John and Shorty's Gift
Western script, humor22 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
This is very entertaining... I love Miss Elvira Flunkenduncer's name. The dialogue was well handled to impart authenticity to the situation. Poor old fruitcakes often get bad press - many cooks will relate to this (I do! my fruitcakes make great door-stops.)
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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This is very entertaining... I love Miss Elvira Flunkenduncer's name. The dialogue was well handled to impart authenticity to the situation. Poor old fruitcakes often get bad press - many cooks will relate to this (I do! my fruitcakes make great door-stops.)
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing today!
Comment from equestrik
This is a very clever bit of writing and you chose a good picture to go with your writing. i was thinking she baked something in those cakes to make them heavy.
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This is a very clever bit of writing and you chose a good picture to go with your writing. i was thinking she baked something in those cakes to make them heavy.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from judiverse
Fruitcakes are always the butt of holiday jokes, and they are usually very heavy. I have one on hand I may or may not serve for New Year's, Your characters of John and Shorty are great, and I remember your Elvira Flunkenduncer. What a name! Love it. Making the horse thieves eat the fruitcake might be a deterrent. The mayor seems glad to pass along the fruitcakes. It's fun to think of the fruitcakes painted and used as bookends. Excellent script. judi
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Fruitcakes are always the butt of holiday jokes, and they are usually very heavy. I have one on hand I may or may not serve for New Year's, Your characters of John and Shorty are great, and I remember your Elvira Flunkenduncer. What a name! Love it. Making the horse thieves eat the fruitcake might be a deterrent. The mayor seems glad to pass along the fruitcakes. It's fun to think of the fruitcakes painted and used as bookends. Excellent script. judi
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you for an enthusiastic review.
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You're welcome. I always enjoy John and Shorty's adventures. judi
Comment from sammielwf
John and Shorty's gift was a dern funny write Miss Cookie!
I loved the way you developed the story line and as fruity as it was...it fer sure kept my interest.
Gotta tell ua though....fer some reason I thought maybe that old Flunkendunker had done gone out and kilt the horses- and she had cooked em in that there fruit cake..
I am so glad to know that I was wrong!
Great story- I like it a whole heap!
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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John and Shorty's gift was a dern funny write Miss Cookie!
I loved the way you developed the story line and as fruity as it was...it fer sure kept my interest.
Gotta tell ua though....fer some reason I thought maybe that old Flunkendunker had done gone out and kilt the horses- and she had cooked em in that there fruit cake..
I am so glad to know that I was wrong!
Great story- I like it a whole heap!
Sammielwf
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you for a great review!
Comment from robyn corum
CC,
hahahahaha And thus begins the fruitcake saga of the West. hahaha I wonder how the fruitcake began? That would be an interesting story to tell, huh?
I really enjoyed this. I always enjoy your scripts featuring these characters. Thanks!
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CC,
hahahahaha And thus begins the fruitcake saga of the West. hahaha I wonder how the fruitcake began? That would be an interesting story to tell, huh?
I really enjoyed this. I always enjoy your scripts featuring these characters. Thanks!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you for a super review!
Comment from royowen
What a very funny script adventure you've written here Chrystie, our heroes have returned with gusto, and decide that they will clobber horse thieves with them, because John can't even make a dent in them with his knife, or the could disguise them as bookends. Love Elvira Flunkenduncer, well done, great script writing, blessings Roy
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What a very funny script adventure you've written here Chrystie, our heroes have returned with gusto, and decide that they will clobber horse thieves with them, because John can't even make a dent in them with his knife, or the could disguise them as bookends. Love Elvira Flunkenduncer, well done, great script writing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your super, enthusiastic review!
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Most welcome Chrystie
Comment from lyenochka
LOL! That's so cute. I was worried when John and Shorty got the gift of fruitcakes from Elvira. I was thinking the same thing about clobbering thieves with them but bookends sound much less violent. Enjoyed your fun script!!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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LOL! That's so cute. I was worried when John and Shorty got the gift of fruitcakes from Elvira. I was thinking the same thing about clobbering thieves with them but bookends sound much less violent. Enjoyed your fun script!!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
Comment from Eddy Fidelis
John and Shorty are funny characters, and mischievous as well. Poor Major Perkins, seems he doesn't know what his friends are good at.
Elvira's role or character is not described in the play. Wonder what she did to deserve such mockery of her gift. I supposed if it was someone they loved, they story would have been different whatever the condition of the gift, right?
Very interesting play
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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John and Shorty are funny characters, and mischievous as well. Poor Major Perkins, seems he doesn't know what his friends are good at.
Elvira's role or character is not described in the play. Wonder what she did to deserve such mockery of her gift. I supposed if it was someone they loved, they story would have been different whatever the condition of the gift, right?
Very interesting play
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reviewing! In the author notes, I point out that there is another script where Elvira comes up as a prominent character.
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Okay
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, Ha, Ha who makes a killer fruit-cake and gifted to other people to enjoy? It's that a revenge hidden somewhere inside the cake: ") I think these things are purty near petrified. Maybe we should try cuttin' 'em with a butcher knife? (Pulls butcher knife from sheath. Tries to cut fruitcake with sound effect of loud HANDSAW sawing sound.) Boy, Shorty, that didn't even make a dent! (Replaces knife in sheath and replaces it on table.)
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next scene.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Ha, Ha, Ha who makes a killer fruit-cake and gifted to other people to enjoy? It's that a revenge hidden somewhere inside the cake: ") I think these things are purty near petrified. Maybe we should try cuttin' 'em with a butcher knife? (Pulls butcher knife from sheath. Tries to cut fruitcake with sound effect of loud HANDSAW sawing sound.) Boy, Shorty, that didn't even make a dent! (Replaces knife in sheath and replaces it on table.)
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next scene.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your super nice review!
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very cute. I once baked a cake using the wrong type of flour, and it wound up so heavy that, if I dropped it, it would probably have gone through the floor and, perhaps, killed someone three floors below, so I can commiserate.
Your characters are engaging, your plot is humorous, and the name, Elvira Flunkenduncer, definitely made me smile. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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This is very cute. I once baked a cake using the wrong type of flour, and it wound up so heavy that, if I dropped it, it would probably have gone through the floor and, perhaps, killed someone three floors below, so I can commiserate.
Your characters are engaging, your plot is humorous, and the name, Elvira Flunkenduncer, definitely made me smile. Nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for such a nice review.
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You're very welcome.
