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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Heather Bache (nee Joliffe)"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
32 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It's five stars but should be six. Sorry, we run out of them so soon.
Your magnificent dialect throughout this story is stellar. The dialogue is also in that category. I see such a grand imagination that is weaving this tale and commend you for your steady work. I am truly impressed.
A lovely story.
Ralf
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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It's five stars but should be six. Sorry, we run out of them so soon.
Your magnificent dialect throughout this story is stellar. The dialogue is also in that category. I see such a grand imagination that is weaving this tale and commend you for your steady work. I am truly impressed.
A lovely story.
Ralf
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Thank you again for continuing to play catchup for little reward. I am most grateful.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Tommy obviously feels he's got information to share with Peter Allen.You've written the initial conversation between Heather and Tommy very well, realistic and emotional.
What was it about her, she wondered, that could inspire such love.- liked that line. Great chapter, well told, sorry I've not got a 6 left.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Tommy obviously feels he's got information to share with Peter Allen.You've written the initial conversation between Heather and Tommy very well, realistic and emotional.
What was it about her, she wondered, that could inspire such love.- liked that line. Great chapter, well told, sorry I've not got a 6 left.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for this review. Not to worry about the lack of stars. It is what is said that is important to me.
Comment from roof35
I cannot decide if you are going to leave things as a "suicide" or more is to come. Heather did have the love of two good Toms. Interesting chapter and well written.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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I cannot decide if you are going to leave things as a "suicide" or more is to come. Heather did have the love of two good Toms. Interesting chapter and well written.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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I think Allen is leaving his options open for the time being. Many thanks for this six-star review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Sanku
This was a very endearing scene -a couple totally honest with each other forming a firm and steady bond. I did have little difficulty following their slang but it was realistic. And I think this is the first chapter without the presence of the lawyer...
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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This was a very endearing scene -a couple totally honest with each other forming a firm and steady bond. I did have little difficulty following their slang but it was realistic. And I think this is the first chapter without the presence of the lawyer...
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reviewing. Yes, Allen took a break this time but he will be back next time.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image to set the scene,
and the chapter is very good.
-It flowed smoothly and the
discussion between Heather and
Tommy was very good, and also
very revealing.
-It is understandable that Heather
would be upset from the memories,
but Tommy was there for her, and
they have had a good life together,
and that is the best way for them to
have reached the conclusion they
did about speaking with Peter Allen-together.
-I am glad they are, and I look forwared
to knowing more about the story.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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-A good image to set the scene,
and the chapter is very good.
-It flowed smoothly and the
discussion between Heather and
Tommy was very good, and also
very revealing.
-It is understandable that Heather
would be upset from the memories,
but Tommy was there for her, and
they have had a good life together,
and that is the best way for them to
have reached the conclusion they
did about speaking with Peter Allen-together.
-I am glad they are, and I look forwared
to knowing more about the story.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2021
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The story should really start to be resolved soon. Thank you so much for this supportive review.
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You are very welcome and thanks for your reply.
Comment from estory
I thought you had a powerful scene here with these two pouring their hearts out to each other about their involvement in this mysterious murder many years ago. The voices here were taught with emotion and as we overhear their love for each other, their pain at having witnessed the parts of this thing from different perspectives, and their trembling before telling the lawyer what they know, we get a glimpse into their souls. Wonderful honest language too with all the colloquialisms there to give it a deffinite time and place estory
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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I thought you had a powerful scene here with these two pouring their hearts out to each other about their involvement in this mysterious murder many years ago. The voices here were taught with emotion and as we overhear their love for each other, their pain at having witnessed the parts of this thing from different perspectives, and their trembling before telling the lawyer what they know, we get a glimpse into their souls. Wonderful honest language too with all the colloquialisms there to give it a deffinite time and place estory
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this complimentary review and for the specific areas singled out for special mention.
Comment from damommy
I almost missed this chapter because I didn't get a notice. That happens sometimes. I am impressed with the honest and trust this couple has with each other. I'm eager to see how their meeting goes with Peter. Very natural conversation, and great imagery.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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I almost missed this chapter because I didn't get a notice. That happens sometimes. I am impressed with the honest and trust this couple has with each other. I'm eager to see how their meeting goes with Peter. Very natural conversation, and great imagery.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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That will be revealed on Sunday! Yes sometimes the auto alert doesn't kick in. Many thanks for not missing it. I try to stick to posting on Wednesday and Sunday, fairly late on in those days in my time anyway.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Mesmerizing chapter. Part of the story told at last - but not all of it. You've still left Tommy's part to be told to the lawyer in the morning.
For some reason, in the mill scene, Tommy Bache struck me as a man of few words, yet this chapter opens with quite a speech from him. Of course, he had a lot to say to his wife, and proved himself thoughtful and caring. What a nicely drawn and sympathetic character.
And Heather has quite the naughty sense of humour. A nice touch in a very satisfying chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Mesmerizing chapter. Part of the story told at last - but not all of it. You've still left Tommy's part to be told to the lawyer in the morning.
For some reason, in the mill scene, Tommy Bache struck me as a man of few words, yet this chapter opens with quite a speech from him. Of course, he had a lot to say to his wife, and proved himself thoughtful and caring. What a nicely drawn and sympathetic character.
And Heather has quite the naughty sense of humour. A nice touch in a very satisfying chapter.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this review. I think people often come over as being different when you see them in their own homes.
Comment from tfawcus
At last, Peter Allen seems to be getting somewhere. You describe a loving relationship that seems to be unbreakable, even on the crumbling foundations of past events. The easy familiarity between husband and wife, and the mutual respect and love are depicted with sensitivity.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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At last, Peter Allen seems to be getting somewhere. You describe a loving relationship that seems to be unbreakable, even on the crumbling foundations of past events. The easy familiarity between husband and wife, and the mutual respect and love are depicted with sensitivity.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this encouraging review with it's kind words.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This novel full of surprises. Suddenly, the threads are kept carefully separate. If one new thread is started, previous ones are let fall by the wayside to give the reader the opportunity to concentrate on the new one. I am unsure as to whether this is the way to build up the richest story. Time will tell.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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This novel full of surprises. Suddenly, the threads are kept carefully separate. If one new thread is started, previous ones are let fall by the wayside to give the reader the opportunity to concentrate on the new one. I am unsure as to whether this is the way to build up the richest story. Time will tell.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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It seems to have worked so far but, as you say, time will tell. Many thanks for an interesting review.