Where Are All The Children
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Unexpected Arrival"A vigilante takes down trafficing rings.
14 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
There is so much drama in this chapter. All the love and excitement suddenly turned upside down. The reader rides the emotions of the two as they try to save their child.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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There is so much drama in this chapter. All the love and excitement suddenly turned upside down. The reader rides the emotions of the two as they try to save their child.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and such a kind review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. The two's emotions are all over the place, wanting to be hopeful, be strong for the other despite the grave situation.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Cindy Warren
It's a good thing we already know the baby survived, or you'd have me really worried. But how will they keep their secret? What happens if the wrong people find out? I hope they find a way to get away from there!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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It's a good thing we already know the baby survived, or you'd have me really worried. But how will they keep their secret? What happens if the wrong people find out? I hope they find a way to get away from there!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I'm so glad the story is keeping you interested. It'll be hard to do, that's for sure. It's hard to say what might happen if the wrong people find out. They might traffic it, or sell it on the black market.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mistydawn.
This is a very disappointing and saddening part of the story. After all the torturous lives that you've examined now the last heartbreak comes around the corner. The smalltalk between Alejandro and Anna goes on between husbands and wives all the time. At least it did in our case. It is a sad event and in the writing mode you left the chapter at the right point.. The reader waits with suspense to read the rest.
This chapter is well-written even with its discouraging story line.
Robert
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Hello Mistydawn.
This is a very disappointing and saddening part of the story. After all the torturous lives that you've examined now the last heartbreak comes around the corner. The smalltalk between Alejandro and Anna goes on between husbands and wives all the time. At least it did in our case. It is a sad event and in the writing mode you left the chapter at the right point.. The reader waits with suspense to read the rest.
This chapter is well-written even with its discouraging story line.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for such an encouraging review. Anna has had to face a lot of difficult times, but this is the worst by far. Hubby and I had the same banter until my cravings hit. I craved sweets with the girls, odd combinations with the boys. Hubby would look at me and say I'm glad it's you not me.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You're Welcome
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is an Excellent story. Do we find out the ending. This is a Very interesting read from beginning to end. I enjoyed it so sad though. Very well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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This is an Excellent story. Do we find out the ending. This is a Very interesting read from beginning to end. I enjoyed it so sad though. Very well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for such an encouraging review and your lovely stars. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I plan to do a follow up of this on the 31st. Next week will be about the vigilante going after sexual deviants. She gathers information, and then tells the cops where they are. She usually leaves them in a humiliating situation often live-streamed across the internet.
Thank you again for reading my chapter. Your support is always greatly appreciated, take care.
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Your welcome 🙂
Comment from Ric Myworld
Never a dull moment, even when a chapter starts with everyday life, you ramp up the volume by the end in a flurry of action and/or desperation. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Never a dull moment, even when a chapter starts with everyday life, you ramp up the volume by the end in a flurry of action and/or desperation. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and shiny stars. Someone once said they feel sorry for my characters, because I put through so much, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from BethShelby
That is so scary. I can imagine what a couple going through that must be feeling. Anna is asking that if comes to saving her or the baby that it should be the baby who much live. That is the love of realy mother to make such a choice. I look forward to the next chapter. You are an excellent writer.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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That is so scary. I can imagine what a couple going through that must be feeling. Anna is asking that if comes to saving her or the baby that it should be the baby who much live. That is the love of realy mother to make such a choice. I look forward to the next chapter. You are an excellent writer.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such encouraging words. I'm so glad you continue to enjoy the story. Anna will do whatever it takes to protect her baby even if it means sacrificing her own life.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement, and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Missydawn
Your chapter in your book Where Are All The Children
Unexpected Arirval (Arrival)
I was amazed how well you are telling us about Anna having a
miscarriage OR ---
I need to wait until you write your chapter to see if the baby takes it first breath.
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Missydawn
Your chapter in your book Where Are All The Children
Unexpected Arirval (Arrival)
I was amazed how well you are telling us about Anna having a
miscarriage OR ---
I need to wait until you write your chapter to see if the baby takes it first breath.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your kind review and for catching my mistake. Anna could use a miracle about now that's for sure.
Thank you again for such an encouraging review. Your help, continuous support, and friendship are always greatly appreciated. Take care.
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You are most welcome Mistydawn
Gert
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Someone already pointed this out. Your title can be blamed on Grammarly...lol You usually write in the present tense but you have had a need to write in future past tense, so I'm sure it's gotten confusing. An example is: "The workers would surround me when I enter or leave the field." I would continue in the 'would' word tense... 'when I would enter or leave. You also say. 'when I entered or left'
Another: "we were snuggling in bed when the baby decides to kick."
I was afraid she was having a miscarriage, but I should have know you would want the baby for a heightened plot. clever. lol Thus begins a new tension for the reader. Well played.
If you would like more help let me know.
Now your story: I love the relationship you have developed between the characters. This is fun: "My stomach moves in response. "I think he's going to be an athlete." This idea that is beginning ton occur to me is the reader is going to begin to worry about how the child will be hidden. You have come up with an excellent plot.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Someone already pointed this out. Your title can be blamed on Grammarly...lol You usually write in the present tense but you have had a need to write in future past tense, so I'm sure it's gotten confusing. An example is: "The workers would surround me when I enter or leave the field." I would continue in the 'would' word tense... 'when I would enter or leave. You also say. 'when I entered or left'
Another: "we were snuggling in bed when the baby decides to kick."
I was afraid she was having a miscarriage, but I should have know you would want the baby for a heightened plot. clever. lol Thus begins a new tension for the reader. Well played.
If you would like more help let me know.
Now your story: I love the relationship you have developed between the characters. This is fun: "My stomach moves in response. "I think he's going to be an athlete." This idea that is beginning ton occur to me is the reader is going to begin to worry about how the child will be hidden. You have come up with an excellent plot.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and catching my mistakes. I think I've caught them all, I hope. Grammarly decided to stop working here, but yet works just fine on another web site. I'm not sure why.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from royowen
Twenty four weeks is miles too early, if it is a choice, Anna says to save the baby, and she says "our son", boy this would be very tough to take, Alejandro is a good boy, he will know what to do at the appropriate time. Well done my friend, great episode, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Twenty four weeks is miles too early, if it is a choice, Anna says to save the baby, and she says "our son", boy this would be very tough to take, Alejandro is a good boy, he will know what to do at the appropriate time. Well done my friend, great episode, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter, and your wonderful, encouraging words. I'm afraid only a miracle will save the baby now.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Misty, this is heart breaking. What on earth will happen now? I'm devastated as much as they are . It's so very well written. This whole book is so very well written. I can't wait for what is next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Oh, Misty, this is heart breaking. What on earth will happen now? I'm devastated as much as they are . It's so very well written. This whole book is so very well written. I can't wait for what is next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for such a marvelous review, and wonderful stars. I'm so glad you're enjoying this story. Fate sure hasn't been kind to Anna, that's for sure. She's strong, she'll get through it somehow.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.