The Survival Cry
We all need help in one way or another.2 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
This is an intriguing piece of poetry dear anonymous! The last line is surprising and rather clever. It made me smile.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck !
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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This is an intriguing piece of poetry dear anonymous! The last line is surprising and rather clever. It made me smile.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck !
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
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My pleasure entirely <3
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Thanks.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi!
To be fiercely practical, a poem of this length is never going to make a splash in the Free Verse contest... and if it's intended as a 5-7-5 then the bad news is that line 2 has 8 syllables.
I too am an admirer of President Biden (Isn't it good to finally get rid of the 'Elect' tag?) and yes, his compassion and concern for others is genuine.
So your poem makes a point, but the real point about free verse is that it gives you the liberty to cut free from poetic boundaries, to set your imagination free. You seem to have done the opposite.
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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Hi!
To be fiercely practical, a poem of this length is never going to make a splash in the Free Verse contest... and if it's intended as a 5-7-5 then the bad news is that line 2 has 8 syllables.
I too am an admirer of President Biden (Isn't it good to finally get rid of the 'Elect' tag?) and yes, his compassion and concern for others is genuine.
So your poem makes a point, but the real point about free verse is that it gives you the liberty to cut free from poetic boundaries, to set your imagination free. You seem to have done the opposite.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2021
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It did set my mind free when it comes to moving forward with my goals in life with distractions. Does this help to explain it better.
Thanks.
