She
Found a perfect mate.77 total reviews
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
This definitely conveys love, nicely done. Best of luck to you in the contest! "will never find another/who makes my senses flutter", if you found, hold on tight! Thanks for sharing.
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This definitely conveys love, nicely done. Best of luck to you in the contest! "will never find another/who makes my senses flutter", if you found, hold on tight! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
Comment from JLR
You did a masterful job of staying within the restricted guardrails required in the limitation of typical love sounding words. Your photo sets the poem in action because "she" is the poem. Good Success
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You did a masterful job of staying within the restricted guardrails required in the limitation of typical love sounding words. Your photo sets the poem in action because "she" is the poem. Good Success
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
Comment from jaydub99
Not easy to do with the constraints you were given but you managed to put together a solid effort. I like the line "offered cushion if I fell". It evokes a lot inside the reader, well at least this reader. Nicely written and had a nice cadence. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Not easy to do with the constraints you were given but you managed to put together a solid effort. I like the line "offered cushion if I fell". It evokes a lot inside the reader, well at least this reader. Nicely written and had a nice cadence. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, your feelings for this person (real or imaginary) are really clear and precise. She sounds like someone worth waiting for! hahaha Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, your feelings for this person (real or imaginary) are really clear and precise. She sounds like someone worth waiting for! hahaha Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from amada
This is a very good love poem. It paints very well feelings of honor, understanding, and love. "Offered me shelter if I fell." Very strong declaration that for sure symbolized the meaning of love.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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This is a very good love poem. It paints very well feelings of honor, understanding, and love. "Offered me shelter if I fell." Very strong declaration that for sure symbolized the meaning of love.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you, amada. Linda
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done, author. A tasteful declaration of love that doesn't involve the cliche and often overused regular words as listed in the prompt requirements.
This is a fresh and unique take for a love poem, so best wishes to you in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Very well done, author. A tasteful declaration of love that doesn't involve the cliche and often overused regular words as listed in the prompt requirements.
This is a fresh and unique take for a love poem, so best wishes to you in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Leigh Lawhon
The sentiment is really good but I had a hard time with the rythm.
I played around with it. See what you think:
she entered into my life
surrounded by strife
lifting me up, she freed me
allowed me to see clearly
offered a cushion if I fell
and grew to know me well
will never find another
who makes my senses flutter
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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The sentiment is really good but I had a hard time with the rythm.
I played around with it. See what you think:
she entered into my life
surrounded by strife
lifting me up, she freed me
allowed me to see clearly
offered a cushion if I fell
and grew to know me well
will never find another
who makes my senses flutter
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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As I have written it, every line has 7 syllables and that is the way it will stay.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, strong, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem. And found it to inspiring - I especially agreed with the 7th line of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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The author's words are engaging, strong, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the theme of this poem. And found it to inspiring - I especially agreed with the 7th line of this poem. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Ann Market
This poem is so sweet and perfectly fitting for the contest! I enjoyed your use of rhyme and the rhythm you created. The words you chose for the rhyming work together with the rhythm, so it is overall quite pleasant to read.
Good luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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This poem is so sweet and perfectly fitting for the contest! I enjoyed your use of rhyme and the rhythm you created. The words you chose for the rhyming work together with the rhythm, so it is overall quite pleasant to read.
Good luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-concise love poem is moving and powerful. You have managed to avoid those forbidden words and still express true love and sincerity. Anyway, relationships based primarily on sex won't last.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Your ultra-concise love poem is moving and powerful. You have managed to avoid those forbidden words and still express true love and sincerity. Anyway, relationships based primarily on sex won't last.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you.
