If At First You Don't Succeed...
Try, try again!22 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This is a really fun piece you've created using the required words! I loved the story as well as the rhymes. It hooked me in like a soap opera and led me to a satisfying conclusion. She got her man!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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This is a really fun piece you've created using the required words! I loved the story as well as the rhymes. It hooked me in like a soap opera and led me to a satisfying conclusion. She got her man!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this positive review, it made my night. :)
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match,
You captured my attention from the start. It made me think how many keepers I let go by
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match,
You captured my attention from the start. It made me think how many keepers I let go by
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you for such a nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun poem filled with anticipation for a romance just itching to start. I enjoyed your rhymes and your meter is a bit uneven in places but this did not spoil your wonderful story, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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A fun poem filled with anticipation for a romance just itching to start. I enjoyed your rhymes and your meter is a bit uneven in places but this did not spoil your wonderful story, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)
Comment from Allezw2
Sometimes, a wordsmith stuns you with an assemblage of the best words in truly the best order. This was such a light-hearted trip; such a pleasure to find. I think you had fun with this one. I did.
Sure, if you don't ask, how will you ever know if she would or would not? In my case, she asked if she could borrow a pencil, pointedly staring at the two mechanical pencils and two ballpoint pens I always had in my shirt pocket. It was legitimate I guess. She returned it before we left for the next class. When I said she could return it next day, she smiled and said she'd get one at the student store.
Take a bow or curtsey as appropriate. Nicely done.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
An addendum: I rang our ship's bell at our fiftieth anniversary!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Sometimes, a wordsmith stuns you with an assemblage of the best words in truly the best order. This was such a light-hearted trip; such a pleasure to find. I think you had fun with this one. I did.
Sure, if you don't ask, how will you ever know if she would or would not? In my case, she asked if she could borrow a pencil, pointedly staring at the two mechanical pencils and two ballpoint pens I always had in my shirt pocket. It was legitimate I guess. She returned it before we left for the next class. When I said she could return it next day, she smiled and said she'd get one at the student store.
Take a bow or curtsey as appropriate. Nicely done.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
An addendum: I rang our ship's bell at our fiftieth anniversary!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review and the 6 stars. It's very appreciated. :)
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You're quite welcome, Fantasist
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a fun offering for this contest and written with a wonderful rhythm to boot!! ;) You just never know what life has in store... ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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What a fun offering for this contest and written with a wonderful rhythm to boot!! ;) You just never know what life has in store... ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Well, your words took you to quite an intriguing place. When I was
a Fanstorian in the past, I used to enter these contests, but I don't
remember winning any of them. I really like what you did with
this. Good luck in the contest.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Well, your words took you to quite an intriguing place. When I was
a Fanstorian in the past, I used to enter these contests, but I don't
remember winning any of them. I really like what you did with
this. Good luck in the contest.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you ,I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from kmoss
This is a very cute story you created for this contest. It is a little repetitive, but it works for this story. I like the picture as well. The "hook" stanza is a good one:I watch him walk by every day,
distinguished in his dark blue suit.
I think he's fine in every way,
a match for me, single to boot!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is a very cute story you created for this contest. It is a little repetitive, but it works for this story. I like the picture as well. The "hook" stanza is a good one:I watch him walk by every day,
distinguished in his dark blue suit.
I think he's fine in every way,
a match for me, single to boot!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. :)
Comment from equestrik
This is a good and fun write with a good message. I like the complete presentation with your clever picture along with your creative use of the required words.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is a good and fun write with a good message. I like the complete presentation with your clever picture along with your creative use of the required words.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you, I'm really glad you liked this poem.. Thanks for taking the time. :)
Comment from Earl Corp
This could have been a Tell a Story in a Poem contest entry also. You went all out with this poem. The only suggestion I have is holding the required words makes it easier to see you used them all. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This could have been a Tell a Story in a Poem contest entry also. You went all out with this poem. The only suggestion I have is holding the required words makes it easier to see you used them all. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you fir this great review and good suggestion. :)
Comment from Paul Borders
Very good. I like your contest submission. Not just for the way it is composed bu the message therein. Especially the advice about... "Speak up and say what's in your heart". I hope your entry does well in the voting.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Very good. I like your contest submission. Not just for the way it is composed bu the message therein. Especially the advice about... "Speak up and say what's in your heart". I hope your entry does well in the voting.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem. :)
