Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

What a creative and imaginative take on the popular nursery rhymes. This is very cleverly written, incorporating so many. Hoping your poem does well in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021

Thanks, Wendy. Your comments are much appreciated!

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is Awesome children's rhymes. Very well done, great rhyme scheme throughout stanzas. Nice variety font colours. Great photo ð???Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021

Thanks, Joanne! That is very nice of you!!

Comment from greyson ernst

Needs Improvement

this poem needs lots of work here's first line suggestions
zippedy zippedy zoom
the mouse ran in the room
he found some cheese but then he sneezed
the cheese went flying
he squeaks what timing

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021

Have you been published, Mr. Ernst?

reply by greyson ernst on 20-Jan-2021

in 10 years old no

reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021

Sorry. I don't get that. do you mean you've been writing for 10 years?

reply by greyson ernst on 21-Jan-2021

i am 10 years in in grade 5 old im a kid i been writing poems for 2 months

reply by greyson ernst on 21-Jan-2021

im also sorry for the review but 3 lines dont rhyme and the rest of them i could edit

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021

well you certain have strong opinions on the writing of people who have been writing for years and are published.

reply by greyson ernst on 21-Jan-2021

well thanks and once again sorry for the review hope i see more writing from you soon

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021

thank you! I appreciate that.

reply by greyson ernst on 21-Jan-2021

np i will be checking you profile pome lover

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Writer,

hahahaha I read this aloud to my youngest grandgirl and we both smiled and laughed. These limerick-syle poems were fun remakes of the old nursery rhymes and I can't imagine this doing poorly in the voting. Thanks and good luck!

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021

Well, tell your grand girl many thanks! That's the best compliment a writer can get and I appreciate it muchly! :)

Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor

Exceptional

Very very cute, you got a lot of those old nursery rhymes. You missed Jack and Jill. Very very clever also. Got me thinking. Hickory Dickory dock, oops you got that one. London Bridge is falling down, Are you sleeping?, An Itsy bitsy spider. Isn't it amazing all those nursery rhythms were lyrics? Very cool.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021

Thanks so much and also for the 6!!
I had written one for Jack and Jill and a couple of others, but figured that may have been too many, so didn't include them. Also, thanks for the "cool" :)
most appreciated!

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

I am sure children will like this poem. Most children like animal poems or stories. They will like to hear words like, "dogs, puppy, Poodle and Pug etc." in this poem.

Kids will love to hear this part: "Zippedy, zippedy zore
The mouse ran in the door, He found some cheese, But then he sneezed--The cheese went splat on the floor."

Happy writing

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021

thank you.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Hahaha, what a hilarious poem for the contest. I enjoyed reading it. Each verse is so funny with good rhymes, color scheme, and great imagery. The image is adorable. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021

thank you so much for your neat comments and good wishes.

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

These are really cute and clever little rhyes. I like that you created new rhymes from the old standbys. I love the picture you chose to go with your write.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021

Thanks so much!