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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Dinner for Two"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
34 total reviews
Comment from Mabaker12
This story apart from being excellently written is warming up nicely, Jim. I like your style, easy to read, educational at the same time. Writing like this deserves a six, so I'll give you one. Well done, sincerely Anne
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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This story apart from being excellently written is warming up nicely, Jim. I like your style, easy to read, educational at the same time. Writing like this deserves a six, so I'll give you one. Well done, sincerely Anne
Comment Written 29-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you to much for playing catch-up on this story with a six star review. It is most kind of you. I am so pleased you are enjoying reading it.
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I am
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Well, now I'm hooked. The writing takes the reader along very nicely. The dialogue is very natural and of course my curiosity is aroused regarding the woman about whom Peter Allen is seeking information.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Well, now I'm hooked. The writing takes the reader along very nicely. The dialogue is very natural and of course my curiosity is aroused regarding the woman about whom Peter Allen is seeking information.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reviewing this back number. I am thrilled that you are hooked.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I liked the first half of this chapter very much. It had good character development, and the description of why church spires twist fascinated me as much as it did Peter.
The second half was extremely realistic: the alcohol flows a bit and the conversation becomes verbiose and meanders away from the point. Realistic, but I become impatient with it...
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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I liked the first half of this chapter very much. It had good character development, and the description of why church spires twist fascinated me as much as it did Peter.
The second half was extremely realistic: the alcohol flows a bit and the conversation becomes verbiose and meanders away from the point. Realistic, but I become impatient with it...
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thanks for your honest opinion it us much appreciated. Some enjoy it, some not so much, a spanner might yet be thrown in the works.
Comment from Allezw2
An interesting conversation between peers that wanders afield and commands an explanation from the honorable man's confidant. The dialog is worthy worthy of the thesis and presented well. A country rector of needs be aware of his people and the interests of these two disparate individuals intersect in a splendid discourse. Motives in wartime and battlefield behaviors are sometimes difficult to measure. An aside: Have you seen the Imperial war Museum's documentary of WWI supervised by Peter Jackson, "They Shall Not Grow Old"?
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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An interesting conversation between peers that wanders afield and commands an explanation from the honorable man's confidant. The dialog is worthy worthy of the thesis and presented well. A country rector of needs be aware of his people and the interests of these two disparate individuals intersect in a splendid discourse. Motives in wartime and battlefield behaviors are sometimes difficult to measure. An aside: Have you seen the Imperial war Museum's documentary of WWI supervised by Peter Jackson, "They Shall Not Grow Old"?
Live long and write well,
Fantasist
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for this review. i don't think I saw the documentary to which you refer but I saw a lot of stuff about that war in 2018, the centenary of its ending.
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I think you would have remembered it. Peter Jackson supervised the construction, literally of scads of film stored in the Imperial War Museum's archives. They were from the early days of the cinematic art. Hand cranked cameras at varying frames per second (FPS) were digitized and the the resulting gaps filled with CGI. The resulting film was then colorized and transformed into 3D. Expert lip readers were employed to attempt recovery of the dialog from the silent films. I saw it two years ago and as I remember, it ran for nearly two hours with a shorter trailer, an on film discussion by Jackson explaining the process of assembling and printing the film. It was a special showing here, one day only.
Comment from royowen
So now we know about Tommy Bache and how he came into possession of the mill, and inevitably it seems married Heather, and came into ownership of the Jolliffe farm, how interesting that Tom Warburton had a deathwish in which was fulfilled, but he was a man among men, and in this sense passes into immortality, well done, great follow up, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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So now we know about Tommy Bache and how he came into possession of the mill, and inevitably it seems married Heather, and came into ownership of the Jolliffe farm, how interesting that Tom Warburton had a deathwish in which was fulfilled, but he was a man among men, and in this sense passes into immortality, well done, great follow up, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Many thanks for this review. The say that only the good die young, so Tom Warburton never stood a chance, did he?
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Poor boy, no he didn?t
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A nice looking church and a good chapter.
-I enjoyed learning more about
Peter Allen, Tom, and Tommy.
-The conversation between Allen
and Rev. Thorpe was quite friendly,
and they seemed to take a liking to each other.
-I was surprised by Allen's reference to
Tom's "putting himself in harm's way."
-I'm sure that was because of Hettie
and what he saw and experienced.
-It sounds like Tommy has done quite
well with the mill and being married,
although we don't know to whom, yet,
but it makes me wonder if it was Heather.
-I have two suggestions: in the opening
section about the timbers, I wonder if all
the description of the colors, sizes, and shapes
is necessary. I know you need some to get
the point across.
-The other is to divide up the paragraph beginning,
'Warburton was a regular.'
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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-A nice looking church and a good chapter.
-I enjoyed learning more about
Peter Allen, Tom, and Tommy.
-The conversation between Allen
and Rev. Thorpe was quite friendly,
and they seemed to take a liking to each other.
-I was surprised by Allen's reference to
Tom's "putting himself in harm's way."
-I'm sure that was because of Hettie
and what he saw and experienced.
-It sounds like Tommy has done quite
well with the mill and being married,
although we don't know to whom, yet,
but it makes me wonder if it was Heather.
-I have two suggestions: in the opening
section about the timbers, I wonder if all
the description of the colors, sizes, and shapes
is necessary. I know you need some to get
the point across.
-The other is to divide up the paragraph beginning,
'Warburton was a regular.'
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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The answers to your questions will shortly appear, I promise! Many thanks for this review. it is much appreciated.
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You are very welcome, and I will look forward to the answers.
Comment from Judy Lawless
An intriguing start to the next book in this series! It will be interesting to see how this all plays out and ties up the loose ends from the first one.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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An intriguing start to the next book in this series! It will be interesting to see how this all plays out and ties up the loose ends from the first one.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this review. I hope it does tie the loose ends. If not I have made a mistake.
Comment from Sanku
The story of the crooked steeple was interesting. I liked the way PETER IS NARRATING THE STORY .The rector too is an interesting character. I am sure I would be able to pick up more of what happened in Book1 as i go on.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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The story of the crooked steeple was interesting. I liked the way PETER IS NARRATING THE STORY .The rector too is an interesting character. I am sure I would be able to pick up more of what happened in Book1 as i go on.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this review. Yes, this necessarily covers some of the ground in Book 1 but from a different viewpoint and, of course, in a retrospective way.
Comment from AnnieDawn
This was a nice chapter to read with an even flow and interesting style. The conversation was a bit difficult for me to catch on to as I am not familiar with their cultural way of speaking. The content was good but I thought there was a bit of mystery, regarding the suicide, that was coming in the last part of the chapter and was disappointed when it was not carried through. That might be a mistake on my part. I cannot find any areas to point out that need adjusting or that have errors. Good chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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This was a nice chapter to read with an even flow and interesting style. The conversation was a bit difficult for me to catch on to as I am not familiar with their cultural way of speaking. The content was good but I thought there was a bit of mystery, regarding the suicide, that was coming in the last part of the chapter and was disappointed when it was not carried through. That might be a mistake on my part. I cannot find any areas to point out that need adjusting or that have errors. Good chapter.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2020
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The mystery will be carried through, never fear. One of the problems an author has here is to keep the chapter lengths short enough to entice the readers, whereas in a published novel the chapter length is related entirely to content. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Jeff Watkins
I should pay to read stories like this instead of getting paid. From now on I am going direct budding novelists to your writings.
I will study the techniques you use to make me want to read the rest of the story. Much of my interest is generated my appreciation of great writing, and I know just enough to have that appreciation.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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I should pay to read stories like this instead of getting paid. From now on I am going direct budding novelists to your writings.
I will study the techniques you use to make me want to read the rest of the story. Much of my interest is generated my appreciation of great writing, and I know just enough to have that appreciation.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Wow! Many thanks for this six-star review. Your comments here are the nicest thing I have read all day, and probably all week.I try tp post twice a week, usually Sundays and Wednesdays.