I'd Give To You
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Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, I'd Give This to You, presented with 8-6-8-6 ABCB-rhymed quatrains, pulls the hyperbolic universe into play his gifts for one's loved one.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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This poem, I'd Give This to You, presented with 8-6-8-6 ABCB-rhymed quatrains, pulls the hyperbolic universe into play his gifts for one's loved one.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem, it's much appreciated. :)
Comment from Cecilia Lynne1
You have written an excellent 8-6-8 poem
Your poetic plan keeping in line with the theme of romance is superb
When reading your poetic presentation for me it exhibits emotions of great passion, positive change of personality as a result, super descriptive analogies. A very lovely presentation of feeling and dreams of a relationship with another human being.
My only concern for re-thought and change would be linked to
verse five and the rhyming. All of the other verses of lines 6 except for verse 5 rhyme well. Example: (need verses sea)
Comment noted only because it said in the instructions "to write a rhyming romantic poem". For me the latter comment should not detract in anyway from the overall beauty of your submission.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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You have written an excellent 8-6-8 poem
Your poetic plan keeping in line with the theme of romance is superb
When reading your poetic presentation for me it exhibits emotions of great passion, positive change of personality as a result, super descriptive analogies. A very lovely presentation of feeling and dreams of a relationship with another human being.
My only concern for re-thought and change would be linked to
verse five and the rhyming. All of the other verses of lines 6 except for verse 5 rhyme well. Example: (need verses sea)
Comment noted only because it said in the instructions "to write a rhyming romantic poem". For me the latter comment should not detract in anyway from the overall beauty of your submission.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful 6 star review and your helpful suggestions. I really appreciate it. :)
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You are welcome. Will look forward to more. All the best
Comment from Pantygynt
'For I have silver in the stars
and gold in the morning sun'
So goes the old song by Don Williams, 'Country Boy' and this poem reminded me of the old theme that 'Money Can't Buy Me Love' - that one was the Beatles of course. This written in ballad metre, iambic tetrameter alternating with iambic trimeter and rhyming abcb just like so many of the old traditional ballads.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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'For I have silver in the stars
and gold in the morning sun'
So goes the old song by Don Williams, 'Country Boy' and this poem reminded me of the old theme that 'Money Can't Buy Me Love' - that one was the Beatles of course. This written in ballad metre, iambic tetrameter alternating with iambic trimeter and rhyming abcb just like so many of the old traditional ballads.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you, I don't think I've ever heard that song... I'll be sure to check it out. Thank you for this nice review. :)
Comment from moonsunrise
This is such a beautiful poem of love. It flows so smoothly and your choice of words create a vivid visual even without the wonderful image you chose.
Thanks very much for sharing.
Your are such a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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This is such a beautiful poem of love. It flows so smoothly and your choice of words create a vivid visual even without the wonderful image you chose.
Thanks very much for sharing.
Your are such a gifted writer.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your kind words and taking time to read my poem. :)
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My pleasure.
Comment from Jean Lutz1
Gold and silver I do not have. All I have is a simple strand of six stars. I award it to you for your wordsmith excellence. Artwork is not needed but work in harmony -- like God said when he gave us his offering -- creation -- "All is good.".
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Gold and silver I do not have. All I have is a simple strand of six stars. I award it to you for your wordsmith excellence. Artwork is not needed but work in harmony -- like God said when he gave us his offering -- creation -- "All is good.".
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this stellar review, it makes my day. I'm always glad to hear from my fellow writers. :)
Comment from Sally Law
I apologise for no six. This is starry, sweet, and outstanding. My vote for the contest if we are able to vote. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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I apologise for no six. This is starry, sweet, and outstanding. My vote for the contest if we are able to vote. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It means a lot to me. :)
Comment from AnnieDawn
This is a beautiful love poem that graduates from I would give to the elements are stationary and you are all I need. It is nice to read a poem that does not have a lot of things that should be bleeped out but just plain emotion. Good luck in the contest this is a winner.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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This is a beautiful love poem that graduates from I would give to the elements are stationary and you are all I need. It is nice to read a poem that does not have a lot of things that should be bleeped out but just plain emotion. Good luck in the contest this is a winner.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you for being so kind, I really appreciate your thoughtful review. :)
Comment from karenina
This is--no kidding--really a fine poem of romance and YES rhyming that feels sincere and written from your heart. Anyone who has ever felt so in live it's like their floating can relate... I'm smiling just remembering every crush, puppy love and true love through the years!--Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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This is--no kidding--really a fine poem of romance and YES rhyming that feels sincere and written from your heart. Anyone who has ever felt so in live it's like their floating can relate... I'm smiling just remembering every crush, puppy love and true love through the years!--Karenina
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Paul Borders
Dang it, as we say here in Kentucky... "you write good". I like your phrasing. I considered entering this contest but I knew if I did, I'd most likely lose to boogienights.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Dang it, as we say here in Kentucky... "you write good". I like your phrasing. I considered entering this contest but I knew if I did, I'd most likely lose to boogienights.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2021
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Thank you, that's kind of you to say, but I've read your work and you are a fine writer. I really like the one about Thanksgiving...Baste me? Baste you! Hilarious. Thank you for being so nice. :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a beautiful poem about love and all you'd give your lover if you could. Any girl would swoon over words of love like these. Great job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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This is a beautiful poem about love and all you'd give your lover if you could. Any girl would swoon over words of love like these. Great job! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful 6 star review, it's so nice of you. I appreciate you taking time to read my poem. :)
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You're welcome!
Patty