Remove the Dust
This story comes from a writing prompt in Poets & Writers..16 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Well done Papa Mike, I too stare at the dust particles in the morning sunlight as the particles settle on pictures and mementos of times and things long past. Nice short, not so very fiction.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Well done Papa Mike, I too stare at the dust particles in the morning sunlight as the particles settle on pictures and mementos of times and things long past. Nice short, not so very fiction.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hi, guys. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
It is a great write. I don't think it describes you, but it could very well describe someone who had the desire to writem but somehow let the time slip by without allowing the creative juices to flow. It has a good thought near end, because all is not lost. The spark is still there and it's time to dust away the cobwebs and take control.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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It is a great write. I don't think it describes you, but it could very well describe someone who had the desire to writem but somehow let the time slip by without allowing the creative juices to flow. It has a good thought near end, because all is not lost. The spark is still there and it's time to dust away the cobwebs and take control.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great piece of fiction, hard to imagine you did it in five minutes. It is so rewarding when thoughts come fast like that, your mind moves faster than your pen. Love your closing words.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Great piece of fiction, hard to imagine you did it in five minutes. It is so rewarding when thoughts come fast like that, your mind moves faster than your pen. Love your closing words.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hi, Anne. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You are welcome
Comment from royowen
I think we all have moments of self loathing and regret, but then, or knowledge of God, tells us we're precious, and not to cling to the ungodly ideas of an unsuccessful life, which ate the lies out of the pit of hell, our Father God is the personification of creative, and so are we. Beautifully written, you bounced back Mike, HNY, blessings to you and yours, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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I think we all have moments of self loathing and regret, but then, or knowledge of God, tells us we're precious, and not to cling to the ungodly ideas of an unsuccessful life, which ate the lies out of the pit of hell, our Father God is the personification of creative, and so are we. Beautifully written, you bounced back Mike, HNY, blessings to you and yours, Roy
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You too Mike
Comment from RetroStarfish
Wonderful. I love the comparison of dust to dreams and expectations. There are some lovely and lyrical turns of phrase, too: "...particles of nothingness searching for a place to land... Books with never seen words ... the heart flutters, and the mind reacts."
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Wonderful. I love the comparison of dust to dreams and expectations. There are some lovely and lyrical turns of phrase, too: "...particles of nothingness searching for a place to land... Books with never seen words ... the heart flutters, and the mind reacts."
Nicely done!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Eternal Muse
This is a very unusual and original story. Great descriptive imagery and visuals, and a very nice use of a dialogue, the key to any successful story.
Thanks for sharing it with us, and happy New Year!
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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This is a very unusual and original story. Great descriptive imagery and visuals, and a very nice use of a dialogue, the key to any successful story.
Thanks for sharing it with us, and happy New Year!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
