Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Brave Little Soldier"multi-author book number two
11 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is so cute and so like the little boys I know. They do consider taking action with swords, yet they want so much to snuggle with their grandmothers and mothers.
Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is so cute and so like the little boys I know. They do consider taking action with swords, yet they want so much to snuggle with their grandmothers and mothers.
Patricia
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars!!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
This reminds me of my two youngest grandsons, who are the gentlest and sweetest little boys one can imagine, but both play with their super hero dolls in a most aggressive way, even gentle little boys have those male like tendencies.
(Thank God) well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This reminds me of my two youngest grandsons, who are the gentlest and sweetest little boys one can imagine, but both play with their super hero dolls in a most aggressive way, even gentle little boys have those male like tendencies.
(Thank God) well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Roy. Have a lovely night.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--oh, the adventures we had when we were young. I remember being a ferry boat captain and sailing my grandmothers' ottoman to exotic ports of call!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--oh, the adventures we had when we were young. I remember being a ferry boat captain and sailing my grandmothers' ottoman to exotic ports of call!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Your little poem is nicely paired with your illustration. I know you cuddle with YOUR grandson so maybe this Haiku is a bit biographical (-;
Broadsword is a fine alliterative word choice for your story. Broadaxe is another medieval weapon and may be a more descriptive word to go with 'brutal' IMHO.
Mark
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Gypsy,
Your little poem is nicely paired with your illustration. I know you cuddle with YOUR grandson so maybe this Haiku is a bit biographical (-;
Broadsword is a fine alliterative word choice for your story. Broadaxe is another medieval weapon and may be a more descriptive word to go with 'brutal' IMHO.
Mark
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Believe it or not I played dungeons and dragons when I was very young. My character was a fierce Warrior named, Luz (light in spanish). My weapon was a double sided sword.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from padumachitta
Hello
Okay this made me laugh. I can just see this little guy. There is one at the barn i ride at. a wee terror with his tiny soldiers and so very loving with the Shetland pony...though perhaps in his heart 'lucky the Pony' is a battle horse and he is a warrior
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Okay this made me laugh. I can just see this little guy. There is one at the barn i ride at. a wee terror with his tiny soldiers and so very loving with the Shetland pony...though perhaps in his heart 'lucky the Pony' is a battle horse and he is a warrior
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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May I ask why you gave me four stars? Is there a way I can improve my poem?
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Alli Johnston
I love that this poem reflects the big, exciting ideas of wielding power and strength while also conveying the inner truth of softness and love. This poem is very yin and yang, great work.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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I love that this poem reflects the big, exciting ideas of wielding power and strength while also conveying the inner truth of softness and love. This poem is very yin and yang, great work.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Cocooned adventures here and you captured the innocence of childhood perfectly with your endearing words here, reality is quite a different matter, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Cocooned adventures here and you captured the innocence of childhood perfectly with your endearing words here, reality is quite a different matter, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
This is really cute, Gypsy. Broadsword battles are fun to plan but only when one gets to cuddle with Gran afterward, who is an experience swords' woman.
Excellent addition to you Renga book, and beautiful presentation here.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This is really cute, Gypsy. Broadsword battles are fun to plan but only when one gets to cuddle with Gran afterward, who is an experience swords' woman.
Excellent addition to you Renga book, and beautiful presentation here.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an awesome presentation, Gypsy. I love the picture and the multi-colored font used. Your words are descriptive and so true of young soldiers. This is one of your best renga poems.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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This is an awesome presentation, Gypsy. I love the picture and the multi-colored font used. Your words are descriptive and so true of young soldiers. This is one of your best renga poems.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for the six stars, your exceptional review, and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Iza Deleanu
A brave little soldier falls asleep in grandma's arms after defending the fort from invisible monsters. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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A brave little soldier falls asleep in grandma's arms after defending the fort from invisible monsters. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much, Iza, for the exceptional review.
Gypsy hugs