Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I liked the way in S4 this slips from free verse into a mono-rhyming tercet thills/kills/skills that rhythmically emulates the cut and thrust of the swordplay it describes.

Oscar witnessed the Royals[']
empty and frivolous lives, -- needs a possessive apostrophe after the S in Royals

"Sword in hand, freedom for all,
was the last words she cried." - Number disagreement - should be "...were the last words she cried.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021

Thank you for the grammar tips .. I will edit

I prefer 5-7-5 format any longer and I opt for free style and just add some rhyme here and there.

Glad you like the thrills, kill, skills verse.

Keep safe!

Hope you enjoyed the video below in note?s section

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Hello Mystery Writer... This is a well written verse and an excellent response to the cartoon prompt. I remember these vibrant cartoons and think you chose a good one to act as your theme/enhancement!! Well done and good luck!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021

I really love this cartoon

.. in second position .. Kimba , the white lion and in third position

Samurai Jack .. the story and the drawings are top notch but I saw that when I was a lot older.