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Aiona's Poems

Viewing comments for Chapter 107 "Learning to Ride"
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Comment from dragonpoet
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Aiona,
There is always a danger in riding down your first hill. You can imagine the scene very well from the words.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
    Thanks, Joan.
reply by dragonpoet on 25-Mar-2021
    You're welcome, Aiona.
    Joan
Comment from lyenochka
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From a mom's standpoint, I think I would prefer the school running track! Thanks for the funny poem and I hope those were thornless bushes that served as brakes. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
    Thanks, lyenochka. Actually I haven't been able to bring myself to let go of his bike seat.....
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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I say the flat school running track. My heart would be in my mouth if my children were learning to bike on a hill. Does that mean you have to be there with them?

Ralf

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
    Yeah. I'm definitely watching him.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Ha ha ha, you made me smile here, this sounds like me when I first learned how to ski, I should have learned how to stop first! This little biker has brakes at least, a fun post, good rhymes and a fun message, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
    I hope your skiing's improved! Yeah, I learned to stop by falling down..... heh! There's more than one way to learn to ride!
Comment from donette1914
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I can really picture this it can be scary of little ones getting hurt
so creative and original
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with a well penned poem
I hope for the best in the contest

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
    Thanks, donnette1914.