Seashore and Sunshine
Dreaming for another day at the beach.7 total reviews
Comment from royowen
We're still in that time of the year when the sun is still shining and the temperature is high. Beautifully written, this tyburn poem a good example of this unusual form, well done, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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We're still in that time of the year when the sun is still shining and the temperature is high. Beautifully written, this tyburn poem a good example of this unusual form, well done, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for sharing your kind thoughts, great review and well wishes.
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh those were the days when we took holidays to far off places and enjoyed the seas, the sand and sun, I am hoping these days will return for us all very soon, an uplifting Tyburn poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Oh those were the days when we took holidays to far off places and enjoyed the seas, the sand and sun, I am hoping these days will return for us all very soon, an uplifting Tyburn poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for your kind comments and wonderful review. Enjoy your evening!
Comment from LisaMay
This is a wonderful variant on the usual 2-syllable rhyming I've seen in this contest. Your poem brings welcome rays of sunshine to the competition and I hope your entry wins.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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This is a wonderful variant on the usual 2-syllable rhyming I've seen in this contest. Your poem brings welcome rays of sunshine to the competition and I hope your entry wins.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for your kind comments with this wonderful review. A challenging and fun word game! Lol!
Comment from kahpot
I love the image these words give us, one thought though, I think that the first, second, third, and fourth lines are to be incorporated in the fifth and sixth lines as syllables 5 through 8 your poem has them at 6 through 9 you may want to check this, very well presented and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I love the image these words give us, one thought though, I think that the first, second, third, and fourth lines are to be incorporated in the fifth and sixth lines as syllables 5 through 8 your poem has them at 6 through 9 you may want to check this, very well presented and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Oh, thank you so much for bringing this to my attention! Ok... got some work to do...lol. Sincerest appreciation!
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Hello. I have done my homework and revised my structure as you brought to my attention. Would love it if you care to review my revision. Thanks again so much for waking me up. Lol!
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Very well corrected, and you have kept the message intact, again best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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I truly appreciate you helping me along with this step that slipped by me. Of the reviews that I received, you were the only reviewer that gave me honest and considerate advice, and then replied again. I am trying to find where it is that I can nominate you for reviewer recognition. Could you direct me to the page where this found? tnx, sue
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Hello, that is not necessary, I like reading works that have meaning and if I think I can help I gladly do so, you will find many that will help and be constructive, I also looked at the other tyburn entries and they all seem to have (one word) two syllables for the first 4 lines, I am not sure if that is a requirement, but your work inspired me to have a try, your meaning and message is great****kahpot
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Nice descriptive words to describe your love of the beach. Nicely rhymed. I long for summertime and going to the beach again also. It's my favourite place to be. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This is a nicely written poem. Nice descriptive words to describe your love of the beach. Nicely rhymed. I long for summertime and going to the beach again also. It's my favourite place to be. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for sharing your kind thoughts and wonderful review. Truly appreciated!
Comment from donette1914
Warm sand.
Sun tanned.
Day planned.
How grand.
I would love to see the ocean its been so long to lay out and get a suntan. I hope the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Warm sand.
Sun tanned.
Day planned.
How grand.
I would love to see the ocean its been so long to lay out and get a suntan. I hope the best in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I am so very grateful for your kind wishes and terrific review. Thank you.
Comment from RodG
Poet, you make me envious of those in Florida who CAN enjoy all that "warm sand" and get "sun tanned." Your rhymes are very well chosen to give us an idea of what we're missing. Rod
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Poet, you make me envious of those in Florida who CAN enjoy all that "warm sand" and get "sun tanned." Your rhymes are very well chosen to give us an idea of what we're missing. Rod
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for sharing your kind thoughts on my poem. Much appreciation.
