Mama, Guess What I'm Going To Be
Easy as one, two three - Just my muse and me14 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
hello this is a good entry for this contest. I could hear the little girls voice in my head...and the way all arguments were met. Te ending is classic, well done for this.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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hello this is a good entry for this contest. I could hear the little girls voice in my head...and the way all arguments were met. Te ending is classic, well done for this.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate your kind words. Children have a different viewpoint on everything depending on the moment.
Comment from Jimmy Hogg
Yeah, could premise for the story, and it works, but there are a few things that jar a little-
"You mean the one that's still in the box?" Why is it in a box? That doesn't make sense to me.
"Interesting? Your muse, huh?" -Interesting shouldn't be a question.
Thanks for sharing. GL!
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Yeah, could premise for the story, and it works, but there are a few things that jar a little-
"You mean the one that's still in the box?" Why is it in a box? That doesn't make sense to me.
"Interesting? Your muse, huh?" -Interesting shouldn't be a question.
Thanks for sharing. GL!
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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It is still in the gift box that it came in because the young girl has not used it. Sorry that wasn't clear to you. Yes, I will correct the question mark. Thanks for pointing it out. Hope the jarring wasn't too stressful. LOL Thanks again.
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Haha, so it wasn't stressful at all.
Comment from Supe
Mama, our (no capital O)
I'm not sure if interesting needs a question mark. 10th paragraph
Remember that scary monster under your bed? (does)
What a cute little story. I enjoyed it and can appreciate this whole conversation as I have a six year old granddaughter myself. Good luck in the contest. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Mama, our (no capital O)
I'm not sure if interesting needs a question mark. 10th paragraph
Remember that scary monster under your bed? (does)
What a cute little story. I enjoyed it and can appreciate this whole conversation as I have a six year old granddaughter myself. Good luck in the contest. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope I've fixed the errors. Glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your time.
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you are so welcome.
Comment from Susan Newell
This was fun to read, and well written. It does seem as though Emma's muse is somewhat of aa cowardly lion. A very interesting take on the prompt. I liked that it was dialogue and not just a commentary on a single utterance.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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This was fun to read, and well written. It does seem as though Emma's muse is somewhat of aa cowardly lion. A very interesting take on the prompt. I liked that it was dialogue and not just a commentary on a single utterance.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind words and thoughts on the contest entry. Cowardly lion - most likely from a child, but given time, he or she shall roar. Appreciate your time and views.
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You are welcome.
