Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55

Exceptional

Your descriptions are pretty amazing. I can picture it all so clearly and I love the from out of nowhere snow. You are so talented and creative. I am a fan. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022

Thanks again for the six star review and your support of the piece. estory

reply by Moonbeams Musings 55 on 16-Dec-2022

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Exceptional

SSSSSStupendous series! High time for a Bonussssss. Please forgive me my bass-ackards approach--I'd read parts two and three back when and it occurred to me (DUH) that there must be a part one--as it happened, part four popped up first so I read it--as you will have seen. These slices of your early life are marvelous. Stunning work. Cheerssssss. LIZ

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021

Thanks again so much for this six star review and these flattering comments. I am glad the images seemed to capture so much of the emotions of those moments, and the significance of them. estory

Comment from Alli Johnston

Excellent

Are these real memories of your childhood? Amazing! I don't remember much of my childhood at all but I like to think that I was just as curious and amazed by things as you were

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful words supporting the piece. Yes, these will be real memories of life. This is as far back as it goes; around 1963, when I was two. Seems like a simpler time now. But they will range almost up to the present time and some will not be so specific. More like impressions from life. estory

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This sounds as though it will be a wonderful undertaking and I hope you are able one day to have a book of these stories published.
Patricia

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and the kind words. Glad you enjoyed the first chapter and hope you will continue to enjoy the book as it rolls out. estory

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

Yes, the reminiscence is well portrayed. Each element observed in the environment we grow up in means more than we realize. My suggestion if I may, is that you break it down into smaller paragraphs that are more inviting to a reader, and have individual dialogue create its own line. Looks to be a very interesting book.

Ralf

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments and suggestions. Hope you enjoy the rest of the book...estory

reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 06-Jan-2021

I'm sure I will.

Ralf

Comment from RetroStarfish

Excellent

I for one and glad you're back and I look forward to reading more of your rich and well-written memories: "...cold and white and seeming to come from another world. I remember seeing the white moon in the sky and wondering if the snow came from the moon."
So descriptive and evocative of a child's imagination.
One small suggestion, second paragraph the first sentence has one too many 'warm's.
Loved this.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I am glad that this sense of the magic of childhood came through in the post. It's always great to hear which parts specifically worked well. I'm glad that image of the magic snow was so evocative of imagination for you estory

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

I enjoyed this piece of writing very much. I could feel all the sensations you put out there, see the things you saw and understand your feelings being on the platform. Very well written!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting the piece. I always hope the visuals are strong in my pieces. I like to give people a great sense of place and time. estory

Comment from Leann DS

Excellent

This is a nice piece, with lots of visual imagery. Your descriptions are clear and concise, painting a vivid picture in my mind's Eye. I could easily put myself into the story, and now I want to go to grandmas house and check out those wooden toys. Hugs.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments validating the writing in the piece. Thanks so much for the support. estory

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

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'journeys there and back again' - I love that. This style of writing also made me think of A.A. Milne, for some reason. Sweet and soft and utterly engaging. I think this is a marvelous beginning. Thanks!

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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the piece. I never read Milne. The Idea for the format is really from Irving, as I said in the notes. Hope you enjoy the rest. estory

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Exceptional

This piece is well written a s moving. It brought me from the inside of an Brooklyn apartment to St. Paul's Lutheran Church, to Cypress Hill via a train. I have been to Brooklyn, Queens and Manhattan many times. Your description is accurate. I like you description of snowmen and snow covered tree angels.

Keep writing a stay healthy.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021

Thanks again for the exceptional review and all the continued support for my literary endeavors...estory