Don't Vacation with a Bug
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your kids' line was "I gotta pee." Ours always was, "Daddy stop, I gotta throw up." We'd stop near a brook so my mother could run down the bank to dampen a cloth to clean us up. We got settled & began to travel again, & the other cried," Daddy , Daddy, stop, now I've gotta throw up. If that wasn't enough, I always seem to have my feet under my father's driver's seat. That set him off. No wonder, we didn't travel much as a family. Your poem will set loose all such stories from readers. Well written.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Your kids' line was "I gotta pee." Ours always was, "Daddy stop, I gotta throw up." We'd stop near a brook so my mother could run down the bank to dampen a cloth to clean us up. We got settled & began to travel again, & the other cried," Daddy , Daddy, stop, now I've gotta throw up. If that wasn't enough, I always seem to have my feet under my father's driver's seat. That set him off. No wonder, we didn't travel much as a family. Your poem will set loose all such stories from readers. Well written.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Ha Hah! That was my travel story as an adult. As a kid, we would fight over who got to sit in the middle so we could lean into the front, and we always got in trouble for putting our knees in my dad's seat. Memories! :-)
Thank you for the review and for telling me your story! Hugs.
Comment from Begin Again
Oh my gosh - what a terrible trip you had! It's bad enough when flu like illnesses strike and you have your own comfortable bed, but a car full of children and the long road ahead. Glad you survived! Smiles to you! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Oh my gosh - what a terrible trip you had! It's bad enough when flu like illnesses strike and you have your own comfortable bed, but a car full of children and the long road ahead. Glad you survived! Smiles to you! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you! Yes, it was definitely a trip to remember? Or forget! But it is in the past now, and we can laugh about it. Thanks again. Hugs.
Comment from Kristine Laco
This made me laugh only because it was so familiar! Maybe that pizza on day four should have been avoided? :)
I don't think 'bursted' works. It stopped me from reading for a moment, trying to think what you meant. Burst to life?
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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This made me laugh only because it was so familiar! Maybe that pizza on day four should have been avoided? :)
I don't think 'bursted' works. It stopped me from reading for a moment, trying to think what you meant. Burst to life?
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Hmmmm... I will have to think about "bursting." Thanks for the heads up. And thank you for reviewing my poem. Hugs.
Comment from Susan Newell
Absolutely delightful. I felt like I was along for the whole ride. You might want to edit for use of upper case letters, you missed a couple at the beginning of lines and I wouldn't capitalize goo--but maybe it was bad enough to deserve it. Dodge Caravan, on the other hand, definitely needs caps. One other tiny thing. The past tense of lead is led, despite the fact that even seasoned journalists use lead. I've spent a lot of time proofreading. You have a good shot at winning.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Absolutely delightful. I felt like I was along for the whole ride. You might want to edit for use of upper case letters, you missed a couple at the beginning of lines and I wouldn't capitalize goo--but maybe it was bad enough to deserve it. Dodge Caravan, on the other hand, definitely needs caps. One other tiny thing. The past tense of lead is led, despite the fact that even seasoned journalists use lead. I've spent a lot of time proofreading. You have a good shot at winning.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thank you for catching those errors. I will be fixing them. I appreciate that you pointed them out to me. And also, thank you for reading my poem. I'm glad you liked it. Hugs.
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I not only read it, I laughed out loud and read it to my husband. "Puking in tandem." Still laughing.😁
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Oh my goodness, that had me laughing out loud. Reminds me of the time my hubby and I took the kids on a road trip. We'd been driving for about 40 minutes, the kids were going wild in the back... My husband turned to me with a look of panic on his face and said, "I don't know how much more of this I can take." Bahahahahahaha. He survived though. I'm glad you did too. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Oh my goodness, that had me laughing out loud. Reminds me of the time my hubby and I took the kids on a road trip. We'd been driving for about 40 minutes, the kids were going wild in the back... My husband turned to me with a look of panic on his face and said, "I don't know how much more of this I can take." Bahahahahahaha. He survived though. I'm glad you did too. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Ha ha! Sometimes, I wonder what the heck we are thinking! Sometimes just a trip to the grocery store is too much. Thank you for your review and comments, and hugs to you.
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Wow, this brought back memories - I can't say fond ones! Although I only had two children to contend with. I admire anyone with more than that who attempts a road trip with them! Congratulations!
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Wow, this brought back memories - I can't say fond ones! Although I only had two children to contend with. I admire anyone with more than that who attempts a road trip with them! Congratulations!
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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one of the three year olds is now 19, and even she remembers that road trip! Ha ha it was bad. Thank you for your comments and for reviewing my poem. Hugs.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your poem made me laugh although I am sure you didn't feel much like laughing at the time. What a great job you did putting this trip into rhyme. And I am glad everyone made it home safely.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Your poem made me laugh although I am sure you didn't feel much like laughing at the time. What a great job you did putting this trip into rhyme. And I am glad everyone made it home safely.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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It was awful, but I don't remember much because I slept most of the time. Ha! Thanks for reviewing and for reading my poem.
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You are welcome.