The Homeless Man's Dream
poem using given words.13 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling and powerful--vivid imagery--brilliant incorporation of the requisite words--I'd never have guessed their were constraints--not a word sounds forced! Stunning piece. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Startling and powerful--vivid imagery--brilliant incorporation of the requisite words--I'd never have guessed their were constraints--not a word sounds forced! Stunning piece. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you very much and sorry for the delay in replying.
Comment from LJbutterfly
You've done an excellent job crafting a flash fiction story using the required words of the contest. This is creative and riveting with a note of sadness. The artwork you chose pairs perfectly. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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You've done an excellent job crafting a flash fiction story using the required words of the contest. This is creative and riveting with a note of sadness. The artwork you chose pairs perfectly. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Homeless Man's Dream, builds on a man's needs that are as real as a home, as clothing, or as a meal to eat. Hunger presents itself in our dreams so there is no escape.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This poem, The Homeless Man's Dream, builds on a man's needs that are as real as a home, as clothing, or as a meal to eat. Hunger presents itself in our dreams so there is no escape.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Wendy G
What a sad poem, and yet realistic at the same time. We catch a glimpse of the real person within, seeking to share a treat, and give pleasure to another person in poverty. But in vain. Still alone.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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What a sad poem, and yet realistic at the same time. We catch a glimpse of the real person within, seeking to share a treat, and give pleasure to another person in poverty. But in vain. Still alone.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
If I can summarize your story, I will say the homeless man wish for a warm embrace and another human approach. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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If I can summarize your story, I will say the homeless man wish for a warm embrace and another human approach. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture... It seems like there are more and more homeless people on the street. This is a bad sign. Our government needs to turn the economy around and find more jobs for people.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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I like the picture... It seems like there are more and more homeless people on the street. This is a bad sign. Our government needs to turn the economy around and find more jobs for people.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from equestrik
Well, I have to say that I was hoping for a better ending but the truth is, that often there are not happy endings. You developed your character well with your descriptios. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Well, I have to say that I was hoping for a better ending but the truth is, that often there are not happy endings. You developed your character well with your descriptios. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a different take for this contest. Most of the entries are about winter leaving and Spring coming soon. Your poem took on a whole different take to the contest. Good luck!
Patty
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This is a different take for this contest. Most of the entries are about winter leaving and Spring coming soon. Your poem took on a whole different take to the contest. Good luck!
Patty
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from PENofFIRE
Your poem told a sad story. You used the specified very well. This is an unusual approach to the prompt. You did a great Job. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Your poem told a sad story. You used the specified very well. This is an unusual approach to the prompt. You did a great Job. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have made good use of the designated words to tell the story of this homeless man, shown in the picture you chose. I would think that loneliness would be the worst part of being homeless.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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You have made good use of the designated words to tell the story of this homeless man, shown in the picture you chose. I would think that loneliness would be the worst part of being homeless.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome
