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Comment from Nike23
I do not know your pain but I know it is great. My aunt lost my cousin and she always said that a mother should not have to bury their child. Your poem draws on that pain. I like the flow of it as well as your word choice.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I do not know your pain but I know it is great. My aunt lost my cousin and she always said that a mother should not have to bury their child. Your poem draws on that pain. I like the flow of it as well as your word choice.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I thank you and I really appreciate your review and comments.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like a person trying to come out of deep depression or grief.
Maybe this person is hiding behind a smile to make people think he/she is
ok. Luckily at the end faith and strength are found to break free.
I think that you need to remove all the question marks, except after You see and Who I am. Periods should be after Now you see me and Now you don't. Determine is written twice.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dp
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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This sounds like a person trying to come out of deep depression or grief.
Maybe this person is hiding behind a smile to make people think he/she is
ok. Luckily at the end faith and strength are found to break free.
I think that you need to remove all the question marks, except after You see and Who I am. Periods should be after Now you see me and Now you don't. Determine is written twice.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dp
Comment Written 20-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2021
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Well first off the picture is me and secondly we all have our own thing and unique way to present.
Thanks for your time
Doctor Ricky 1024
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You're welcome.
Joan
