The Friendship Fence
Remembering my dear friend, Lois44 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
"And the winner is,,,(drum roll here) Nancy! Amada! I absolutely loved this little glimpse of life, Nancy. You penned it so very well and the story itself is precious fodder for the contest.. a true story. God bless Your friend and God bless you, too. I wish I had six stars left for you. Bob
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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"And the winner is,,,(drum roll here) Nancy! Amada! I absolutely loved this little glimpse of life, Nancy. You penned it so very well and the story itself is precious fodder for the contest.. a true story. God bless Your friend and God bless you, too. I wish I had six stars left for you. Bob
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I am very glad you stopped by to read about a part of my true life.
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Excellent, Nan. Bob
Comment from muffinmama
What a wonderful, heartwarming memory of a woman who obviously enriched your life with her warmth, good humor, compassion, shared laughter and blueberries.
We all need such a friend; few of us find one. I was lucky to have one of those too. Someone who makes you smile, even after they've passed on, has never really died.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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What a wonderful, heartwarming memory of a woman who obviously enriched your life with her warmth, good humor, compassion, shared laughter and blueberries.
We all need such a friend; few of us find one. I was lucky to have one of those too. Someone who makes you smile, even after they've passed on, has never really died.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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True friendships are like a gift for above...Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me...I'm honored.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is a very nice picture, amada.
-You wrote a very good story
about your friend, and I appreciate
your notes, too.
-I am sorry you lost this special
neighbor, but I am glad
you still feel the connection
by the fence.
-Your description is very good,
and the blueberry pie sounds delicious!
-You concluded the story very well,
showing how Lois has left you
"with an endless smile."
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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-It is a very nice picture, amada.
-You wrote a very good story
about your friend, and I appreciate
your notes, too.
-I am sorry you lost this special
neighbor, but I am glad
you still feel the connection
by the fence.
-Your description is very good,
and the blueberry pie sounds delicious!
-You concluded the story very well,
showing how Lois has left you
"with an endless smile."
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for your great review, Pam.
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You are very welcome, amada.
Comment from robyn corum
Amada,
What a sweet offering to your friend! I know she would love it and be so honored. The best gift we can give someone is to remember them, don't you think?
I liked this line, especially, with the double-edged use of steps:
The happy years, however, marked its steps, and one morning Lois lost her ability to walk.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Amada,
What a sweet offering to your friend! I know she would love it and be so honored. The best gift we can give someone is to remember them, don't you think?
I liked this line, especially, with the double-edged use of steps:
The happy years, however, marked its steps, and one morning Lois lost her ability to walk.
Thanks!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Robyn.
Comment from Dana Starr
Great job. I really liked Lois and you painted a pretty picture of what it was like to be her friend. I particularly liked the ending. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Great job. I really liked Lois and you painted a pretty picture of what it was like to be her friend. I particularly liked the ending. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I am delighted that you like OLois, too. I was lucky to have her in my life. Thank you for stopping by, Dana.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very heartwarming and short which makes it easier to read. Lois sounds like she'll be in your heart and soul with a lifetime of memories.
In the final summation, I notice you use the word "hello" twice very close together. I might suggest you choose another way to say the second 'hello' so as to not be repetitive. Just a thought, no pressure for sure. The artwork is special and suits the post well.
Thanks for sharing about the close friend you made and shared blueberry pie with, (among other things, of course).
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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This is very heartwarming and short which makes it easier to read. Lois sounds like she'll be in your heart and soul with a lifetime of memories.
In the final summation, I notice you use the word "hello" twice very close together. I might suggest you choose another way to say the second 'hello' so as to not be repetitive. Just a thought, no pressure for sure. The artwork is special and suits the post well.
Thanks for sharing about the close friend you made and shared blueberry pie with, (among other things, of course).
Jesse
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Hi jesse, thank you for reading my work and for noticing that double word. Luckily I fixed it already, I was rushing to post before the contest ended. Thanks!!
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You're very welcome! Good luck with the contest!
Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
What a very beautiful story of friendship, and the love and companionship between neighbours. I like the idea of a friendship fence. Your story is well- written. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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What a very beautiful story of friendship, and the love and companionship between neighbours. I like the idea of a friendship fence. Your story is well- written. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Your comments to my story are heart warming as well. Thank you, Wendy.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Friendship Fence
by amada
Hello, Amada,
Your friend, Lois sounds like a wonderful person. I'm sorry for your loss. In a short story managed to share with us the essence of your friendship. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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The Friendship Fence
by amada
Hello, Amada,
Your friend, Lois sounds like a wonderful person. I'm sorry for your loss. In a short story managed to share with us the essence of your friendship. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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You capture my story so well, Gypsy. This is the essence of a truly and great friendship...It lasts, still.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
In this short story, you managed to convert something sad (Lois' loss of ability to walk) into a strong, positive memory (the walking frame that kept her happily able to inspect her garden). I do not count death as something sad, it is a natural universal outcome to life. Thank you for sharing this excellent insight into your life. Katherine xx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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In this short story, you managed to convert something sad (Lois' loss of ability to walk) into a strong, positive memory (the walking frame that kept her happily able to inspect her garden). I do not count death as something sad, it is a natural universal outcome to life. Thank you for sharing this excellent insight into your life. Katherine xx
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for your great comments, Katherine. I was blessed to have lived so close to her.
Comment from Cass Carlton
I must commend you on the wisdom you've expressed in this piece. You had a dear friend who, sadly, has gone the way of all flesh.Now,instead of complaining about your loss, you speak of her lovingly, recalling her bright eyed gaze and unfailing ability to set your rocking boat straight and glide in untroubled waters. Many others have a different view on losing some-one dear to them,so your attitude is to be noted and encouraged.I have little doubt that at the time of loss your feelings were as raw and lacerated as the closest relation's.. But you have chosen to honour your dear one with a smile and a happy memory.Welll done cheers Cass
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I must commend you on the wisdom you've expressed in this piece. You had a dear friend who, sadly, has gone the way of all flesh.Now,instead of complaining about your loss, you speak of her lovingly, recalling her bright eyed gaze and unfailing ability to set your rocking boat straight and glide in untroubled waters. Many others have a different view on losing some-one dear to them,so your attitude is to be noted and encouraged.I have little doubt that at the time of loss your feelings were as raw and lacerated as the closest relation's.. But you have chosen to honour your dear one with a smile and a happy memory.Welll done cheers Cass
Comment Written 18-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your uplifting comments, dear Cass. I will always honor , Cass. True friends are like angels from above.
