What Do You See in That Tree?
use your imagination9 total reviews
Comment from Stu Harrell
Very well done......I see why you ran well in the contest.....I am an old guy but very much enjoy scribbling together kid verses....I tell the neighbor urchins to wander outside and just make stuff up. I, too spent some time in South JAWjah......and later went to SMU......Godspeed and best wishes going forward........Stu Harrell
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Very well done......I see why you ran well in the contest.....I am an old guy but very much enjoy scribbling together kid verses....I tell the neighbor urchins to wander outside and just make stuff up. I, too spent some time in South JAWjah......and later went to SMU......Godspeed and best wishes going forward........Stu Harrell
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Stu. What a very nice response. I'll have to look and see what you have written. will get back to you.:)
Katharine
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Kiddies motivational poem writing prompt contest. It's the kind of poem that would appeal to children with good rhythm and a positive story behind the poem.
Nice poem about a tree is cute. I found the word 'tree' through out the poem so many times was repetitious.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the Kiddies motivational poem writing prompt contest. It's the kind of poem that would appeal to children with good rhythm and a positive story behind the poem.
Nice poem about a tree is cute. I found the word 'tree' through out the poem so many times was repetitious.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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in children's stories there are a lot of repeating words
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Okay, I was just giving you my feedback
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got it. thanx
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This was excellent. It is very educational. It gets kids to think and reason things out.The last part sounds like Dr. Seuss. You did well. I have not found many here that children would enjoy. Yours is appealing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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This was excellent. It is very educational. It gets kids to think and reason things out.The last part sounds like Dr. Seuss. You did well. I have not found many here that children would enjoy. Yours is appealing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Liz. I wrote it late at night at the last minute and I think I got a little long winded, so I appreciate your very nice comments!
Comment from tfawcus
The conversational style would be a definite plus when reading aloud in an intimate setting. There's plenty of scope for a good illustrator to turn this into a picture book to be enjoyed by adult and child alike.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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The conversational style would be a definite plus when reading aloud in an intimate setting. There's plenty of scope for a good illustrator to turn this into a picture book to be enjoyed by adult and child alike.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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Thanks, Tony. I wrote it late at night at the last minute and I'm afraid I got a little long winded (and long-sentenced :)
So, your kind comments are gratefully appreciated!
Comment from zanya
This poem definitely has to get to the winner's enclosure - such a fun write - what kid wouldn't love this poem - an action poem really with lots of fun looking up in the tree - wish I had a 6 !
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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This poem definitely has to get to the winner's enclosure - such a fun write - what kid wouldn't love this poem - an action poem really with lots of fun looking up in the tree - wish I had a 6 !
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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thank you so much! I really appreciate that!
Comment from Anne Johnston
"What do you see when you look at that tree?" A good line to open your poem for children. Children have vivid imaginations, and this will encourage them to use them
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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"What do you see when you look at that tree?" A good line to open your poem for children. Children have vivid imaginations, and this will encourage them to use them
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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thank you. Wrote it very late last night. Probably needs editing, but I appreciate your comments.
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You are welcome. Sometimes the ones we just write in a hurry are the best.
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed the poem, and I think children would too. I did just feel the rhyme and rhythm fell apart a bit just before the end. Otherwise it is a good entry for the competition as it does encourage children to use their imaginations, to think about possibilities and to learn about different birds.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed the poem, and I think children would too. I did just feel the rhyme and rhythm fell apart a bit just before the end. Otherwise it is a good entry for the competition as it does encourage children to use their imaginations, to think about possibilities and to learn about different birds.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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thanks, Wendy. I wrote it late last night and I know it probably needed more tweaking. Probably too late, now, but thanks for your comments!
Comment from Jenny Kartchner
This is definitely a great poem for kids. I like your pattern and choice of words. This gives kids something to look for and to imagine. I noticed one little mis-print in this line....BUT... What would be even much better that that
I think you wanted to say than that
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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This is definitely a great poem for kids. I like your pattern and choice of words. This gives kids something to look for and to imagine. I noticed one little mis-print in this line....BUT... What would be even much better that that
I think you wanted to say than that
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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oh, thanks! wrote it late last night and thought I'd caught errors but missed that one. I appreciate your comments and the catch!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, it is funny what we find up in trees and kids of course are fascinated by animals and love watching them as I do too! A fine write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Ha ha ha, it is funny what we find up in trees and kids of course are fascinated by animals and love watching them as I do too! A fine write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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many thanks, Dolly! and much appreciated.
