More Grist to the Mill
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "A Country Mill - 1925"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
29 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Peter Allen is persevering in his quest to decriminalize suicide. After completing his interview with Collet the butcher he discusses him with Charles Thorpe, the rector, and learns of the animosity Collet had against Warburton. His next person of interest is Tommy Bache, the miller and as he waits for him he scrutinizes the weir and the waterwheel, where Hettie supposedly committed suicide. The story flows well with each character's introduction.
Ralf
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Peter Allen is persevering in his quest to decriminalize suicide. After completing his interview with Collet the butcher he discusses him with Charles Thorpe, the rector, and learns of the animosity Collet had against Warburton. His next person of interest is Tommy Bache, the miller and as he waits for him he scrutinizes the weir and the waterwheel, where Hettie supposedly committed suicide. The story flows well with each character's introduction.
Ralf
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your continued interest in this move.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
he nudged one of (the) sacks on the cart
Love the photo of you at the Mill you restored, it goes well, and the clothes too could be from any era. The dialogue between the rector and the lawyer, got me up to speed a little on what has happened to Hettie, the enthusiastic amateur. a great description, even Hettie would smile at that.
great writing,
cheers.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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he nudged one of (the) sacks on the cart
Love the photo of you at the Mill you restored, it goes well, and the clothes too could be from any era. The dialogue between the rector and the lawyer, got me up to speed a little on what has happened to Hettie, the enthusiastic amateur. a great description, even Hettie would smile at that.
great writing,
cheers.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing this. I remember carefully selecting my clothing for this occasion. It wasnt that difficult as I am not that sartorially conscious. Lol
Comment from JLR
Jim, this, not surprising to me is a technically well developed narrative. Your plot is quite interesting and touches on the typical sorted labeling that takes place I rural villages and towns, coupled with a delightful explanation of the working of the old grist mill, complete with the split barn style doorway. I love the Fact that you restored this old mill an added touch a creative narrative, I never knew anyone get too close to their non coms....
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Jim, this, not surprising to me is a technically well developed narrative. Your plot is quite interesting and touches on the typical sorted labeling that takes place I rural villages and towns, coupled with a delightful explanation of the working of the old grist mill, complete with the split barn style doorway. I love the Fact that you restored this old mill an added touch a creative narrative, I never knew anyone get too close to their non coms....
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this great, six star review. Thi book tries to be literary fiction where the plot plays second fiddle to the characters. In fact the plot emerged through the characters, rather as happens in life. Things happen to us, or don't happen to us because of who we are, rather than being imposed upon us.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a very engaging chapter in your saga, as they all are, and I'm sorry that I don't have any more sixes, as this is certainly deserving of it. I'm greatly enjoying the development of your story.
Only one possible revision:
This wheel was driven by of the weight of water ...
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This wheel was driven by the weight of water ... [unless I'm mistaken; I am somewhat at a loss when understanding mechanical complexities.]
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That mill wheel is an amazing piece of machinery! I love the photo. Is that really you, pictured there, carrying the sack? You fit right in with the scenery! It's a very handsome photo. I knew you were from the area, but didn't realize you were so close to the action, in the story you created.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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This is a very engaging chapter in your saga, as they all are, and I'm sorry that I don't have any more sixes, as this is certainly deserving of it. I'm greatly enjoying the development of your story.
Only one possible revision:
This wheel was driven by of the weight of water ...
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This wheel was driven by the weight of water ... [unless I'm mistaken; I am somewhat at a loss when understanding mechanical complexities.]
***
That mill wheel is an amazing piece of machinery! I love the photo. Is that really you, pictured there, carrying the sack? You fit right in with the scenery! It's a very handsome photo. I knew you were from the area, but didn't realize you were so close to the action, in the story you created.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for reviewing and especially for picking up that left over of mine from as previous editing. I have sorted it now.
Comment from tfawcus
The investigation seems to be more promising now. A leisurely inspection of the scene of the crime not only clarifies Pete Allen's perceptions but serves to remind readers of past events. The scene is set for an interesting conversation with the Miller.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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The investigation seems to be more promising now. A leisurely inspection of the scene of the crime not only clarifies Pete Allen's perceptions but serves to remind readers of past events. The scene is set for an interesting conversation with the Miller.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this review. Yes that will happen next time.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the photograph;
it lends a sense of authenticity to the story.
-A good discussion continues between
Allen and Charles, and they are
each satisfied with how things
will proceed, and were also in
agreement about the nature of Collett.
-Allen provides more description of
Warburton and his actions while in service,
and presents his plan to talk to Bache.
-The rector is pleased that his flock
will be protected from any kind of scandal.
-The ending is very good as you
have Allen surveying the outside of
the mill and also speaking briefly to Bache.
-The ending adds a bit of suspense as
to what might be going on since there
was no sign of the miller.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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-Thanks for sharing the photograph;
it lends a sense of authenticity to the story.
-A good discussion continues between
Allen and Charles, and they are
each satisfied with how things
will proceed, and were also in
agreement about the nature of Collett.
-Allen provides more description of
Warburton and his actions while in service,
and presents his plan to talk to Bache.
-The rector is pleased that his flock
will be protected from any kind of scandal.
-The ending is very good as you
have Allen surveying the outside of
the mill and also speaking briefly to Bache.
-The ending adds a bit of suspense as
to what might be going on since there
was no sign of the miller.
-Well done!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this detailed review. I am so pleased you continue to find it interesting.
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You are very welcome, and I am glad you are pleased! I am enjoying the story.
Comment from Sanku
The slow paced analyses of the facts and non facts is a pleasure to read. The dry Brit humour,( "an enthusiastic amateur'...from the parson)..and the evocative trip up and down the riverside watching the weir and the wheel and coming to conclusion that it is not possible for a body to get entangled in it... enhances that pleasure. You have quietly built up an air of anxiety as well as hope regarding Hettie's character.Now waiting for the next interview.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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The slow paced analyses of the facts and non facts is a pleasure to read. The dry Brit humour,( "an enthusiastic amateur'...from the parson)..and the evocative trip up and down the riverside watching the weir and the wheel and coming to conclusion that it is not possible for a body to get entangled in it... enhances that pleasure. You have quietly built up an air of anxiety as well as hope regarding Hettie's character.Now waiting for the next interview.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Thank you very much for this closely analytical review of the chapter. I am glad you found it interesting.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
What a lovely piece of writing. Very interesting, polished, etc. I'll have to go back and read the precious chapters.
I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Cheers.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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What a lovely piece of writing. Very interesting, polished, etc. I'll have to go back and read the precious chapters.
I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Cheers.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. Please feel free to browse my portfolio,
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, Ah, we are getting nearer to the heart of the matter. My belief is that Hettie never intended to take her own life. She was too strong minded and too positive in her outlook. No, foul play was at work here. Of that I'm certain. We may know soon enough. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Hi Jim, Ah, we are getting nearer to the heart of the matter. My belief is that Hettie never intended to take her own life. She was too strong minded and too positive in her outlook. No, foul play was at work here. Of that I'm certain. We may know soon enough. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this review. It is most interesting to have people's views as we go along.
Comment from estory
Through the conversation here we get a more complicated view of Hettie, and a more complicated view of her death; perhaps by suicide, perhaps by murder. Looking back at the events earlier described in your novel through this third party conversation creates some great perspective of those earlier events, and we get the growing suspense of finding out what actually happened. I think the conversation between Allen and Tommy seems a bit eerie, as if Tommy is somehow hiding something. The descriptions of the creek when Allen goes to check it out for clues is full of detail and you set a great mood there. Growing growing suspense is fueling this story forward. estory
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Through the conversation here we get a more complicated view of Hettie, and a more complicated view of her death; perhaps by suicide, perhaps by murder. Looking back at the events earlier described in your novel through this third party conversation creates some great perspective of those earlier events, and we get the growing suspense of finding out what actually happened. I think the conversation between Allen and Tommy seems a bit eerie, as if Tommy is somehow hiding something. The descriptions of the creek when Allen goes to check it out for clues is full of detail and you set a great mood there. Growing growing suspense is fueling this story forward. estory
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this kind review. Good to know it continues to hold your attention.