"Flowered Dreams"
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Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is such a touching and emotional subject. One suggestion: I would remove the top six lines that are above the main poem, and also remove the line regarding the word count at the end. These thing take the focus away from the more important words.
Hope this is helpful.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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This is such a touching and emotional subject. One suggestion: I would remove the top six lines that are above the main poem, and also remove the line regarding the word count at the end. These thing take the focus away from the more important words.
Hope this is helpful.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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I think he's so very much Erica for your review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Like the opening sentence : "I had dream." Everyone should have a dream. People should work hard to achieve their dream. In addition to working hard, one must have faith. This poem shows you how to build your faith,
Good luck to your contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Like the opening sentence : "I had dream." Everyone should have a dream. People should work hard to achieve their dream. In addition to working hard, one must have faith. This poem shows you how to build your faith,
Good luck to your contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
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Thanks for your time and review.
Doctor Ricky 1024