Sleep Tight - part two
Don't let the...20 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I went back and reread the first installment in your story line. I had hardly noticed the old man when I read it the first time, but after reading the 3rd one, I could see the character stand out more. Gotta wonder what the guy is up to!
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
  |
I went back and reread the first installment in your story line. I had hardly noticed the old man when I read it the first time, but after reading the 3rd one, I could see the character stand out more. Gotta wonder what the guy is up to!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Cheers for going back and checking this one out. G
-
Your stories definitely grab the attention, my friend!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great story and I cannot wait for the next installment. I found it entertaining and believable. I enjoyed this chapter a lot. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
This is a great story and I cannot wait for the next installment. I found it entertaining and believable. I enjoyed this chapter a lot. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Many thanks for reading. G
Comment from kmoss
This is beginning to remind me of The Outsider by Stephen King. I didn't read it but I did watch the show on HBO.
I think your character comes through very well. His agony shows.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
This is beginning to remind me of The Outsider by Stephen King. I didn't read it but I did watch the show on HBO.
I think your character comes through very well. His agony shows.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Not read it nor seen it! lol Will maybe have to check it out. Much appreciated. G
Comment from aryr
Definitely an interesting part two, G. Sean probably did need a tucking in. He suffered the sharp almost severe pain in his left shoulder when he thought about his girls and the fact that they were grown and so much older. He was justified in questioning himself about running but I think his love for those two girls justified his need to stay and soon fall into a fitful sleep. Very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Definitely an interesting part two, G. Sean probably did need a tucking in. He suffered the sharp almost severe pain in his left shoulder when he thought about his girls and the fact that they were grown and so much older. He was justified in questioning himself about running but I think his love for those two girls justified his need to stay and soon fall into a fitful sleep. Very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Much appreciated, as always. G
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello... as always, this is very well written. I viewed this portion as a rest between drama... the memories, the down time, crawling into bed for rest, all seem to bring the story a needed lull before the next dramatic moment. It provides a balance. Well done!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Hello... as always, this is very well written. I viewed this portion as a rest between drama... the memories, the down time, crawling into bed for rest, all seem to bring the story a needed lull before the next dramatic moment. It provides a balance. Well done!!
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Many thanks, Melissa. GMG
Comment from w.j.debi
Sean seems to be in a tough place with no way to go but up (we hope). I have to wonder about the bed bugs and if Sean will wake to even more bites by morning. It is sad that he has missed his daughters growing up. You capture his emotions well.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Sean seems to be in a tough place with no way to go but up (we hope). I have to wonder about the bed bugs and if Sean will wake to even more bites by morning. It is sad that he has missed his daughters growing up. You capture his emotions well.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Many thanks, as always. G
Comment from lancellot
A very well crafted scene of regret and how the past can haunt your present. The bite made the reader wonder if it came through his thoughts or is there actual bugs in his bed. A mini mystery or foreshadowing.
notes:
{his} mind raced and he couldn't get comfortable.
-His
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
 |
A very well crafted scene of regret and how the past can haunt your present. The bite made the reader wonder if it came through his thoughts or is there actual bugs in his bed. A mini mystery or foreshadowing.
notes:
{his} mind raced and he couldn't get comfortable.
-His
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Many thanks for the great response to this instalment. G
Comment from Ulla
Hi Gareth, this was very short indeed and no indication of whether the story will continue or not. As it stands, it doesn't make much sense unless there will be a continuation. Hmm! Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Hi Gareth, this was very short indeed and no indication of whether the story will continue or not. As it stands, it doesn't make much sense unless there will be a continuation. Hmm! Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Many thanks, Ulla. G
Comment from Jay Squires
Well done. Tight, graphic, compelling to read along. I trust we will find out sometime what the pain in his arm was caused by. Otherwise, I'd say to leave it out. But I think old Gareth has something up his sleeve.
A few things I noticed as I read along:
"Maybe I'll do a runner myself." [I assume "a runner" is a drug term. Regardless, "myself" here begs the question to me, "along with whom?" If I'm understanding it right, I don't think "myself" is needed.]
his mind raced ["h" needs to be capitalized.]
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Well done. Tight, graphic, compelling to read along. I trust we will find out sometime what the pain in his arm was caused by. Otherwise, I'd say to leave it out. But I think old Gareth has something up his sleeve.
A few things I noticed as I read along:
"Maybe I'll do a runner myself." [I assume "a runner" is a drug term. Regardless, "myself" here begs the question to me, "along with whom?" If I'm understanding it right, I don't think "myself" is needed.]
his mind raced ["h" needs to be capitalized.]
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
doing a runner over here means running away. lol
Many thanks as always, Jay. G
Comment from Ric Myworld
Troubled times twist and alter the shape of things to come, for us, and for those around us. Once stable, strong, and sure, we can all easily become fragile, delicate beings. Wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
|
Troubled times twist and alter the shape of things to come, for us, and for those around us. Once stable, strong, and sure, we can all easily become fragile, delicate beings. Wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2021
-
Much appreciated, as always, Ric. G
