An Earth in Peril
250 Word story contest entry22 total reviews
Comment from Paul Borders
Well heck DRAGONSKULLS, I could have put your contest submission alone in first place. I didn't see this until now or I would have voted for your entry. Good golly, I don't how many times I've sat down to read poems and uttered "ugh" then went on to the next one because of the sheer boringness of the poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Well heck DRAGONSKULLS, I could have put your contest submission alone in first place. I didn't see this until now or I would have voted for your entry. Good golly, I don't how many times I've sat down to read poems and uttered "ugh" then went on to the next one because of the sheer boringness of the poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the great review, Paul. Oh yes, I've muttered ugh more times than I can count. Lol. I really appreciate the stars and support, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a good one.
Ron
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-hundred-fifty-word short story, An Earth in Peril, has the required word count and, I guess it is implying that some writing you've read is not blowing your skirt up.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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This two-hundred-fifty-word short story, An Earth in Peril, has the required word count and, I guess it is implying that some writing you've read is not blowing your skirt up.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Lol. Yep, some of it lacks the wind it needs at times. Thank you for the great review and stars, Bill.
Comment from Begin Again
Very clever and simply entertaining. You took the reader to an unfamiliar place and then quite craftily brought her back home, understanding it all. What a pleasure. Smiles to you!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Very clever and simply entertaining. You took the reader to an unfamiliar place and then quite craftily brought her back home, understanding it all. What a pleasure. Smiles to you!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the great review, Carol. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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Ron
Comment from Earl Corp
This had a neat twist at the end, I was expecting something about the Coronavirus. This could have been a short story in the future contest entry as well Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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This had a neat twist at the end, I was expecting something about the Coronavirus. This could have been a short story in the future contest entry as well Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review, Earl. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have yourself a great night.
Ron
Comment from Sharon Nolen
Hilarious. I loved the way you developed this along the way, giving the impression that the world might be coming to and end, even up to the last sentence.
But your ending is classic. I loved it. Global boring? That was really great.
Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Hilarious. I loved the way you developed this along the way, giving the impression that the world might be coming to and end, even up to the last sentence.
But your ending is classic. I loved it. Global boring? That was really great.
Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Sharon. I appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Have a great night.
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Ron
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You're welcome
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting approach to a subject dear to the heart of everyone here. We are repeatedly told writers must read more. But how do you pick your source? About half my reading comes from site submissions where I find tremendous variation in the quality of the writing. Published books are no better. I am constantly writing comments on the flyleaf like incoherence in X, Y unsubstantiated (I write these comments as I can't bring myself to bin the books despite their imperfections).
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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This is an interesting approach to a subject dear to the heart of everyone here. We are repeatedly told writers must read more. But how do you pick your source? About half my reading comes from site submissions where I find tremendous variation in the quality of the writing. Published books are no better. I am constantly writing comments on the flyleaf like incoherence in X, Y unsubstantiated (I write these comments as I can't bring myself to bin the books despite their imperfections).
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the great review, Katherine. Yes, there are many variations of writing out there. I was just having some fun with the prompt with this ridiculous ending. Lol. I appreciate the generous stars, Katherine. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from Wendy G
I love the twist at the end! Very well written, building up to the climax as you did. The writing was clear, and flowed well throughout. Thanks for sharing Good wishes for your contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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I love the twist at the end! Very well written, building up to the climax as you did. The writing was clear, and flowed well throughout. Thanks for sharing Good wishes for your contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Wendy. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Ron
Comment from robyn corum
DS,
Well. Finally. I was starting to wonder if you were ever gonna get to the actual point of the matter. hahahaha You definitely saved it to the very end. And I agree -- though I would prefer that the President and his cabinet and advisors would shut down all social media, maybe. Sometimes I think that those sources do more damage than everything else in the world combined.
This was well written and entertaining. Thanks!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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DS,
Well. Finally. I was starting to wonder if you were ever gonna get to the actual point of the matter. hahahaha You definitely saved it to the very end. And I agree -- though I would prefer that the President and his cabinet and advisors would shut down all social media, maybe. Sometimes I think that those sources do more damage than everything else in the world combined.
This was well written and entertaining. Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Lol. Yeah, I had to drag it out to get to the 250 word limit before I could actually get the silly punch line in there. Yes, social media definitely does more damage than help sometimes. I really appreciate the generous stars and great review, Robyn. Thank you.
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Ron
Comment from Patty Palmer
OK this is priceless. I never saw that coming. I thought it would be something scientific like a meteor hitting the earth and that would be the end. I had a good laugh at the ending. We would have to be meeting and writing in underground bunkers. LOL Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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OK this is priceless. I never saw that coming. I thought it would be something scientific like a meteor hitting the earth and that would be the end. I had a good laugh at the ending. We would have to be meeting and writing in underground bunkers. LOL Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Patty. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. That's all I was really going for. Have yourself a wonderful night.
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Ron
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You're welcome for the review!
Patty
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever. Didn't see that coming. Sly of you not to classify this as humor to tip us off as to the twist.
We feared the worse=>WORST
here forth=>HENCEFORTH
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Wickedly clever. Didn't see that coming. Sly of you not to classify this as humor to tip us off as to the twist.
We feared the worse=>WORST
here forth=>HENCEFORTH
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the great review and for pointing out the goofs, Elizabeth. Yeah, I didn't want to give it up that I was going to end it so ridiculously. Lol. I appreciate the stars and help, E. Thanks again.
Ron