Potlatch 2021
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a fun Roger's refrain -- a perfect choice for topic as your rhythm mimics that which I'm sure Molly followed while bounding through the snow! ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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What a fun Roger's refrain -- a perfect choice for topic as your rhythm mimics that which I'm sure Molly followed while bounding through the snow! ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your lovely feedback, Yvette :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from patcelaw
When I was a child as I walked to school during the winter I would see animal prints in the snow and many times those prints would be the same on my way home from school, that is unless it snowed again.,
Patricia
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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When I was a child as I walked to school during the winter I would see animal prints in the snow and many times those prints would be the same on my way home from school, that is unless it snowed again.,
Patricia
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your feedback :)
Comment from Sally Law
This out so as fun and fresh as your romp in the snow, dear Debra. Beautifully penned in frosty blue and white. Sublime! Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the new year,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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This out so as fun and fresh as your romp in the snow, dear Debra. Beautifully penned in frosty blue and white. Sublime! Sending you my best today as always and blessings for the new year,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Thank you Sal :)
Happy New Year! xx
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Great flow and rhyme scheme. A trail of paw prints on the snow direct the way I need to go. Beautiful fitting photo to go with your words.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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This is a nicely written poem. Great flow and rhyme scheme. A trail of paw prints on the snow direct the way I need to go. Beautiful fitting photo to go with your words.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Joanne, for your kind feedback.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a delightful write Debra, you captured the fun dogs have in the snow and how they 'cavort' like a 'dynamo', just love those two words to describe a dogs enthusiasm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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This is a delightful write Debra, you captured the fun dogs have in the snow and how they 'cavort' like a 'dynamo', just love those two words to describe a dogs enthusiasm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Hi Dolly, Thank you for your great feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Patricia Cammish
This is a competently penned, metrically sound poem painting a neat picture of a happy morning. Your enjambement in your middle stanza works well. Perhaps adding a comma after 'dynamo' would be useful.
I sympathise with you not being able to upload your own photos. I can't do it either.
Thanks for this.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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This is a competently penned, metrically sound poem painting a neat picture of a happy morning. Your enjambement in your middle stanza works well. Perhaps adding a comma after 'dynamo' would be useful.
I sympathise with you not being able to upload your own photos. I can't do it either.
Thanks for this.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind and helpful feedback, Patricia. I appreciate it. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from royowen
The first time I've seen paw prints in the the snow Debra, (haven't seen you for awhile) you're in England aren't you? Beautifully written, who's Molly? You're granddaughter? I loved this lovely ditty, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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The first time I've seen paw prints in the the snow Debra, (haven't seen you for awhile) you're in England aren't you? Beautifully written, who's Molly? You're granddaughter? I loved this lovely ditty, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Hi Roy, Thanks for your lovely feedback. I've been off site for a while but hope to be on more than off this year! I trust that you are keeping well :)
Molly is our Springer Spaniel. I don't have grandchildren yet, our eldest child is only 15!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
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Bless you Debra.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
We hardly ever get snow down here in the South, Debra, you are lucky! I loved your poem, it reminded me of the fun I had as a child with our dog. We lived in the Midlands then and we had snow! Happy New Year, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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We hardly ever get snow down here in the South, Debra, you are lucky! I loved your poem, it reminded me of the fun I had as a child with our dog. We lived in the Midlands then and we had snow! Happy New Year, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Happy New Year to you also, Sandra :)
I'm glad you enjoyed my poem and appreciate your lovely comments!
Best wishes always, Debra x
Comment from Every_Dia
Hello there! I love how you describe your dog! The only critique is that the word snow is used and rhymed a lot in this and I wish that the words were more varied. Otherwise, this is such a nice, lighthearted piece and I thank you for it :). Glad you had a good day with the pup!
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
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Hello there! I love how you describe your dog! The only critique is that the word snow is used and rhymed a lot in this and I wish that the words were more varied. Otherwise, this is such a nice, lighthearted piece and I thank you for it :). Glad you had a good day with the pup!
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
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Hi, thanks for your feedback :)
The constraints of the form (Roger?s Refrain) means that lines 1 and 4 in each stanza end with the same phrase, also, each stanza is a mono rhyme so each line must rhyme with every other line in that stanza!
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from robyn corum
Debra,
I have read a couple of others of these poem styles in the challenge lately and yours is by far my favorite. The scansion and flow are divine and the content was just fun. Thanks!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Debra,
I have read a couple of others of these poem styles in the challenge lately and yours is by far my favorite. The scansion and flow are divine and the content was just fun. Thanks!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Robyn :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
