Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Well done in a flash! Powerful words pack a punch--none wasted. Startling and fresh imagery--invisible stones on the street--when it rains it thunders--brilliant.

Congrats on your prize!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021

Thank you so much for yourr stellar review:)

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Now, this is good, Iza. It has a good mysteriously spiritual feel to it that works well with miracles. I love the last sentence: "Please, give me a job."

She lost her job; her house and now she become one of those invisible stones on the street. ["...and now she'd become one of those invisible stones..." That corrects a "tense" problem without increasing the word count.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021

Hi Jay thank you so much for the verb correction and for the stellar review:)

reply by Jay Squires on 29-Jan-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from Newkidintown34

Excellent

This is a sad but very well written piece of flash fiction. You have done an excellent job of telling an important and touching story in just a few words. I can feel that woman's pain but also her faith. Best of luck with the contest. NK

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 Comment Written 28-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021

Thank you so much for your stellar review:)