Cathartic
Tossing grief away28 total reviews
Comment from greyson ernst
this is spectacular and once again congrats!!!!!!!!!! heres my suggestion highlight the words that are Soda, rain, building, stars, exhilarating, done but anyways really nice poem really nice picture and as always keep writing and stay safe
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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this is spectacular and once again congrats!!!!!!!!!! heres my suggestion highlight the words that are Soda, rain, building, stars, exhilarating, done but anyways really nice poem really nice picture and as always keep writing and stay safe
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for the suggestion. I deliberately don't highlight them, although I know some do. I just like the poem to flow naturally and not look like I was forcing words. Does that make sense?:
Comment from equestrik
this is a lovely idea to wash our hurt and troubles away. I think it is a good idea! It is difficult to move forward after such pain- mostly because we dwell on our hurt.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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this is a lovely idea to wash our hurt and troubles away. I think it is a good idea! It is difficult to move forward after such pain- mostly because we dwell on our hurt.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Yes, you are right. But life moves on even if we don't, so we really have no other choice then move with it and leave heartache behind. Thanks for reading my poem. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Congratulations on your win, grief can certainly grip our hearts tight at times.
Just one suggestion for you:
This line is out of metre:
"and walking alone by the sea."
"Alone and walking by the sea"
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Congratulations on your win, grief can certainly grip our hearts tight at times.
Just one suggestion for you:
This line is out of metre:
"and walking alone by the sea."
"Alone and walking by the sea"
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Jenny Kartchner
This is a grand piece. As I begin reading I thought how can they use soda but you pulled it off magnificently. I hope others will read your work and I wish you well in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This is a grand piece. As I begin reading I thought how can they use soda but you pulled it off magnificently. I hope others will read your work and I wish you well in the contest
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this amazing review. It's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story/poem using the described words. Sometimes the best way to heal a broken heart usc to let go of the thoughts that keep hitting your heart and soul.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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A very well-written story/poem using the described words. Sometimes the best way to heal a broken heart usc to let go of the thoughts that keep hitting your heart and soul.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this thoughtful review. :)
Comment from Eddy Fidelis
Tossing grief away...... Such a fitted description of the poem. You have done a great job in employing the given words appropriately without being sounding like be forced. Good luck dear Poet
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Tossing grief away...... Such a fitted description of the poem. You have done a great job in employing the given words appropriately without being sounding like be forced. Good luck dear Poet
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you, that's very nice of you. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Wendy G
A very well constructed poem with a theme that uses all the required words in an unforced manner. The rhythm and metre flow well, as does the rhyme. Very well written.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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A very well constructed poem with a theme that uses all the required words in an unforced manner. The rhythm and metre flow well, as does the rhyme. Very well written.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate this wonderful review. :)
Comment from Paul Borders
Really good job. You put effort into this and it shows. I read through all the submissions and your entry is by far the best just by effort alone. My vote added to your commanding lead.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Really good job. You put effort into this and it shows. I read through all the submissions and your entry is by far the best just by effort alone. My vote added to your commanding lead.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your vote and your kind words....they are both appreciated. :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well-written. An enjoyable poem to read as your story of how to get rid of the pain. I liked the rhythm and the rhyme. The picture enhanced your poem. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Well-written. An enjoyable poem to read as your story of how to get rid of the pain. I liked the rhythm and the rhyme. The picture enhanced your poem. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this fine review, I'm glad you liked it. :)
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You're welcome
Patty
Comment from AprilViolet
It feels great to release some of that grief you feel. I have felt alot of grief in my life and I can tell you that you have nailed the feelings with this poem. Beautiful imagery as well. Excellent job with this one.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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It feels great to release some of that grief you feel. I have felt alot of grief in my life and I can tell you that you have nailed the feelings with this poem. Beautiful imagery as well. Excellent job with this one.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this amazing review....I'm glad you liked it. :)
