The Temptress
A contest entry48 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sandramitchell,
Marvelous piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture complements the theme.
SUPERB that's why CONTEST WINNER.
CONGRATULATIONS!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hello Sandramitchell,
Marvelous piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as PERFECTLY matching the theme phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting its theme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture complements the theme.
SUPERB that's why CONTEST WINNER.
CONGRATULATIONS!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Dear RP, thank you so very much for the sixth golden star, I really appreciate it, and the amazing review. And a big thank you for the congratulations as well. That is so kind of you. Warmest hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Sandra xxx, Most Welcome!
Take care. With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from humpwhistle
An entertaining tale, complete with witch's brew. I like the way you've spread out the required words. They all blended in quite well. I daresay, though, that the husbands will find some other distraction. Spells and potions rarely reach the underlying problems.
Well done, Sandra.
I hope your witch has something with which to give 2021 a lift.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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An entertaining tale, complete with witch's brew. I like the way you've spread out the required words. They all blended in quite well. I daresay, though, that the husbands will find some other distraction. Spells and potions rarely reach the underlying problems.
Well done, Sandra.
I hope your witch has something with which to give 2021 a lift.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thanks so much, Lee! I think the husband's will behave, especially now they know their wives have a witch as a friend! I'll sort out the spell for 2021, lol. Thanks, my friend. Happy New Year. :)) xxx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Poet,
A wonderful story of the temptress guilty of betrayal
of her friends. But wise friends know what to do
and fortunately also know friendly witches.
Great picture to match your smooth meter, excellent rhymes
and using the requires words.
I just hope that spell lasts a long time, or that man who married her
may be quite upset with the ladies of the town.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hello Poet,
A wonderful story of the temptress guilty of betrayal
of her friends. But wise friends know what to do
and fortunately also know friendly witches.
Great picture to match your smooth meter, excellent rhymes
and using the requires words.
I just hope that spell lasts a long time, or that man who married her
may be quite upset with the ladies of the town.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you so very much for the array of shiny stars, Robert, and a wonderful review. I won!! Fortunately I know a few friendly witches, Lol. I'm glad you enjoyed the story poem, I had fun writing it. Warm hugs, my friend and have a lovely day. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and
presentation.
-I think she fits the
image of a temptress.
-I like how you highlighted
the required words.
-This is a great poem that
tells a very good story.
-It flows smoothly from verse to verse
with effective meter, imagery, and rhyme.
-It was a clever way to fit pipe into the story.
-I enjoyed reading it and wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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-Great artwork and
presentation.
-I think she fits the
image of a temptress.
-I like how you highlighted
the required words.
-This is a great poem that
tells a very good story.
-It flows smoothly from verse to verse
with effective meter, imagery, and rhyme.
-It was a clever way to fit pipe into the story.
-I enjoyed reading it and wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Pam. I won!! I'm so pleased you liked it. Sending you a big hug, my friend. Have a lovely day! :)) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome, Sandra, and congratulations on the win. The lady in blue came through!!
Comment from kmoss
This is a good, imaginative poem. I'm not sure if you were following a certain syllable could but some of the words seem a little too much in this: all of the guys,delighted that she took them,the wives all went. I like it!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is a good, imaginative poem. I'm not sure if you were following a certain syllable could but some of the words seem a little too much in this: all of the guys,delighted that she took them,the wives all went. I like it!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Kmoss, for reading my poem, I'm so pleased you liked it. This is written in heptameter. 14 syllables a line. Happy New Year. :)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is so well composed from beginning to end and tells a very good story. When such artful thought is engaged it should be rewarded and so I hope you win. I voted.
Ralf
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is so well composed from beginning to end and tells a very good story. When such artful thought is engaged it should be rewarded and so I hope you win. I voted.
Ralf
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Ralf! That is so nice of you. You are so kind!! :) xx
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And you are so talented!
Ralf
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Aw, thank you! xx
Comment from Anne Johnston
An interesting poem using all the words that were required. Great rhythm and rhyming. I like the way that you ended your poem, with things changing for the better.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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An interesting poem using all the words that were required. Great rhythm and rhyming. I like the way that you ended your poem, with things changing for the better.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Anne. I really appreciate your kind words. Warm hugs. xx
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You are welcome
Comment from Laurie Holding
So well done! Funny and smart, this reads in just about perfect rhythm, a modern Seussian rhyme scheme that seems effortless for you. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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So well done! Funny and smart, this reads in just about perfect rhythm, a modern Seussian rhyme scheme that seems effortless for you. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Laurie. Have a wonderful New Year! :)
Comment from padumachitta
Hey There
A fun entry for this peom contest with specific wordsair - hate - flower - pipe - final - cry
I enjoyed this poem, I like a bit of fun and a bit of bawdry...
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Hey There
A fun entry for this peom contest with specific wordsair - hate - flower - pipe - final - cry
I enjoyed this poem, I like a bit of fun and a bit of bawdry...
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Jody. Have a wonderful New Year! :)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Mystery Writer!
What a hoot!
You clearly had a wonderful time penning this piece! I certainly smiled asI read it! Love story poems, and this one is no exception. All words used per requirements with easy rhythm.
Best Wishes!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Good Morning, Mystery Writer!
What a hoot!
You clearly had a wonderful time penning this piece! I certainly smiled asI read it! Love story poems, and this one is no exception. All words used per requirements with easy rhythm.
Best Wishes!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Diane, I'm so pleased you enjoyed the humour. Happy New Year! :)
