understand it anyway. (between 1 and four)
All the best
G
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Hi Sandra,
Good stuff once again. The mum is a nasty piece fo work and the legal wrangling begins!
Grant had kept tabs on what was happening with Colin. After the surgeon had wired his jaw, he'd been transferred to the prison hospital to await the first hearing of his trial. At least, that was what Grant had first been told- this is a little repetitive as you tell us the same information at the start of the previous section.
I know the truth of what really happened when I was a toddler,- it may just be me but I feel 'toddler' be be too young to be fully aware of this kind of thing, certainly to understand it anyway. (between 1 and four)
All the best
G
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Good catch! I've deleted the information at the beginning of this chapter. The second point about Grant being too young, it wasn't a memory, his grandfather told him what had happened a few chapters back. But, as you raised the issue, I thought it best to change it slightly....
?My grandfather told me the truth of what really happened when I was a toddler,...
That should remind readers. It was a good point to raise.
Thank you again, Gareth, I really appreciate your help in this! Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from DeboraDyess
Still here ...
~ After the surgeon had wired his jaw, he'd been transferred to the prison hospital >> This is repetitive. We don'tneed to be reminded. I'd leave this off and simply state that he was awaiting his trial in jail. Here, at least, prison is for folks who've been tried and found guilty. The await trial in jail. YOu know there far better than I, of course! lol
~Until then, don't go anywhere near them Okay, this is nit-picky. I'd not use 'them' here. I'd say names - either Collin and his mother or Collin and Ms. Harding or something. Just me, probably. lol
~ Oh, I love, love ve 'give you a bell' for 'phone call'! I think I might adopt it. lol
Onward and upward...
Debs
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Still here ...
~ After the surgeon had wired his jaw, he'd been transferred to the prison hospital >> This is repetitive. We don'tneed to be reminded. I'd leave this off and simply state that he was awaiting his trial in jail. Here, at least, prison is for folks who've been tried and found guilty. The await trial in jail. YOu know there far better than I, of course! lol
~Until then, don't go anywhere near them Okay, this is nit-picky. I'd not use 'them' here. I'd say names - either Collin and his mother or Collin and Ms. Harding or something. Just me, probably. lol
~ Oh, I love, love ve 'give you a bell' for 'phone call'! I think I might adopt it. lol
Onward and upward...
Debs
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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All done! My manuscript will be perfect!!! Not one American reviewer had heard of 'give you a bell' and some wanted me to change it. But I didn't. It's one of those expressions that go back to when the phones did sound like a bell. I'm glad you liked it. Another hug, my friend. You are going to be smothered in hugs by the time I've finished here. :)) xxxx Sandra
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Be on the guard for the bad man! Colin must be caught. He has made life miserable and dangerous for the women in this story. They deserve some satisfaction in knowing they are safe.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Be on the guard for the bad man! Colin must be caught. He has made life miserable and dangerous for the women in this story. They deserve some satisfaction in knowing they are safe.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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He must, but it's hard to keep him in jail. His day must surely come when he has to pay for what he has done. Thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Begin Again
Wonderful....well,d wonderful story and wonderful that I caught up, but really devastating for your characters. Manipulating women are the worse kind... I know you will give them what they deserve in the end. Smiles to you!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Wonderful....well,d wonderful story and wonderful that I caught up, but really devastating for your characters. Manipulating women are the worse kind... I know you will give them what they deserve in the end. Smiles to you!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Hi Carol, I can't thank you enough for reading every chapter up to today's chapter which I'll be posting later. You really have brightened my life. Thank you. I hope you will accept this thank you for all fourteen reviews here. Please check your messages. :)) Sandra xx
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Started to say Good Morning, but your day is far ahead of mine. I never expected you to answer all, I just wanted you to know how I loved each one. Have a great day or night LOL Smiles to you! Carol
Comment from muffinmama
And the tension rises again as the legal system is manipulated, creating potential danger to Tania.
You set up more future conflict with Colin.
Waiting for the next installment.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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And the tension rises again as the legal system is manipulated, creating potential danger to Tania.
You set up more future conflict with Colin.
Waiting for the next installment.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This time he knows Grant is on to him. Thank you so much for reading this part, I'm just sorry you missed out on the member cents. Next one coming tomorrow. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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I don't care about the member cents! I'm having fun.
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Aw, thank you! xx
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Sandra.
There many complicating factors that have arisen as we move along in the story. One of the most prominent is the family situation. This has to make things very uncomfortable for Grant.
For me the focus has moved away from the relationship between Grant and Tania and it is moved to the prosecution of Colin.
The family factors certainly complicated everything.
Robert
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Hello Sandra.
There many complicating factors that have arisen as we move along in the story. One of the most prominent is the family situation. This has to make things very uncomfortable for Grant.
For me the focus has moved away from the relationship between Grant and Tania and it is moved to the prosecution of Colin.
The family factors certainly complicated everything.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Wait until the next part, Robert. All will sort itself out. :)) Keep your first thoughts in your mind. Lol. Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, I do enjoy reading your thoughts on each part. Sending you a virtual hug! :)) Sandra xx
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Patty Cicero
"She even turned her back on me at his funeral. I went over and spoke to her, to thank her for coming, but was soon put in my place ... Wait a minute!' He thumped Lorna's desk, making her jump"
^very enjoyable. I will need to jump back a bit to read previous chapters & catch up.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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"She even turned her back on me at his funeral. I went over and spoke to her, to thank her for coming, but was soon put in my place ... Wait a minute!' He thumped Lorna's desk, making her jump"
^very enjoyable. I will need to jump back a bit to read previous chapters & catch up.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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That would be wonderful, thank you so much, Patty. That's the best type of review a writer could ask for. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh no!! Colin out on bail, I know he will try to get to Tania, he won't stay on his meds and his mom won't be able to control him. A great chapter. Looking forward to the next! Hurry! =]
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Oh no!! Colin out on bail, I know he will try to get to Tania, he won't stay on his meds and his mom won't be able to control him. A great chapter. Looking forward to the next! Hurry! =]
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Rox. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Now let's see what Grant does now. Sending you a warm hug. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
I can so identify with this chapter! I had to address things a member of my family claimed had happened in the past that were a figment of his imagination, and send copies of my email to other members of the family to stop him from doing it again. You nailed that perfectly in this beautifully written chapter, and I felt my blood boil in sympathy with Grant.
Here's hoping Colin can't get near Tania again - fingers crossed!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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I can so identify with this chapter! I had to address things a member of my family claimed had happened in the past that were a figment of his imagination, and send copies of my email to other members of the family to stop him from doing it again. You nailed that perfectly in this beautifully written chapter, and I felt my blood boil in sympathy with Grant.
Here's hoping Colin can't get near Tania again - fingers crossed!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Alexis. Everyone is on Grant's side now. Once they knew what had been happening in his life they could see why he'd been like he was. Now, Tania has shown him that women are not all the same, and that includes his mother as well. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part, my friend. Warm hugs and love, Sandra xxx
