More Grist to the Mill
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Memory Lane"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
38 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I would appear that Peter Allen has impressed Tommy Bache with his forthrightness and possibly with his knowledge and Harriet's, if they agree to further discussion, Mr. Allen will get the information he needs.
Ralf
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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I would appear that Peter Allen has impressed Tommy Bache with his forthrightness and possibly with his knowledge and Harriet's, if they agree to further discussion, Mr. Allen will get the information he needs.
Ralf
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Yes indeed. Allen is on his way to getting the information he needs. Thank you for reviewing these back numbers long after they have run out of rewards.
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It is the story that I am enjoying.
Comment from Tgadzthe1
Great cast of characters thus far. I would definitely like to read this book to see what happens next .You can see the personality of the characters through your words
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Great cast of characters thus far. I would definitely like to read this book to see what happens next .You can see the personality of the characters through your words
Comment Written 07-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this review. The next episode will be up in a short whil. Later today.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter, and
I think the visit with Tommy Bache went very well.
-The discussion of the mill and the background
of it was interesting, but later on, Tommy
astutely pointed out that Allen wasn't there
just to learn history of the mill.
-He was quite clever and perceptive with
his remarks to Allen, and I think Allen
appreciated. He showed that by
responding truthfully.
-Tommy continues by offering Allen
5 minutes to explain why he and
Heather should be interested in
hearing more of what he had to say.
-Allen did a good job, and I think Tommy
respected him for it.
-Initially, I thought Allen wasn't going
to get anywhere, but Tommy seems
to have proved that theory wrong.
-I would guess that the discussion
between Heather and Tommy will
be a good one, and since they are
the only ones who know the true
story, and Allen is interested in
Warburton, as well as Hettie's suicide,
my guess is they would want to
help straighten that out.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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-This is a very good chapter, and
I think the visit with Tommy Bache went very well.
-The discussion of the mill and the background
of it was interesting, but later on, Tommy
astutely pointed out that Allen wasn't there
just to learn history of the mill.
-He was quite clever and perceptive with
his remarks to Allen, and I think Allen
appreciated. He showed that by
responding truthfully.
-Tommy continues by offering Allen
5 minutes to explain why he and
Heather should be interested in
hearing more of what he had to say.
-Allen did a good job, and I think Tommy
respected him for it.
-Initially, I thought Allen wasn't going
to get anywhere, but Tommy seems
to have proved that theory wrong.
-I would guess that the discussion
between Heather and Tommy will
be a good one, and since they are
the only ones who know the true
story, and Allen is interested in
Warburton, as well as Hettie's suicide,
my guess is they would want to
help straighten that out.
-Well done!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this review. Yes it did look for a moment as if Tomy was going to freeze Allen out, but that was just me teasing you readers..
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You are very welcome, and thanks for sharing in your reply. Everything can't go smoothly or there wouldn't be a story!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think Tom B will answer Mr. Allen's questions. I think he sort of liked him even if he was a lawyer. I can't wait to see what more we discover about Hettie. I know it will be interesting.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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I think Tom B will answer Mr. Allen's questions. I think he sort of liked him even if he was a lawyer. I can't wait to see what more we discover about Hettie. I know it will be interesting.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2021
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You have caught on correctly here. Tommy appreciated a lawyer who did not fit his preconceptions, created by his experience of the local family solicitor. Many thanks for reviewing this.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Another lively chapter in your fascinating story! I hope that the next chapter I read will coincide with the availability of a six that I can give you -- your writing is outstanding.
Minor errors:
'Pleasant enough outlook, bain't it. Mr. Allen?'
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'Pleasant enough outlook, bain't it, Mr Allen?' [I have noticed some inconsistencies in your use of periods after titles; but I haven't flagged each instance; just FYI]
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Marvelous interplay here, between the miller and the lawyer!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Another lively chapter in your fascinating story! I hope that the next chapter I read will coincide with the availability of a six that I can give you -- your writing is outstanding.
Minor errors:
'Pleasant enough outlook, bain't it. Mr. Allen?'
-->
'Pleasant enough outlook, bain't it, Mr Allen?' [I have noticed some inconsistencies in your use of periods after titles; but I haven't flagged each instance; just FYI]
***
Marvelous interplay here, between the miller and the lawyer!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this review and the note on periods after titles. It appears I occasionally get infected with the American virus where these asre concerned. I am going to have to carry out a purge on them.
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You're very welcome, Jim. American virus, Haha. I have to hold myself back from adding them in -- although I must admit, leaving them out makes for a smoother read.
I noticed that the chapter in which you consummated the relations between Hettie and Sean was a retrospective from 1904, and since Hettie met her tragic end in 1901, I am incredibly curious to learn how you will resolve that... I guess I will learn how, in the course of reading it.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Unfortunately, I've missed out on some happenings at the mill while I've been gone but it sounds like some interesting chapters to try to catch up on. Enjoyed reading Memory Lane,
cheers
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Unfortunately, I've missed out on some happenings at the mill while I've been gone but it sounds like some interesting chapters to try to catch up on. Enjoyed reading Memory Lane,
cheers
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for returning to this with a six star review. If you do play catchup, please don't feel you have to spend time reviewing all those back numbers. Just read for pleasure.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
What a lovely piece of writing. Very polished and clear. I can see why you have such a high ranking. I look forward to reading more of your work!
All the best.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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What a lovely piece of writing. Very polished and clear. I can see why you have such a high ranking. I look forward to reading more of your work!
All the best.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this kind review. I post chapters of this twice a week on Sundays and Wednesdays usually and your reviews would be most welcome.
Comment from Hannah Baller
Great content! I detected a little bit of a black country accent chair n there too, spelt correctly as well! If I'm right that's a wonderful thing to be able to communicate: a recognisable accent.
Also the quality not writing is one of the best on this here website! No editing errors, nothing!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Great content! I detected a little bit of a black country accent chair n there too, spelt correctly as well! If I'm right that's a wonderful thing to be able to communicate: a recognisable accent.
Also the quality not writing is one of the best on this here website! No editing errors, nothing!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Welcome to reviewing on FanStory and thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. It is always good to see another UK author or poet take up residence here. We have a great deal to do educating our transatlantic friends, of which I have made so many since landing on the site almost by accident in 2015.
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Yes! I am hoping make lots of friends here ☺️
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
This is another great chapter. I am very much looking forward
to hearing what Heather and Tommy Bache have to say about
Hettie. It might even change the reader's ideas of where this story
is going.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
This is another great chapter. I am very much looking forward
to hearing what Heather and Tommy Bache have to say about
Hettie. It might even change the reader's ideas of where this story
is going.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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When you get to know where this is going please tell me. Lol. I am not so sure myself. Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from royowen
You have an excellent perception and a sharp mind Jim. Your studied application of your characters is astute and intuitive. This was an impressive episode, getting into the mind and generated thoughts of Tommy Bache was great. No, country
"Bumpkins" are smarter than given credit for, no wonder Tommy was a good substitute for Tom Warburton in Heather's eyes. Well done, blessings, Roy love
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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You have an excellent perception and a sharp mind Jim. Your studied application of your characters is astute and intuitive. This was an impressive episode, getting into the mind and generated thoughts of Tommy Bache was great. No, country
"Bumpkins" are smarter than given credit for, no wonder Tommy was a good substitute for Tom Warburton in Heather's eyes. Well done, blessings, Roy love
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this kind review and for those supportive remarks.
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Most welcome