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38 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Peter Allen's quest is to change the law regarding suicide. This, therefore, has roused his interest in certain suicides and the possible intention of Tom Warburton. Engaging with Charles Thorpe, the rector in Cleeborough, helps him to possibly determine Tom's next of kin as Heather Joliffe. His travels the next day to read about the suicide of Hettie Mansfield gives him much 'Grist for the Mill'. He is somewhat pleased with his findings as he returns to Cleeborough.
Ralf
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Peter Allen's quest is to change the law regarding suicide. This, therefore, has roused his interest in certain suicides and the possible intention of Tom Warburton. Engaging with Charles Thorpe, the rector in Cleeborough, helps him to possibly determine Tom's next of kin as Heather Joliffe. His travels the next day to read about the suicide of Hettie Mansfield gives him much 'Grist for the Mill'. He is somewhat pleased with his findings as he returns to Cleeborough.
Ralf
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for delving back amongst the golden oldies for this one. Your comments here are most appropriate.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Six stars here for amazingly beautiful description. The atmosphere and environment of this region must have marinated your soul for you to be able to describe it so entrancingly. The sheep in the mist on the road. The views.
Lovely,
Lucy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Six stars here for amazingly beautiful description. The atmosphere and environment of this region must have marinated your soul for you to be able to describe it so entrancingly. The sheep in the mist on the road. The views.
Lovely,
Lucy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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A pastoral interlude in the dance perhaps. Thanks again for this complimentary review.
Comment from roof35
I guess Allen will be slicing the Gordian Knot? Looking forward to reading about what he found out and what he is going to do. Very well written chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I guess Allen will be slicing the Gordian Knot? Looking forward to reading about what he found out and what he is going to do. Very well written chapter.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your continued interest and enthusiastic reviewing. Not to mention the six stars.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I see I read this out of order. Sorry! It happens often when I can only review on weekends. I start at the front of my PM box and work backwards. I am sooo sorry, but I did enjoy reading.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I see I read this out of order. Sorry! It happens often when I can only review on weekends. I start at the front of my PM box and work backwards. I am sooo sorry, but I did enjoy reading.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I can understand that. Don't worry about it. I am currently posting on Wednesdays and Sundays so, if you can only work on the weekends it is almost bound to happen. Thank you for reviewing it whenever.
Comment from Sanku
I remember studying 'Shropshire Lad ' during my PG . Thank you for including those verses from Bredon Hill.
I enjoy your style of writing .beautiful details of Cleeborough from the hill top. The conversation between the pastor and peter is very stimulating with Peter offering his service to the parson to get through pearly gates ...
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I remember studying 'Shropshire Lad ' during my PG . Thank you for including those verses from Bredon Hill.
I enjoy your style of writing .beautiful details of Cleeborough from the hill top. The conversation between the pastor and peter is very stimulating with Peter offering his service to the parson to get through pearly gates ...
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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thank you so much for this six-star grading. Shropshire Lad is a grate selection of poems but the silly thing is that Housman never went there. The poems were written in London. I think Shropshire to him was like a Utopian idea and Bredon Hill is in Worcestershire. Lol.
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But he is Welsh isnt he?
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English, born in Worcestershire.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and story to go with it.
-I am enjoying the conversations between
Peter and Charles.
-It makes us feel like we are there
listening in and wanting to ask questions.
-We are also learning more about Tom W.
an the few other characters in retrospect
than when they were alive.
-It will be interesting to see what both
men uncover in their investigations and research.
-It seems that Peter has already found on,
as he is peering at Jericho Farm, without
knowing it.
-I look forward to seeing what both men discover.
-This is turning into a good mystery story:)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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-Very nice artwork and story to go with it.
-I am enjoying the conversations between
Peter and Charles.
-It makes us feel like we are there
listening in and wanting to ask questions.
-We are also learning more about Tom W.
an the few other characters in retrospect
than when they were alive.
-It will be interesting to see what both
men uncover in their investigations and research.
-It seems that Peter has already found on,
as he is peering at Jericho Farm, without
knowing it.
-I look forward to seeing what both men discover.
-This is turning into a good mystery story:)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this encouraging review. If you have questions please ask them. Mostly I know, they will be answered in the story later, but I am not infallible and I might even be able to answer to your satisfaction.
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You are very welcome for the review. When I mentioned questions, I meant being part of the characters' discussion and asking them. You did a good job with it, and made it very believable.
Comment from Gloria ....
Love it. Lots of descriptive narrative that shows us where we are, while leaving clues, as to where the plot might go meandering through the hillsides to Jericho Farm.
Just one small suggestion:
'Yes, a Sunbeam actually, my one toy!' laughed Peter Allen. instead of using a dialogue tag on these, I suggest action tags instead. EG: Peter Allen chuckled as he eyed his rusty bicycle standing by the brick wall.
That said, terrific story telling and a Gordian knot is always fun to untangle.
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Love it. Lots of descriptive narrative that shows us where we are, while leaving clues, as to where the plot might go meandering through the hillsides to Jericho Farm.
Just one small suggestion:
'Yes, a Sunbeam actually, my one toy!' laughed Peter Allen. instead of using a dialogue tag on these, I suggest action tags instead. EG: Peter Allen chuckled as he eyed his rusty bicycle standing by the brick wall.
That said, terrific story telling and a Gordian knot is always fun to untangle.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this six-star review and your encouraging words. I like the idea of that developed speech tag and will investigated tomorrow, fresh in the cold light of day, but it sounds like something I ought to be doing.
Comment from Alli Johnston
Captivating, beautiful detail, mysterious. I love your style of writing and the detail you put into it. Specifically, driving the car and showing knowledge about what you write about. Details can bring an entire story together
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Captivating, beautiful detail, mysterious. I love your style of writing and the detail you put into it. Specifically, driving the car and showing knowledge about what you write about. Details can bring an entire story together
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this review especially that comment about the detail. Much of the knowledge stems from research.
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Your research paid off! Best of luck as you continue writing
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Your research paid off! Best of luck as you continue writing
Comment from Jaime Deagle
I found the character to be interesting and engaging. The story seemed interesting. The dialogue was natural sounding. The characters draw you into the story. Overall a well-crafted piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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I found the character to be interesting and engaging. The story seemed interesting. The dialogue was natural sounding. The characters draw you into the story. Overall a well-crafted piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Pantygynt, I lost you and this wonderful story a few chapters ago, and now have found you again. I thought I had fanned you so I would not miss anything, but christmas must have overloaded my system.
you do not need me to tell me what a wonderful writer you are, but I think I have to say something original about this chapter.
The promise of dark and terrible secrets to be revealed in the coming chapters about Jericho Farms that you hint at in the final paragraph, IS what makes this novel a page turner.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Dear Pantygynt, I lost you and this wonderful story a few chapters ago, and now have found you again. I thought I had fanned you so I would not miss anything, but christmas must have overloaded my system.
you do not need me to tell me what a wonderful writer you are, but I think I have to say something original about this chapter.
The promise of dark and terrible secrets to be revealed in the coming chapters about Jericho Farms that you hint at in the final paragraph, IS what makes this novel a page turner.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2021
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Glad to see you back and enjoying the story so much. Thank you for this work.