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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "'We Will Remember Them'"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
32 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This intriguing story is building nicely. The more Charles and Peter say about Thomas Warburton, the deeper the mystery becomes regarding his
choices. The pieces of conversation that Peter reveals add another dimension to his well-kept secret. All in good time, I assume I will glean more.
Ralf
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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This intriguing story is building nicely. The more Charles and Peter say about Thomas Warburton, the deeper the mystery becomes regarding his
choices. The pieces of conversation that Peter reveals add another dimension to his well-kept secret. All in good time, I assume I will glean more.
Ralf
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thanks again for another catchup review. You are doing well.
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I am enjoying your book.
Ralf
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Great!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I've enjoyed reading the conversation between Peter Allen and the rector, Charles in these first four chapters. Interesting to see what the ears after Jericho farm did to Tom Warburton. Great writing,
cheers
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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I've enjoyed reading the conversation between Peter Allen and the rector, Charles in these first four chapters. Interesting to see what the ears after Jericho farm did to Tom Warburton. Great writing,
cheers
Comment Written 14-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for this six star review on a back numbered chapter.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
We are moving closer to the point of the visit now. These men are still dancing. The time is well spent, as it gives rise to further thought and possibilities to consider. Allen does well to consult with the rector in advance of just showing up at Jericho Farm. He would be wise to take the rector with him. Just in case ....
Great read!
Lucy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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We are moving closer to the point of the visit now. These men are still dancing. The time is well spent, as it gives rise to further thought and possibilities to consider. Allen does well to consult with the rector in advance of just showing up at Jericho Farm. He would be wise to take the rector with him. Just in case ....
Great read!
Lucy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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An accompanied visit might gave been a good idea but I don't think that is Allen's way. These barrister fellows suffer from considerable overconfidence. Lol. Thanks for another find review.
Comment from Leann DS
This is the third chapter I have read of your book, and it's really interesting. And looking forward to reading the next one. As usual, there is lots of detail that you expressed through the dialogue. Until next chapter, hugs.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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This is the third chapter I have read of your book, and it's really interesting. And looking forward to reading the next one. As usual, there is lots of detail that you expressed through the dialogue. Until next chapter, hugs.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for your kind review. I am so pleased you are enjoying the story.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good chapter with
an excellent conversation
between Allen and Charles.
-The introduction with the
'ancient rural tradition" was
a good way to transition from the last chapter.
-I like how you give Allen plenty
of time to tell his story of Tom
without interruption.
-It certainly gave a clear picture
of Tom and his dedication to the service.
-I am sure he was haunted by his own
demons, and this was a way to avoid them.
-It is also interesting that at such a
young age, he would carry a suicide wish
with him into the army, but I imagine
these demons run very deep.
-The ending of the conversation is
enlightening in that we learn what
Allen knows about Tom's background,
and gives his impression of Tom's
feelings about who we know to be the Joliffe's.
-Very well done. I look forward to seeing
what more Allen uncovers.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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-A very good chapter with
an excellent conversation
between Allen and Charles.
-The introduction with the
'ancient rural tradition" was
a good way to transition from the last chapter.
-I like how you give Allen plenty
of time to tell his story of Tom
without interruption.
-It certainly gave a clear picture
of Tom and his dedication to the service.
-I am sure he was haunted by his own
demons, and this was a way to avoid them.
-It is also interesting that at such a
young age, he would carry a suicide wish
with him into the army, but I imagine
these demons run very deep.
-The ending of the conversation is
enlightening in that we learn what
Allen knows about Tom's background,
and gives his impression of Tom's
feelings about who we know to be the Joliffe's.
-Very well done. I look forward to seeing
what more Allen uncovers.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for this review. Your comments are really interesting to me.
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You are very welcome, and I am glad my comments are interesting. I enjoy speculating. I was also an English major and high school English teacher so I like to enjoy what I read:)
Comment from roof35
You have me making a wild guess. I will certainly look forward the coming chapters. As always, your chapter is perfectly written and very interesting. I really enjoy this story.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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You have me making a wild guess. I will certainly look forward the coming chapters. As always, your chapter is perfectly written and very interesting. I really enjoy this story.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much indeed for yet another six-star review and encouraging comments.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Fascinating chapter, very well written, and very clean copy, this brings me deeper into the mystery of Tom Warburton, why he sacrificed his life and how his name came to be listed on the local memorial. You have expertly interwoven the dialogue between these two men to keenly engage the reader's interest, while also quoting a third person not present, the sexton.
It does leave me wondering what the people in the village could possibly know about the manner of Warburton's death, when here we have his commanding officer, a definitive witness of the same.
So what does the sexton mean when he says:
"Less said about Tom Warburton the better. We munna speak ill of the dead though, specially the dead as went as he done, so I'll say no more if you dunna mind."
And particularly the part, "the dead as went as he done."
What a mystery we have here!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Fascinating chapter, very well written, and very clean copy, this brings me deeper into the mystery of Tom Warburton, why he sacrificed his life and how his name came to be listed on the local memorial. You have expertly interwoven the dialogue between these two men to keenly engage the reader's interest, while also quoting a third person not present, the sexton.
It does leave me wondering what the people in the village could possibly know about the manner of Warburton's death, when here we have his commanding officer, a definitive witness of the same.
So what does the sexton mean when he says:
"Less said about Tom Warburton the better. We munna speak ill of the dead though, specially the dead as went as he done, so I'll say no more if you dunna mind."
And particularly the part, "the dead as went as he done."
What a mystery we have here!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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In a couple of posts time you will have answers to these questions, some of them at any rate. Many thanks for this six-star review that provides me with some idea of how the story is revealing itself to readers. That is most valuable to me.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi
well this is coming along just fine.
I like the sucicide angle, the questioning of it. I wonder how many wonder if fool hardy bravery is linked to a death wish?
I think that once this came up, it stayed in my thought as I read through the rest of the story.
And now, I will wander off and think it all over...
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Hi
well this is coming along just fine.
I like the sucicide angle, the questioning of it. I wonder how many wonder if fool hardy bravery is linked to a death wish?
I think that once this came up, it stayed in my thought as I read through the rest of the story.
And now, I will wander off and think it all over...
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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If a work of fiction like this can achieve a result like that in a reader like you, I think I can die happy. Lol.
Many thanks for this review.
Comment from Sanku
Sergeant Warburton's heroic deeds were spurred by a death desire-that is sad. And Peter wanting to unravel the knot is touching. During their life in the barracks Warburtons's conversations (or admissions) had made such an impact on Peter that he is feeling impelled to unravel the mystery of this loner
I enjoy reading this .Your theme and style of writing is diffrent from the other novels here.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Sergeant Warburton's heroic deeds were spurred by a death desire-that is sad. And Peter wanting to unravel the knot is touching. During their life in the barracks Warburtons's conversations (or admissions) had made such an impact on Peter that he is feeling impelled to unravel the mystery of this loner
I enjoy reading this .Your theme and style of writing is diffrent from the other novels here.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this review. The difference might be largely due to my being English - and old!
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I have to agree ..Smile.
Comment from JudyE
Good morning, Jim.
The conversation is very natural and we learn more about Tom's behaviour from this.
For your consideration:
Charles Thorpe, raised his eyebrows. - delete comma
He, like many of his generation and calling had counselled, and continued to counsel, a wide variety of people. - comma after 'calling'
If I'd failed to do it because I'd already passed judgement on the man, and agreed, if you like, that suicides don't deserve medals, then I might be feeling guilty. No Charles. I'm not here as a salve to my conscience. My conscience, as far as Tom Warburton is concerned, is completely clear. I didn't put him up for a V.C. because, to all intents and purposes, he had asked me not to.' - speech mark needed at beginning of this paragraph.
when that person's experience of misery has already exceeded that, which he or she has the capacity to bear.' - delete comma after 'that'
I took the liberty of mentioning him to my sexton after you and I had met, this afternoon.' - maybe delete comma after 'met'
Allen shifted in his chair. He had not wanted the rector to go off at half cock, and his last remark, had indicated that the Reverend Charles had done just that. - delete comma after 'remark'
"But he be gone long ago, rector, and 'twere a good thing as he did. Less said about Tom Warburton the better. We munna speak ill of the dead though, specially the dead as went as he done, so I'll say no more if you dunna mind. But you can rest assured as 'tis proper for his name to be on our memorial like. Oh aye, he lived in Cleeborough, or on a farm just outside of it."' - should there be a single speech mark at the beginning of this?
'Exactly! I remember once checking through the service records of the men in the company, and I noticed that Sergeant Warburton's next of kin had remained unaltered since the day he'd signed up, fifteen years previously, back at the beginning of 1901. I checked with him that the entry, as it stood, still applied, and he confirmed it. The address was Cleeborough St Mary. So that's where I sent the usual letter of condolence after he was killed.
When all the business of war memorials started after the war, Warburton would have been on army records as a Cleeborough man, so I presume that's how it came about. I can't say for certain of course, because I'd left the army by then.' - Speech marks needed at beginning of this?
'Yes it's with my papers back at the hotel. - period or comma after 'Yes'
Stay safe
Judy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Good morning, Jim.
The conversation is very natural and we learn more about Tom's behaviour from this.
For your consideration:
Charles Thorpe, raised his eyebrows. - delete comma
He, like many of his generation and calling had counselled, and continued to counsel, a wide variety of people. - comma after 'calling'
If I'd failed to do it because I'd already passed judgement on the man, and agreed, if you like, that suicides don't deserve medals, then I might be feeling guilty. No Charles. I'm not here as a salve to my conscience. My conscience, as far as Tom Warburton is concerned, is completely clear. I didn't put him up for a V.C. because, to all intents and purposes, he had asked me not to.' - speech mark needed at beginning of this paragraph.
when that person's experience of misery has already exceeded that, which he or she has the capacity to bear.' - delete comma after 'that'
I took the liberty of mentioning him to my sexton after you and I had met, this afternoon.' - maybe delete comma after 'met'
Allen shifted in his chair. He had not wanted the rector to go off at half cock, and his last remark, had indicated that the Reverend Charles had done just that. - delete comma after 'remark'
"But he be gone long ago, rector, and 'twere a good thing as he did. Less said about Tom Warburton the better. We munna speak ill of the dead though, specially the dead as went as he done, so I'll say no more if you dunna mind. But you can rest assured as 'tis proper for his name to be on our memorial like. Oh aye, he lived in Cleeborough, or on a farm just outside of it."' - should there be a single speech mark at the beginning of this?
'Exactly! I remember once checking through the service records of the men in the company, and I noticed that Sergeant Warburton's next of kin had remained unaltered since the day he'd signed up, fifteen years previously, back at the beginning of 1901. I checked with him that the entry, as it stood, still applied, and he confirmed it. The address was Cleeborough St Mary. So that's where I sent the usual letter of condolence after he was killed.
When all the business of war memorials started after the war, Warburton would have been on army records as a Cleeborough man, so I presume that's how it came about. I can't say for certain of course, because I'd left the army by then.' - Speech marks needed at beginning of this?
'Yes it's with my papers back at the hotel. - period or comma after 'Yes'
Stay safe
Judy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2021
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Thank you as usual for your painstaking work von this. I have one query. You quote my paragraph, requoted below, but you have not included any comment, so I wondered why.
''Exactly! I remember once checking through the service records of the men in the company, and I noticed that Sergeant Warburton's next of kin had remained unaltered since the day he'd signed up, fifteen years previously, back at the beginning of 1901. I checked with him that the entry, as it stood, still applied, and he confirmed it. The address was Cleeborough St Mary. So that's where I sent the usual letter of condolence after he was killed.'
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My error. Once I find the first edit, I copy and paste the rest into the comment box then go through either editing or deleting. This paragraph accidentally didn't get deleted. :)
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That's all right then.