The Temptress
A contest entry48 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Nice! This poem - rather lengthy, actually - was handled well and the meter was really good throughout. There were a couple of bumps here and there, but even Shakespeare 'bumped' at times, to my way of thinking. *smile* Great entry - good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Nice! This poem - rather lengthy, actually - was handled well and the meter was really good throughout. There were a couple of bumps here and there, but even Shakespeare 'bumped' at times, to my way of thinking. *smile* Great entry - good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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To be compared with Shakespeare, that suits me down to the ground, lol. Thank you, Robyn.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A very well written poem using random word prompts and weaving them into the poetic story. I enjoyed it. The pic is also very apt. Good luck in the contest! Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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A very well written poem using random word prompts and weaving them into the poetic story. I enjoyed it. The pic is also very apt. Good luck in the contest! Happy New Year!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Seshadri! Happy New Year to you, too! Have a good day. :) xx
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, you certainly made a brilliant poem with those necessary words. A great write - interesting, amusing and well rhymed throughout in good heptameter. I doubt it will be bettered. Regards Dorothy x
Good Luck!!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Hello anon, you certainly made a brilliant poem with those necessary words. A great write - interesting, amusing and well rhymed throughout in good heptameter. I doubt it will be bettered. Regards Dorothy x
Good Luck!!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the six star award, Dorothy, and the great review. I'm pleased you liked this one. Have a good day. :)
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
Like the artwork you choose to go with your poem they a perfect mach.
You captured my attention from the first word to the last
A woman has to do, what a woman has too to keep
her man.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Like the artwork you choose to go with your poem they a perfect mach.
You captured my attention from the first word to the last
A woman has to do, what a woman has too to keep
her man.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Miss Cookie!
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Your very welcome
Cookie
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever well rhymed and metered write and a great story of revenge of the wives when a pretty girls turned the heads of their husbands, revenge is sweet here and I enjoyed this cunning tale, a fun post and a great contest entry, I reckon this will be a WINNER! Sorry I am out of sixes, but this deserved one, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This is a clever well rhymed and metered write and a great story of revenge of the wives when a pretty girls turned the heads of their husbands, revenge is sweet here and I enjoyed this cunning tale, a fun post and a great contest entry, I reckon this will be a WINNER! Sorry I am out of sixes, but this deserved one, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Aw, Thank you, Dolly! Just you saying it deserved a six means a lot. Have a nice day. :)
Comment from jake cosmos aller
what a fun poem and loved the ending The next day when she met the wives, she gave a woeful cry,
"Forgive me please," she begged them. When they smiled she gave a sigh.
Now all the wives are happy that their men are not bewitched--
and they made sure they'd stay that way and got the lady hitched!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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what a fun poem and loved the ending The next day when she met the wives, she gave a woeful cry,
"Forgive me please," she begged them. When they smiled she gave a sigh.
Now all the wives are happy that their men are not bewitched--
and they made sure they'd stay that way and got the lady hitched!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Jake! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks so very much for the six! Have a nice day. :)
Comment from Goodadvicechan
This is a joke story (poem) that will make you laugh.
The author is good in choosing a beautiful picture. You deliver a good message that most wives are jealous. What the wives do can be a joke but it fits this contest. I still gave it a FIVE.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This is a joke story (poem) that will make you laugh.
The author is good in choosing a beautiful picture. You deliver a good message that most wives are jealous. What the wives do can be a joke but it fits this contest. I still gave it a FIVE.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much! Have a lovely day. :)
Comment from Jaime Deagle
Excellent piece. I really enjoyed it. The characters are engaging. I hope you do well in the contest. This will get my vote. Thanks for sharing your work. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Excellent piece. I really enjoyed it. The characters are engaging. I hope you do well in the contest. This will get my vote. Thanks for sharing your work. Good Luck!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Jaime! I'm happy you enjoyed reading my poem. Have a super day. :)
Comment from Boogienights
This is a delightful tale of a very resourceful group of women. Getting the temptress married off quick was smart. I enjoyed this read, thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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This is a delightful tale of a very resourceful group of women. Getting the temptress married off quick was smart. I enjoyed this read, thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you! What a lovely review. Have a wonderful day. :)
Comment from LisaMay
So it was a love potion that saved the day! Much better than poisoning her.
I can tell you've had fun writing this, and it was a lot of fun to read to see where you were going with it. You've integrated the required words well and the rhyme and rhythm carry the story along nicely.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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So it was a love potion that saved the day! Much better than poisoning her.
I can tell you've had fun writing this, and it was a lot of fun to read to see where you were going with it. You've integrated the required words well and the rhyme and rhythm carry the story along nicely.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you! Have a lovely day. :)
