Comment from Susan Newell

Good

You've done a pretty good job with the assignment, but I found the last line a little stiff. Also, did you mean "lightning" in the third line? Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, Susan. Changed it to 'lightning. Linda

Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson

Excellent

I love the photo you choose to go with your poem they are a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
I of d this to e an interesting read
thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, Miss Cookie. Linda

reply by Miss Cookie Atkinson on 05-Feb-2021

Your are very welcome
Have a safe and blessed day
Cooke

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Excellent imagery and visuals in this one. You described a moment in time of the woman caught in the rain. You paint a picture for the reader with your chosen words, and they stay there.

Thank you so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you. Linda

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

loved this poem about rain, destiny and finding love on a rainny, cold day well done liked the last line the best an exhilarating exhibit
her daunting day is done

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thanks, Jake. Linda

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Dos, how are you doing???...I hope you are doing better my sweet friend...

I love your poem...wish I had a six...******...
I love the the smell and the sound of rain...
it plays beautiful music...and when it stops...
every things smells clean...
very nicely written sweet girl...and I so love this picture....love you....Uno...aka Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

This was a first draft. Made no changes so it is not my best posted work . . . but, I suppose I've done worse with more effort!! LOLOL I feel lousy but was told by my new Pulmonary Doctor 'to push ahead' on bad days when I can't keep awake! So, I'm practicing 'pushing' ahead! Keep warm and healthy. Covid is real. I got my first shot. Linda

reply by l.raven on 04-Feb-2021

Hey You, I've never read anything you have ever written that I didn't like...I hope your new doctor is someone you like...and that is good advice...all we can do these days is just push ahead...and it is sooooo snowy and cold here right now...

I know covid is real...but a man who falls off a roof...and never had covid...didn't die from it...even if they wrote it on his chart...his daughter is suing the hospital...but I am so glad you were able to get your first shot...that is awesome...I have a friend named John...he had lung cancer...and still hasn't been able to get a shot...maybe soon...

I hear it is cold down there...so keep warm...and stay safe...push ahead...love Linda xxoo

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Each of your lines gives a sharp picture. I can relate to her joy in running in the rain. We haven't had any for quite a while and could certainly do with it. Maybe tomorrow, when this current heatwave ends. Until then, we'll just have to enjoy the stars.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, Tony. Linda

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

You did a wonderful job of weaving together 6 unrelated words into a poem about one woman's experience in the rain. You made us feel the rain, the woman's carefree attitude, and her feeling of tiredness after her experience.

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, Rhonda. Linda

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

livelylinda:

I really like the poem you wrote using the words given. I
wonder if you meant "blinded by lightning" as opposed to
"blinded by lighting" even though either one would be fine -
the term lightning seems to go better with the theme of
the poem. Good luck in the contest.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

I fixed the problem. Thank you. Linda

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

You tell a tale here. The image of the stars after the rain is beautiful and your words create a clear scene. There is a feeling of hope when seeing the stars after rain. Excellent short poem that paints a clear picture.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, mermaids. Linda

Comment from Faith the Border collie

Excellent

Slightly crazy (in a good way) but I love the way you've incorporated the words! I really really love it.
It would be nice if there was a little more continuity throughout the poem as it's hard to follow at times, but that's a stylistic choice.
I hope you're having a good 2021, especially given the state of the world.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021

Thank you, Faith. Linda