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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This chapter familiarizes us with the town butcher, Bertram Collett, as seen through the eyes of Peter Allen. Since Peter did have information that Bertram wasn't aware of, he had the advantage of knowing when he was lying. This also led to his analysis of the pleasure Bertram seemed to be enjoying while trashing Tom Warburton and wondering, why? there does seem to be some depth to his display of hatred towards Tom. Each episode contributes to the mystery.
Ralf
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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This chapter familiarizes us with the town butcher, Bertram Collett, as seen through the eyes of Peter Allen. Since Peter did have information that Bertram wasn't aware of, he had the advantage of knowing when he was lying. This also led to his analysis of the pleasure Bertram seemed to be enjoying while trashing Tom Warburton and wondering, why? there does seem to be some depth to his display of hatred towards Tom. Each episode contributes to the mystery.
Ralf
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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In Maid of the Mill as schoolboys the younger Tom Warburton bested Collett (the school bully) in a playground fight. The animosity continued into adulthood. Many thanks
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Pantygnt:
It is always frustrating to have someone on the hook and not being
able to reel him/her in due to circumstances you cannot control. I
continue to be very intrigued by your novel. I can't wait for your
next installment.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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Pantygnt:
It is always frustrating to have someone on the hook and not being
able to reel him/her in due to circumstances you cannot control. I
continue to be very intrigued by your novel. I can't wait for your
next installment.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2021
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The next instalment should be posted Wednesday so you won't have too long to wait. Many thanks for this appreciative review.
Comment from lyenochka
I was about to review today's post but as I began, I realized I must have missed the conversation with Bertie. Superb job with the description of the workplace of the odious character but I was disappointed that we didn't have a clear one to one conversation. Then I realized that you planned to relay the conversation later through Allen to the rector where the commentary of what was assessed as truth or lies could be added.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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I was about to review today's post but as I began, I realized I must have missed the conversation with Bertie. Superb job with the description of the workplace of the odious character but I was disappointed that we didn't have a clear one to one conversation. Then I realized that you planned to relay the conversation later through Allen to the rector where the commentary of what was assessed as truth or lies could be added.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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I was ringing the changes. Sometimes you get the dialogue and sometimes the reported speech. Too much of either would lead to boredom I think. Many thanks for catching up with this earlier.
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh my land, your description of the butcher shop is much like a morgue, the wood slabs, knives, S hooks and of course the odour, all come right to life in the imagination. Even the butcher himself with two piggy eyes.
You expertly draw a scene, with the action unfolding in real time, as it seems as the interaction between the rector and Allen reveals information and some backstory.
This is expertly written and without error, so exceptional for sure.
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Oh my land, your description of the butcher shop is much like a morgue, the wood slabs, knives, S hooks and of course the odour, all come right to life in the imagination. Even the butcher himself with two piggy eyes.
You expertly draw a scene, with the action unfolding in real time, as it seems as the interaction between the rector and Allen reveals information and some backstory.
This is expertly written and without error, so exceptional for sure.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this review and for the six stars. This chapter seems to have been very well received across the board.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am not sure we really learned anything in this post. I can see we are all in agreement that Collett is a horrible man.
Next day, promptly at five minutes to one, the lawyer entered the butcher's shop. (The following day....)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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I am not sure we really learned anything in this post. I can see we are all in agreement that Collett is a horrible man.
Next day, promptly at five minutes to one, the lawyer entered the butcher's shop. (The following day....)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this review. It is mainly an atmospheric chapter. Allen has had it easy so far with Charles. I thought it was time he came up against some typical rural opposition.
Comment from royowen
Of course we know from your narrative was someone bordering on the selfless heroic, who in fact defined that by his very death, but I think ther would be extenuating circumstance even in that assumption. Beautifully written my friend, great job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Of course we know from your narrative was someone bordering on the selfless heroic, who in fact defined that by his very death, but I think ther would be extenuating circumstance even in that assumption. Beautifully written my friend, great job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter that shows
the character of Collette and Allen.
-It would have been interesting
to have heard some of the dialogue,
but maybe the imagination is the better choice.
-Seems Bertram hasn't changed much in attitude
but in appearance. I wonder how his shop does,
but maybe there weren't many around.
-I am enjoying the character of Peter
Allen and look forward to what he
uncovers next; he is very intelligent
and perceptive.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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-A good chapter that shows
the character of Collette and Allen.
-It would have been interesting
to have heard some of the dialogue,
but maybe the imagination is the better choice.
-Seems Bertram hasn't changed much in attitude
but in appearance. I wonder how his shop does,
but maybe there weren't many around.
-I am enjoying the character of Peter
Allen and look forward to what he
uncovers next; he is very intelligent
and perceptive.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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When I lived in the town that is the inspiration for this story there was only one butcher.
Thank you for this supportive review.
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You are very welcome. I enjoy learning about your town.
Comment from Patricia Cammish
Well written and atmospherically described.
I would have welcomed some breaking-up of the long monologues by Allen in the central section, perhaps a bit of body language or reaction from the Rector. Also in this central section there are some variations of
speech-mark punctuation (from one ' to three''') and some missing.
Great story telling
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Well written and atmospherically described.
I would have welcomed some breaking-up of the long monologues by Allen in the central section, perhaps a bit of body language or reaction from the Rector. Also in this central section there are some variations of
speech-mark punctuation (from one ' to three''') and some missing.
Great story telling
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this review. You will find that the speech marks are correct British English. Single for normal direct speech then double inside that and if that goes on into the next paragraph, you have to start with three.
For example:
'Yes,' I said. 'Now I will tell you that he replied "I didn't know that.
'"I want to do it another way." That is what he told me.'
Neither quote is closed at the end of the first paragraph because the same speakers continue is speaking in the next paragraph.
'That's the way to do it!' as Polly parrot said. Lol.
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Thanks for that . I've never encountered three before.
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Three's a crowd as they say!
Comment from Sanku
I loved the second paragraph where you described the butcher's shop and later the description of the butcher himself . So true and laced with subtle tone of humour.It is disappointing that the lawyer didnt get anything of importance..
I am enjoying this book very much
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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I loved the second paragraph where you described the butcher's shop and later the description of the butcher himself . So true and laced with subtle tone of humour.It is disappointing that the lawyer didnt get anything of importance..
I am enjoying this book very much
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this six star review. That butcher's shop description has been very popular with reviewers.
Comment from LE Krahling
Wow! Impressive. Your prose flows easily eliciting descriptive images without the stilling use of was or is. Very polished and enjoyable. You manage to stay in character with the historical times setting. I only noticed one slip up when you use the phrase "customer of the week" as this seems to be a modern phrase.
Also things get a bit murky in the retelling of the conversation with the butcher. It is hard to distinguish which are the butcher's words and which are Allen's.
All in all, very well written.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Wow! Impressive. Your prose flows easily eliciting descriptive images without the stilling use of was or is. Very polished and enjoyable. You manage to stay in character with the historical times setting. I only noticed one slip up when you use the phrase "customer of the week" as this seems to be a modern phrase.
Also things get a bit murky in the retelling of the conversation with the butcher. It is hard to distinguish which are the butcher's words and which are Allen's.
All in all, very well written.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reviewing and for picking out something that could be an anachronism.