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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Here in this chapter you have presented many of the ifs ands or buts that could be attributed to the final report, by the jury, in the case concerning Hettie Mansfield. Nothing is what it appears, it seems. There are so many other scenarios that would fit. But, with so many dead will the truth ever
come to the surface?
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Here in this chapter you have presented many of the ifs ands or buts that could be attributed to the final report, by the jury, in the case concerning Hettie Mansfield. Nothing is what it appears, it seems. There are so many other scenarios that would fit. But, with so many dead will the truth ever
come to the surface?
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Many thanks for delving back through the chapters and producing a six for which I am most grateful. Thank you so much.
Comment from Sanku
I must congratulate you for the meticulous attention to details regarding that age. The reader is shifted to that time easily. I enjoyed the hairsplitting analysis of the letters and suicide(s).
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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I must congratulate you for the meticulous attention to details regarding that age. The reader is shifted to that time easily. I enjoyed the hairsplitting analysis of the letters and suicide(s).
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for this complimentary review.
Comment from tfawcus
These two seem to be grasping at straws at this stage. Not very much to go on. Not easy to sustain this kind of dialogue in a way that maintains the interest of the reader, but you have developed the two characters enough to make their interaction intriguing.
Early closing day! What a loss that was to the community. Now we have the absurdity of 24/7!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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These two seem to be grasping at straws at this stage. Not very much to go on. Not easy to sustain this kind of dialogue in a way that maintains the interest of the reader, but you have developed the two characters enough to make their interaction intriguing.
Early closing day! What a loss that was to the community. Now we have the absurdity of 24/7!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this review. I am glad you find the conversation retaining your interest. I am amazed that we hun onto early closing for so long. I can remember it in the '80s but when I moved to a more urban environment in '93 it did not seem to exist even though the act was not repealed till '94.
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
Before I forget, I got a little tickled at the description of your image - the part regarding the 'black and white' building? Are you serious? In a black and white image? Funny. You are a funny, funny guy.
This was another interesting installment. I am far behind and must catch up. Forgive me for not going into great detail. I didn't see anything negative. Thanks!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Jim,
Before I forget, I got a little tickled at the description of your image - the part regarding the 'black and white' building? Are you serious? In a black and white image? Funny. You are a funny, funny guy.
This was another interesting installment. I am far behind and must catch up. Forgive me for not going into great detail. I didn't see anything negative. Thanks!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Black and white? Absolutely; the others are all one of the forty shades of grey.
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Then you are looking at a larger version OR a version OFF the computer screen OR don't need the same kind of glasses I do OR God loves your eyes better. --pout--
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the
picture, notes, and story.
-Amazing that the early closing
continued until 1994.
-The chapter was well written
and continues the discussion
about the trial and the verdict.
-The two men have a good rapport,
and it is interesting that the rector
is leaning more towards Allen's
sentiments.
-I may have mentioned it already,
but I can see why you had two
Tom's in the story; it is befuddling
years and years later.
-I will be interesting to see
the next interview and see
what happens after that.
-I would look for Bertram
to have quite a bit to say!!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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-Thanks for sharing the
picture, notes, and story.
-Amazing that the early closing
continued until 1994.
-The chapter was well written
and continues the discussion
about the trial and the verdict.
-The two men have a good rapport,
and it is interesting that the rector
is leaning more towards Allen's
sentiments.
-I may have mentioned it already,
but I can see why you had two
Tom's in the story; it is befuddling
years and years later.
-I will be interesting to see
the next interview and see
what happens after that.
-I would look for Bertram
to have quite a bit to say!!
-Well done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this review. I remember early closing in Cleobury Mortimer (my inspiration for Cleeborough St Mary) throughout the 1980s but when I moved to an urban environment in 1993 it seemed to have disappeared. I dont think it ever applied to supermarkets and large department stores.
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You are very welcome, and thanks for sharing.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your story is developing very well, and trying to decipher the mysteries of Hettie's death, and the linked death of Tom Warburton, is an intricate process, indeed. I enjoy the dialogue and interchange between these two men.
Suggested revisions are all in the introduction:
produced in evidence at the inquest into Hettie's Death.
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produced in evidence at the inquest into Hettie's death.
The notes led the coroner's jury to return a verdect of suicide,
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The notes led the coroner's jury to return a verdict of suicide,
but the London KC, Peter Allen, is not happy with verdict reached nearly a quarter of a century earlier.
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but the London KC, Peter Allen, is not happy with the verdict reached nearly a quarter of a century earlier.
It seems that he may have convinced the rector, the previous chapter ended with the latter's question and subsequent statement:
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It seems that he may have convinced the rector, as the previous chapter ended with the latter's question and subsequent statement:
This chapter has already done very well! It's ranked #24 for the month of January, not shabby at all. Very good illustration, also.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Your story is developing very well, and trying to decipher the mysteries of Hettie's death, and the linked death of Tom Warburton, is an intricate process, indeed. I enjoy the dialogue and interchange between these two men.
Suggested revisions are all in the introduction:
produced in evidence at the inquest into Hettie's Death.
-->
produced in evidence at the inquest into Hettie's death.
The notes led the coroner's jury to return a verdect of suicide,
-->
The notes led the coroner's jury to return a verdict of suicide,
but the London KC, Peter Allen, is not happy with verdict reached nearly a quarter of a century earlier.
-->
but the London KC, Peter Allen, is not happy with the verdict reached nearly a quarter of a century earlier.
It seems that he may have convinced the rector, the previous chapter ended with the latter's question and subsequent statement:
-->
It seems that he may have convinced the rector, as the previous chapter ended with the latter's question and subsequent statement:
This chapter has already done very well! It's ranked #24 for the month of January, not shabby at all. Very good illustration, also.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this review. It is good to know that some people do read the introduction. Not that those errors were deliberate. Lol.
Anyway, thanks to you they are now corrected.
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Ha! Yes, some of us do read it. You're very welcome, Jim, and I'm happy to be of help. God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed the photograph, Jim. It helps me place the setting and the way of life more firmly in my mind. Great job, as always, on this story. I always like reading the new chapters. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed the photograph, Jim. It helps me place the setting and the way of life more firmly in my mind. Great job, as always, on this story. I always like reading the new chapters. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this supportive review, which is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
So interesting. I'll have to go back and read the previous works. Very nice, professional, polished. Well done. Is there a specific reason the quotation marks are like 'this' and not "this"
Just curious.
Happy writing!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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So interesting. I'll have to go back and read the previous works. Very nice, professional, polished. Well done. Is there a specific reason the quotation marks are like 'this' and not "this"
Just curious.
Happy writing!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your supportive review. To answer your question, 'this'll is the English way and I am English. "This" is the American way. It is as simple as that. They do the date the wrong way round too. Lol
Comment from Susan Newell
Even coming in at the middle, I am intrigued. The dialogue is good and I'm beginning to understand the characters both present and absent. Particularly interesting in that my grandmother was an unwed mother in 1925. I'm proof that she didn't choose suicide.ð???
I'm new. How do I find the beginning of the book?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Even coming in at the middle, I am intrigued. The dialogue is good and I'm beginning to understand the characters both present and absent. Particularly interesting in that my grandmother was an unwed mother in 1925. I'm proof that she didn't choose suicide.ð???
I'm new. How do I find the beginning of the book?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this encouraging review. To find the beginning. Go to my profile and select 'full portfolio'. In there select the 'Books' tab. In 'More Grist to the Mill' select 'Show Chapters' and scroll to the chapter required.
This is the second book of a trilogy. The first book is called 'The Maid of the Mill' which is also available in the portfolio - if you want the full monty!
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Thank you. I will try to find time to read the first book and what you have completed for the second.
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Thank you. I hope you find it enjoyable.
Comment from Tpa
I enjoyed your chapter and the premise of suicide that you have written delicately. It does of course challenges the reader the method of which she died. Very good.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed your chapter and the premise of suicide that you have written delicately. It does of course challenges the reader the method of which she died. Very good.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this complimentary review.