Nine circles
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Comment from amada
This is a quite flash fiction story. It displays a lots of imagination, a good thing. All I can say is that Angie is a mighty clever lady. I hope she surfives all those circles.
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This is a quite flash fiction story. It displays a lots of imagination, a good thing. All I can say is that Angie is a mighty clever lady. I hope she surfives all those circles.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
Comment from Old Soldier
Nice story Up stairs and down, funny. What circle will we land in? Just a few things that caught my eye. I could be wrong.
Try, The ninth circle, eighth circle, seventh circle. You write, "circle was" should it be circle is?
You write, "Vodka's a high flammable Object." Try, Vodka's a highly flammable liquid. Just a few suggestion.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Nice story Up stairs and down, funny. What circle will we land in? Just a few things that caught my eye. I could be wrong.
Try, The ninth circle, eighth circle, seventh circle. You write, "circle was" should it be circle is?
You write, "Vodka's a high flammable Object." Try, Vodka's a highly flammable liquid. Just a few suggestion.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for your suggestions:)
Comment from Jean Lutz1
Language and some wording may "offend" some. You know what -- that is their problem and they might do best to first fix themselves before trying to fix others. Why some have to wander in circles for 40 years murmuring and complaining instead of obeying and trusting. Artwork and words work together in truth some cannot see because of scales over the eyes. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Language and some wording may "offend" some. You know what -- that is their problem and they might do best to first fix themselves before trying to fix others. Why some have to wander in circles for 40 years murmuring and complaining instead of obeying and trusting. Artwork and words work together in truth some cannot see because of scales over the eyes. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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I love your comments, it's scary how people nowadays are even offended by their own shadow:)
Comment from RetroStarfish
Very clever story. Nice choice of name too - Angie, short for Angela or angel. You've done a great job, although I think there's a typo in the first line. Nine circle(s) in nine days.
Not a biggie. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Very clever story. Nice choice of name too - Angie, short for Angela or angel. You've done a great job, although I think there's a typo in the first line. Nine circle(s) in nine days.
Not a biggie. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much and you are right Angie was my subtitle nudge towards Angel.
Comment from Lyn Peters
Really unique (and intriguing) take on the contest prompt. You've left this reader with a lot to think about, so I thank you for that. Wishing you all the best with your contest entry.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Really unique (and intriguing) take on the contest prompt. You've left this reader with a lot to think about, so I thank you for that. Wishing you all the best with your contest entry.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much Lyn:)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Last line is an interesting concept. Held interest throughout. Nine circles well detailed. Noted to nits or errors while reading this well written story.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Last line is an interesting concept. Held interest throughout. Nine circles well detailed. Noted to nits or errors while reading this well written story.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you:)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A ride through the sins of human nature here and arriving means we question everything, even our own sanity. A fun post and a very unusual thought process here and I was entertained, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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A ride through the sins of human nature here and arriving means we question everything, even our own sanity. A fun post and a very unusual thought process here and I was entertained, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Hello Ms. Dolly and thank you so much for your wonderful review.
