Moonlit Lullaby
Minute poetry36 total reviews
Comment from phill doran
Hello Melissa
What a very competent piece this is. You have used the form well: making one whole, one complete image from your observations. "Vague lullabies/Unuttered Song" these are great turns of phrase and help the flow from one verse to the next run effortlessly.
I am hoping that the rating will help preserve your spot in January's features and figure. This is very Melissa - a good representation of what you do well.
Cheers
phill
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Hello Melissa
What a very competent piece this is. You have used the form well: making one whole, one complete image from your observations. "Vague lullabies/Unuttered Song" these are great turns of phrase and help the flow from one verse to the next run effortlessly.
I am hoping that the rating will help preserve your spot in January's features and figure. This is very Melissa - a good representation of what you do well.
Cheers
phill
Comment Written 24-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
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Hello Phill. Thank you for your wonderful comments... I always take them to heart. The Minute form is special to me because it was the first form I used to write in Iambic meter.. about 3 years ago. My first poem.. ever.. was written here on FS. About 8 months in to FS, I saw a Minute contest and researched Iambic meter. I tied for first place with Michael Cahill... this form as been very special since that day... my first, real confidence booster :) haha. I so appreciate your encouragement, Phill.
Melissa
Comment from MissMerri
I adore this poem! It is so beautiful and dreamy and well-constructed and rich in imagery and perhaps one of the best minute poems I've ever read. I especially loved: "Unuttered songs lulled me to sleep/calm, drifting sweep/a quiet rest/within my nest." Can't get much better. Congratulations on placing in this contest. I'm glad you did. MM
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I adore this poem! It is so beautiful and dreamy and well-constructed and rich in imagery and perhaps one of the best minute poems I've ever read. I especially loved: "Unuttered songs lulled me to sleep/calm, drifting sweep/a quiet rest/within my nest." Can't get much better. Congratulations on placing in this contest. I'm glad you did. MM
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Adonna, you made my day with your delightful review and mounds of encouragement. So needed your sunny face today... and your lovely words too. But, I really must share that is was after reading your entry for this Minute that I smiled and said to myself... how lovely, let me try something too... honestly, I said that!! Your verse is perfect and flows with that gentle iambic lilt that you do so well. Congrats to you too, my friend!!
Melissa
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Adonna, you made my day with your delightful review and mounds of encouragement. So needed your sunny face today... and your lovely words too. But, I really must share that is was after reading your entry for this Minute that I smiled and said to myself... how lovely, let me try something too... honestly, I said that!! Your verse is perfect and flows with that gentle iambic lilt that you do so well. Congrats to you too, my friend!!
Melissa
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize for this stunning piece--lovely and elegant--startling imagery--unexpected combinations--hearing in silence--unuttered songs. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Congrats on your prize for this stunning piece--lovely and elegant--startling imagery--unexpected combinations--hearing in silence--unuttered songs. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Hello Liz. Thanks so much. I am so glad you liked this poem! :)
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
Very nice Minute poem, and a fine entry for the contest! I wish you Good Luck!
The artwork you chose is fabulous as well, and compliments your work very well.
"I heard the silence of the moon
convey a tune" ... an interesting line, that you could hear "silence".
I especially liked how you called the moon "old troubadour", a minstrel.
Again, how could this be? "Unuttered songs lulled me to sleep" ... Can a song be a song if it's not uttered? Maybe it's just the presence of the full moon that seems to sing a lullaby. Maybe there is an audible sound in silence. After all, Simon & Garfunkel thought so.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hi Melissa,
Very nice Minute poem, and a fine entry for the contest! I wish you Good Luck!
The artwork you chose is fabulous as well, and compliments your work very well.
"I heard the silence of the moon
convey a tune" ... an interesting line, that you could hear "silence".
I especially liked how you called the moon "old troubadour", a minstrel.
Again, how could this be? "Unuttered songs lulled me to sleep" ... Can a song be a song if it's not uttered? Maybe it's just the presence of the full moon that seems to sing a lullaby. Maybe there is an audible sound in silence. After all, Simon & Garfunkel thought so.
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hello KB... thank you for your wonderful comments and review for the Minute poem. Hugs!!! Glad you liked the silence part. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah this is absolutely a perfect minute poem, Melissa. Your iambic metre is spot on, as is you rhyme in the tradition of the classic minute poem.
Wishing you great luck with the committee with serene gem. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Ah this is absolutely a perfect minute poem, Melissa. Your iambic metre is spot on, as is you rhyme in the tradition of the classic minute poem.
Wishing you great luck with the committee with serene gem. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Hello Gloria. I appreciate your words... I remember writing my first Minute Poem, it was for a contest. It was my first attempt at iambic meter. Michael Cahill and I tied for first place... I have been hooked on Minutes every since and use them to unstick myself from malaise... Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaaah... what a gentle lullaby for the tired spirits that haunt us these days... beautifully penned, Melissa, in both sound and word!! :) ;) Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Aaaah... what a gentle lullaby for the tired spirits that haunt us these days... beautifully penned, Melissa, in both sound and word!! :) ;) Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Hi Yvette. Thank you for your wonderful comments on the Minute poem. I must admit that I began to write it when I was sleepy... LOL. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Warren Rodgers
You've written a beautiful minute poem, exceptional in every way, and easily a six star piece. It conveys to me the power music has in our lives, mysteries of the Moon, and quiet contentment that bring peace and quiet as we drift off to sleep. I've read and written a few Minute poems myself and most of them, including my own have a choppy read, but yours I find to be very smooth. Good luck in the contest, should do very well.
All the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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You've written a beautiful minute poem, exceptional in every way, and easily a six star piece. It conveys to me the power music has in our lives, mysteries of the Moon, and quiet contentment that bring peace and quiet as we drift off to sleep. I've read and written a few Minute poems myself and most of them, including my own have a choppy read, but yours I find to be very smooth. Good luck in the contest, should do very well.
All the best, Rodger
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Hello Rodger... thanks so very much for the wonderful comments on this Minute Poem... so very appreciated! :)
Melissa
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh, I love this. It is so sweet and gives you a peaceful, cozy feeling. I love the picture too. I love the face on the moon. It is so well done. Great rhyme.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Oh, I love this. It is so sweet and gives you a peaceful, cozy feeling. I love the picture too. I love the face on the moon. It is so well done. Great rhyme.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Hi Roxanna. I am delighted you liked the Minute poem. I must admit, I began to write it when I was sleepy... LOL. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Boogienights
I can see why this got recognized, it's lovely. It creates a calmness you can feel, a sense of peace that lulls you to sleep. It's wonderful. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I can see why this got recognized, it's lovely. It creates a calmness you can feel, a sense of peace that lulls you to sleep. It's wonderful. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hey... I guess it will be no surprise to you that I began to write it when I was sleepy... LOL. Thanks bunches!!
Melissa
Comment from Anne Johnston
That is a relaxing poem to read. Great rhyming and it flows so smoothly.
I like that last part, "a quiet rest within my nest." Very well done. Thanks for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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That is a relaxing poem to read. Great rhyming and it flows so smoothly.
I like that last part, "a quiet rest within my nest." Very well done. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hello Anne. Thanks so much!! I appreciate your taking the time to share your comments.
Melissa
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You are welcome.