Driving Miss Vivian
Her new car and Vivian on full display31 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
Miss Vivian it seems has ideas above her station and abover unprepossessing chauffeur as well.
I wasn't sure whether this was supposed to be a period piece or whether the caddy was an old banger just new to her.
You were asked for a story of 150 words. This has 145 so I fear it will not feature on the leader board of the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Miss Vivian it seems has ideas above her station and abover unprepossessing chauffeur as well.
I wasn't sure whether this was supposed to be a period piece or whether the caddy was an old banger just new to her.
You were asked for a story of 150 words. This has 145 so I fear it will not feature on the leader board of the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the review.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Begin Again
A flash fiction contest entry - Good for you! It is so difficult to describe flamboyant characters and their vehicles in so few words, but you did it with ease. Should be a contender! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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A flash fiction contest entry - Good for you! It is so difficult to describe flamboyant characters and their vehicles in so few words, but you did it with ease. Should be a contender! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your kind words and review.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the car... I once had a Fleetwood too... but a different model. You did a good job describing the characters of both Vivian and Eddie, the chauffeur.
I like Vivian waving as the car moves...
Thank you for sharing the story with us.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I like the car... I once had a Fleetwood too... but a different model. You did a good job describing the characters of both Vivian and Eddie, the chauffeur.
I like Vivian waving as the car moves...
Thank you for sharing the story with us.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind comments and review.
Regards,
Mary
Comment from Mabaker12
Short and sweet this was obviously a contest entry and just as obvious to a certain number of words? I was getting interested when Bam! Everything stopped. I was enjoying what I read. Hope you do/did well in the contest. Regards Mabaker12
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Short and sweet this was obviously a contest entry and just as obvious to a certain number of words? I was getting interested when Bam! Everything stopped. I was enjoying what I read. Hope you do/did well in the contest. Regards Mabaker12
Comment Written 12-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Thank you, your right I kept it short for the contest. i hope to expand on it later.
Regards,
Mary
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you're welcome
Comment from Norm Valentine
Funny story. Have them fed by Ned. Like the detail like Vivian's flowered hat and handkerchief and Eddie's donkey laugh. And can you really have too many cats?
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Funny story. Have them fed by Ned. Like the detail like Vivian's flowered hat and handkerchief and Eddie's donkey laugh. And can you really have too many cats?
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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thank you
Comment from amada
This was a delightful flash ride. I wish there was more to the story. I loved the original Driving Miss Daisy, her dry humor and her chauffeur well-mannered answers. It was a different story to read and enjoy.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This was a delightful flash ride. I wish there was more to the story. I loved the original Driving Miss Daisy, her dry humor and her chauffeur well-mannered answers. It was a different story to read and enjoy.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you. I truly appreciate your kind words and 3.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Judy Lawless
This was so much fun to read! You've painted the picture well with your descriptions. I can just see Vivian sitting in the back, and I can hear the sound of Eddie sucking in his breath and laughing like a donkey. Well done!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This was so much fun to read! You've painted the picture well with your descriptions. I can just see Vivian sitting in the back, and I can hear the sound of Eddie sucking in his breath and laughing like a donkey. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you Judy. I appreciate your kind comments and review.
Regards
Mary
Comment from Susan Larson
Oh, I remember those Cadillacs! Your descriptions of Miss Vivian and Eddie are very vivid and realistic. It's easy to imagine both of them. It's funny about the beer runs. Back then, no propa' lady would be seen buying beer!
I think this will do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Oh, I remember those Cadillacs! Your descriptions of Miss Vivian and Eddie are very vivid and realistic. It's easy to imagine both of them. It's funny about the beer runs. Back then, no propa' lady would be seen buying beer!
I think this will do well in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you Susan. I truly appreciate your kind thoughts and review.
Take care and regards,
Mary
Comment from Susan Newell
You have composed a fascinating story with few words, and developed two very recognizable and memorable characters. The reader would be helped by line spaces between paragraphs.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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You have composed a fascinating story with few words, and developed two very recognizable and memorable characters. The reader would be helped by line spaces between paragraphs.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your kind review and comments. I agree with you about the spacing but for some reason it increases the word count.
Regards
Mary
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The FanStory word count isn't correct. Use a word processor, or count by hand and make mention in your notes of how you arrived at the count.
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Thank you for the information.
I now know better.
Regards
Mary
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Thank you for the information.
I now know better.
Regards
Mary
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Thank you for the information.
I now know better.
Regards
Mary
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Thank you for the information.
I now know better.
Regards
Mary
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Thank you for the information.
I now know better.
Regards
Mary
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That info was passed on to me by a very experienced person here.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Your story is amusing and a good picture of your two fictionalize characters. One thing I might suggest is use a flowered hat as in 1959 backseats were so high that any brim at all tended to push hats over the face. Best of luck with this.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Your story is amusing and a good picture of your two fictionalize characters. One thing I might suggest is use a flowered hat as in 1959 backseats were so high that any brim at all tended to push hats over the face. Best of luck with this.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Wow, Carol I would have never known or thought of that. Thank you for this knowledge.
Thank you for the review and comments. A flowered hat it is.
Mary