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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your story follows a well-defined scenario of the town of Cleeborough as well as the pertinent characters being investigated. Much comes to light as the various reports between Charles Thorpe and Peter Allen are exposed, that present the imagery of possibilities. The sharing of information while enjoying their Scotch and Port, seems to lend a pleasant atmosphere to the dire task. One assumes from the various discoveries that the depth of the story has barely been scratched and the involvement of Tom Warburton becomes more evident.
Ralf
PS: I suspect I should read Book 1.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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Your story follows a well-defined scenario of the town of Cleeborough as well as the pertinent characters being investigated. Much comes to light as the various reports between Charles Thorpe and Peter Allen are exposed, that present the imagery of possibilities. The sharing of information while enjoying their Scotch and Port, seems to lend a pleasant atmosphere to the dire task. One assumes from the various discoveries that the depth of the story has barely been scratched and the involvement of Tom Warburton becomes more evident.
Ralf
PS: I suspect I should read Book 1.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
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It might help, but please do not feel you need to review it. Just read for pleasure. It is in my Portfolio under the title Maid of the Mill.
Thank you for this review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I've just read 5,6, and 7 and thoroughly enjoyed all three chapters with the discussions between Peter Allen and Rector Charles as they look into Hettie's 'suicide'. Lookforward to atchng up on some more chapters soon,
cheers.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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I've just read 5,6, and 7 and thoroughly enjoyed all three chapters with the discussions between Peter Allen and Rector Charles as they look into Hettie's 'suicide'. Lookforward to atchng up on some more chapters soon,
cheers.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
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Thank you for playing catchup with this story. It won't be long before you will be right on the pace at this rate.
Comment from estory
The mechanics of the mystery come out through the lively dialogue here, between these characters examining the actions of Warburton and Bache when they find the body of Hettie. You are creating a good deal of suspense here, as we are left with a hint that Warburton may have done the murder and wondering how he did it. In retrospect, your writing in that chapter when the discovery of the body comes out, kept us well in the dark, as you say, and the hints are great for setting up all this suspense. The motives are a bit unclear, but that is all part of the game at this point. As a murder mystery, its pretty good, with good polish on it. We await your next chapter...estory
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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The mechanics of the mystery come out through the lively dialogue here, between these characters examining the actions of Warburton and Bache when they find the body of Hettie. You are creating a good deal of suspense here, as we are left with a hint that Warburton may have done the murder and wondering how he did it. In retrospect, your writing in that chapter when the discovery of the body comes out, kept us well in the dark, as you say, and the hints are great for setting up all this suspense. The motives are a bit unclear, but that is all part of the game at this point. As a murder mystery, its pretty good, with good polish on it. We await your next chapter...estory
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this encouraging and supportive review. Motives will come up for examination at a later stage. Meanwhile we take one step at a time
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the style how the story was told. You definitely is a good story teller. Without much prior knowledge of the previous chapters, I could follow what is going on.
The ending of this chapter keeps readers in suspense and in want of finding out more about the dead body.
Happy writing.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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I like the style how the story was told. You definitely is a good story teller. Without much prior knowledge of the previous chapters, I could follow what is going on.
The ending of this chapter keeps readers in suspense and in want of finding out more about the dead body.
Happy writing.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you continue to enjoy the story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It's getting more interesting and exciting each chapter. When the boys were sent from the workhouse you use the word "set", is that the British term? Your writing continues very good. I look forward to the timeline.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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It's getting more interesting and exciting each chapter. When the boys were sent from the workhouse you use the word "set", is that the British term? Your writing continues very good. I look forward to the timeline.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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'Set', in this context, was a term used particularly of apprentices, 'as in set to work'. Many thanks for this review.
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You are always a good source of info. Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So the plot thickens. I am wondering how or when they'll discover she was pregnant. That is an important part of her death.
'Six of the best for fighting, and the next day, eight of the same, for the same. (Too many 'for the same.')
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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So the plot thickens. I am wondering how or when they'll discover she was pregnant. That is an important part of her death.
'Six of the best for fighting, and the next day, eight of the same, for the same. (Too many 'for the same.')
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this review. The duplication of 'same' here was deliberate, as used in direct speech occasionally.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Another good chapter that is
quite informative as we learn
what Allen has found out.
-The details are very interesting
and show where certain characters
were or what had happened to them
over the years.
-It is also interesting that Collette is
still around, but apparently not much changed.
-I had forgotten about those fights
between him and Warburton.
-It seems like the mystery of Hettie
might be close to being solved.
-I imagine some interviews with
some of these characters still living
will be forthcoming.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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-Another good chapter that is
quite informative as we learn
what Allen has found out.
-The details are very interesting
and show where certain characters
were or what had happened to them
over the years.
-It is also interesting that Collette is
still around, but apparently not much changed.
-I had forgotten about those fights
between him and Warburton.
-It seems like the mystery of Hettie
might be close to being solved.
-I imagine some interviews with
some of these characters still living
will be forthcoming.
-Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this review. I think your auto correct has been working overtime and changed the bully Collett's name to the rather pleasant French Given name, Colette. Lol.
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You are welcome for the review. I was just looking at it, and I have Collette:)
Comment from Sanku
I had missed reading the previous post so I went back to it .I enjoyed the discussion about the epitaphs . Not burying in a consecrated ground seemed punishing the dead..
The rector and the lawyer is doing a very good job of piecing the evidences and trying to unveil the truth .The truth of course is elusive .But there is hope in the form of one bigmouth...
I enjoy your style of writing .You are doing very well in building up the atmosphere through the conversations between the two fact diggers
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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I had missed reading the previous post so I went back to it .I enjoyed the discussion about the epitaphs . Not burying in a consecrated ground seemed punishing the dead..
The rector and the lawyer is doing a very good job of piecing the evidences and trying to unveil the truth .The truth of course is elusive .But there is hope in the form of one bigmouth...
I enjoy your style of writing .You are doing very well in building up the atmosphere through the conversations between the two fact diggers
Comment Written 16-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this encouraging six-star review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from tfawcus
I must confess I found this chapter rather slow going. The two of them are doing a great job of piecing together the evidence and forming a picture of what happened. However, I wonder if you might move more quickly over the information that the reader already knows from the previous book and dwell more on the facts that are fresh.
I would suggest omitting Allen apologised for his blasphemy as it is obvious from the context.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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I must confess I found this chapter rather slow going. The two of them are doing a great job of piecing together the evidence and forming a picture of what happened. However, I wonder if you might move more quickly over the information that the reader already knows from the previous book and dwell more on the facts that are fresh.
I would suggest omitting Allen apologised for his blasphemy as it is obvious from the context.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Ha ha! I have been waiting for someone to say something like this. I felt rightly or wrongly that there will be those who read this book without having read Book One. I have tried to maintain a balance but I knew it was only a matter of time before someone took me up on that. Many thanks for such an honest appraisal.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
The mysteries here are slowly unraveling, but it takes time and patience, for the main characters discussing them, as well as for the readers! I'm happy to know that you will be eventually revealing a timeline with names, and maybe by then, my curiosity will also get the better of me, and I will have read more of your first book.
My suggested minor revisions:
The register notes his home address as - you've guessed it - Jericho farm.
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The register notes his home address as - you've guessed it - Jericho Farm.
Parents deceased, name of guardian: J.Joliffe Esq.'
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Parents deceased, name of guardian: J. Joliffe Esq.'
I can imagine how much light these new facts shed on old characters, for those who have read the first novel. It certainly intrigues me.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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The mysteries here are slowly unraveling, but it takes time and patience, for the main characters discussing them, as well as for the readers! I'm happy to know that you will be eventually revealing a timeline with names, and maybe by then, my curiosity will also get the better of me, and I will have read more of your first book.
My suggested minor revisions:
The register notes his home address as - you've guessed it - Jericho farm.
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The register notes his home address as - you've guessed it - Jericho Farm.
Parents deceased, name of guardian: J.Joliffe Esq.'
-->
Parents deceased, name of guardian: J. Joliffe Esq.'
I can imagine how much light these new facts shed on old characters, for those who have read the first novel. It certainly intrigues me.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this review and for picking out those points, which I shall be addressing. I am amazed how forbearing those who had read the first book have been and it is only with this chapter that I have been accused by one reviewer of covering old ground. It is a tight rope one has to tread.
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You're very welcome. I'm sorry that I'm just answering this review now, four days later. Sometimes one or more replies slip past me.
Concerning that tightrope, I can only imagine it! Two novels, one following the other, in quick succession, with overlapping subject matter, is indeed a thin line to walk. You are an intrepid writer, and you have earned my admiration. Blessings are free. - Mary Kay