Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 105 "Spring and Summer of 1988"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
It's amazing, how much you had going on, for a family with only one child who was still a minor! But I should know, from my own family, from how my brother and I continued to rely on our parents a lot as adults, that you never really stop being a mother and father. And you had four of them!
Of course, Carol seemed to take more attention than the other three put together, being 15 and rebellious. That was some crazy story about the eye makeup fire, in the girls' bathroom! My friends and I used to smoke in the bathroom, and the school even allowed it -- that was the 1970s!
Here are my suggestions:
The fire department was called. and the school was evacuated.
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The fire department was called, and the school was evacuated.
Connie claimed they thought the flame was out when they left and went to chapel.
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Connie claimed they thought the flame was out, when they left and went to chapel.
It is a beautiful area North of us. It has a spectactular waterfall.
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It was a beautiful area, north of us, with a spectacular waterfall.
Then, she started finding faults like she usually did with guys.
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Then, she started finding faults, as she usually did with guys she dated.
School was out for the summer, Connie made terrible grades on everything except P.E.
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School was out for the summer, after Connie made terrible grades on everything except P.E.
...and he hoped to get into Chiropractic College in January.
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...and he hoped to get into chiropractic college in January.
Connie was getting some babysitting jobs from David Erwin who was raising his little girl alone.
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Connie was getting some babysitting jobs from David Erwin, who was raising his little girl alone.
...and won an all expense trip to Las Vegas for two,
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...and won an all-expense trip to Las Vegas for two,
Riverbend Festival is a week long extravangza ...
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Riverbend Festival is a week-long extravaganza ...
...I got free tickets at work and you and I went a couple of nights.
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... I got free tickets at work, and you and I went a couple of nights.
You worked so hard you lost about 17 pounds.
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You worked so hard, that you lost about 17 pounds.
...but they did a through exam ...
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...but they did a thorough exam ...
Valerie, Connie's friend from school was a bad influence.
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Valerie, Connie's friend from school, was a bad influence.
We thought maybe Connie could make up some of bad grades she had gotten during the school year.
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We thought maybe Connie could make up for some of the bad grades she had gotten during the school year.
The price for the center was $75 for the initial test and then $25 per hour after that.
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The price for the center was $75 for the initial test, and then $25 per hour after that.
The test showed that Connie scored high on reading comprehension ...
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The test showed that Connie scored high on reading comprehension, ...
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I think Connie was being very honest about her disappointment, leaving the old neighborhood behind, but there was probably more to it than that, since she was already having problems before you moved. It sounds like both Don and Christi had some dating issues. And your husband was having some trouble handling stress; maybe he just wasn't used to not working? Apparently it turned out alright, as I read in the Prologue that he lived a fairly long life -- it sounds as though he lived well into his eighties, although it's never long enough, when you love someone.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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It's amazing, how much you had going on, for a family with only one child who was still a minor! But I should know, from my own family, from how my brother and I continued to rely on our parents a lot as adults, that you never really stop being a mother and father. And you had four of them!
Of course, Carol seemed to take more attention than the other three put together, being 15 and rebellious. That was some crazy story about the eye makeup fire, in the girls' bathroom! My friends and I used to smoke in the bathroom, and the school even allowed it -- that was the 1970s!
Here are my suggestions:
The fire department was called. and the school was evacuated.
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The fire department was called, and the school was evacuated.
Connie claimed they thought the flame was out when they left and went to chapel.
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Connie claimed they thought the flame was out, when they left and went to chapel.
It is a beautiful area North of us. It has a spectactular waterfall.
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It was a beautiful area, north of us, with a spectacular waterfall.
Then, she started finding faults like she usually did with guys.
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Then, she started finding faults, as she usually did with guys she dated.
School was out for the summer, Connie made terrible grades on everything except P.E.
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School was out for the summer, after Connie made terrible grades on everything except P.E.
...and he hoped to get into Chiropractic College in January.
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...and he hoped to get into chiropractic college in January.
Connie was getting some babysitting jobs from David Erwin who was raising his little girl alone.
-->
Connie was getting some babysitting jobs from David Erwin, who was raising his little girl alone.
...and won an all expense trip to Las Vegas for two,
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...and won an all-expense trip to Las Vegas for two,
Riverbend Festival is a week long extravangza ...
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Riverbend Festival is a week-long extravaganza ...
...I got free tickets at work and you and I went a couple of nights.
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... I got free tickets at work, and you and I went a couple of nights.
You worked so hard you lost about 17 pounds.
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You worked so hard, that you lost about 17 pounds.
...but they did a through exam ...
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...but they did a thorough exam ...
Valerie, Connie's friend from school was a bad influence.
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Valerie, Connie's friend from school, was a bad influence.
We thought maybe Connie could make up some of bad grades she had gotten during the school year.
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We thought maybe Connie could make up for some of the bad grades she had gotten during the school year.
The price for the center was $75 for the initial test and then $25 per hour after that.
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The price for the center was $75 for the initial test, and then $25 per hour after that.
The test showed that Connie scored high on reading comprehension ...
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The test showed that Connie scored high on reading comprehension, ...
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I think Connie was being very honest about her disappointment, leaving the old neighborhood behind, but there was probably more to it than that, since she was already having problems before you moved. It sounds like both Don and Christi had some dating issues. And your husband was having some trouble handling stress; maybe he just wasn't used to not working? Apparently it turned out alright, as I read in the Prologue that he lived a fairly long life -- it sounds as though he lived well into his eighties, although it's never long enough, when you love someone.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much Mary Kay, I feel bad that this was no longer active. Please don't feel you have do all that work. I really appreciate you so much. Maybe they will lit me nominate you since it is March. Evan wasn't used to dealing with kids and it was stressful. When he worked it was mostly my job.Connie put us through a lot we didn't get from the other and maybe it was because she didn't get as much hands on attention when she was young as the others did. Christi gave us problem with her jealousy issues. Those years weren't easy. but Even had been stressed as work and now he was stress with kids. It did have an affect on his health but he lived to be 88. Hew was nine years older than me.
Comment from Begin Again
Hi Beth! Sorry I've been gone for a few days so I'm behind on reading...life does that to us sometimes as you so well know. Thanks for sharing those "I'm about to be smarter and more grownup" years with us. I wonder if they ever grow out of it. Smiles to you!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Hi Beth! Sorry I've been gone for a few days so I'm behind on reading...life does that to us sometimes as you so well know. Thanks for sharing those "I'm about to be smarter and more grownup" years with us. I wonder if they ever grow out of it. Smiles to you!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Sometimes they grow up in some ways. In other ways, I think all of may never completely grow up. LOL.
Beth
Comment from RetroStarfish
Again this chapter is wonderfully written. You have a gift for detail and I wonder if you kept a diary, which helped you remember these things. The opening sequence about the taxes is so telling about both you and your husband.
I also feel like this chapter might be foreshadowing what's to come. More trouble for Connie? Your husband's health?
I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Again this chapter is wonderfully written. You have a gift for detail and I wonder if you kept a diary, which helped you remember these things. The opening sequence about the taxes is so telling about both you and your husband.
I also feel like this chapter might be foreshadowing what's to come. More trouble for Connie? Your husband's health?
I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review. I did keep a diary for a few years after I moved to Chattanooga. Before that I didn't and I've gotten a little bit of the story out of sequence from the way my children remember it.
Yes, there is some foreshadowing with Connie and my husband as well. Life never goes completely smoothly.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You already know I love the story. I am worried about Connie. Thank you for sharing.
Her relationships never lasted very long She always found a reason to sabotage them. (Probably a period is needed after long.)
Valerie, Connie's friend from school was a bad influence on her. (You don't need 'on her' it's redunit.)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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You already know I love the story. I am worried about Connie. Thank you for sharing.
Her relationships never lasted very long She always found a reason to sabotage them. (Probably a period is needed after long.)
Valerie, Connie's friend from school was a bad influence on her. (You don't need 'on her' it's redunit.)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you Barbara. I appreciate the review and comment and suggestions. I so glad you are enjoying my story.
Beth
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Beth, as you know, I enjoy this project of capturing these memories for your children and the way you've decided to do it. I appreciate you sharing all of these memories.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Beth, as you know, I enjoy this project of capturing these memories for your children and the way you've decided to do it. I appreciate you sharing all of these memories.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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I appreciate you continuing to read my story. I always enjoy your comments.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Very good Beth. I can see the hubby doing the taxes for I did ours every year. If I had a problem I would get IRS to do them.
Christie sounds like my Angel Faith. Not good in math but good in most other sub.
I really enjoy reading your life story,
Sorry to be late. Been out of it lately.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Very good Beth. I can see the hubby doing the taxes for I did ours every year. If I had a problem I would get IRS to do them.
Christie sounds like my Angel Faith. Not good in math but good in most other sub.
I really enjoy reading your life story,
Sorry to be late. Been out of it lately.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and for all the stars. If we are completely truthful, I'm afraid our children don't always behave the perfect way we would like too. I wasn't the perfect child either.
Beth
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Really? Imagine that!
Comment from Lyn Peters
All I can say is, thank you for continuing to share these very personal memories of a busy and loving family. Your work reminds us all that families of all shapes and sizes struggle in various ways (and, with love and luck, manage through the rough spots). Best regards.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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All I can say is, thank you for continuing to share these very personal memories of a busy and loving family. Your work reminds us all that families of all shapes and sizes struggle in various ways (and, with love and luck, manage through the rough spots). Best regards.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the review and comments. Like all family we had our good moment and stressful one. Things never go completely smoothly but it is all worth the effort.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
So Connie is at it again, blaming it on the move, the school. I just hope her new friend doesn't get her into more trouble and the tutor will help improve her grades. Hopefully, Christi will do better with her finances. I'm glad to see Don and Kimberly together again. Maybe the scare proved to them how much they mean to each other. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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So Connie is at it again, blaming it on the move, the school. I just hope her new friend doesn't get her into more trouble and the tutor will help improve her grades. Hopefully, Christi will do better with her finances. I'm glad to see Don and Kimberly together again. Maybe the scare proved to them how much they mean to each other. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for continuing to read and comment on my story. Connie will continue to keep giving us problems for a while. Christi will never learn who to manage her finances. I telling it all, good and not so good. LOL
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You seem to have had your hands full with Connie. She certainly managed to keep you and Evan on the edge. The ups and downs of our children seem to never stop during their youth, but thankfully as they mature things usually improve. No one is perfect and we all get to find that out.
LOL
Ralf
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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You seem to have had your hands full with Connie. She certainly managed to keep you and Evan on the edge. The ups and downs of our children seem to never stop during their youth, but thankfully as they mature things usually improve. No one is perfect and we all get to find that out.
LOL
Ralf
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2021
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YOu are right about that. I'm glad they finally grow up but there is always some drama going on in their lives even now. I'm just not always in the middle of like I was back then. Thanks for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
As always you have interesting memories. You might mention names of some of the best performers you saw at the Festival. I saw only one thing you might want to change. In the paragraph beginning--"School was out . . ." you repeated "she thought" twice. Looking forward to the next portion of your life.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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As always you have interesting memories. You might mention names of some of the best performers you saw at the Festival. I saw only one thing you might want to change. In the paragraph beginning--"School was out . . ." you repeated "she thought" twice. Looking forward to the next portion of your life.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Since it was in Tennessee there were a lot of country stars on the main stage. I remember the Gatlin brothers and Travis Twitt also there was Queen Latifah and Janet Jackson and many others I can't seem to remember. Some of the smaller stages featured local talent.
I really appreciate your revew and I hope you keep reading;
Beth
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Lots of people have no idea Queen Latifah was a singer.
