Where Are All The Children
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Creative Intervention"A vigilante takes down trafficing rings.
16 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
Oh, those poor children. I love the conversation and visual aspects you give the mother out in the yard yelling at her children. It made me think back a few times to me yelling at mine and my parents yelling at me.
They don't cater to the beast who thinks he is the victim. They show him how low he is by leaving him pinned up and embarrassed.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Oh, those poor children. I love the conversation and visual aspects you give the mother out in the yard yelling at her children. It made me think back a few times to me yelling at mine and my parents yelling at me.
They don't cater to the beast who thinks he is the victim. They show him how low he is by leaving him pinned up and embarrassed.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for such a nice review. I'm glad you could relate to the mother. It was actually taken from when my little monsters were young. We had a blended family so they were four of them a year apart. One was always tormenting another, so it seemed. I don't know how many times I said keep your hands to yourself, lol. The officers weren't in a big hurry that's for sure, lol. Think I would've turned up the device and said oops, my bad, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I don't think these guys can be cured, but that attempt must have been fun. I think you could fry their bits completely and they'd still be freaks, but this creep deserved it, and more. Hope he needs medical equipment to pee for the next few weeks! I don't blame the cops for being in no hurry to rescue him.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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I don't think these guys can be cured, but that attempt must have been fun. I think you could fry their bits completely and they'd still be freaks, but this creep deserved it, and more. Hope he needs medical equipment to pee for the next few weeks! I don't blame the cops for being in no hurry to rescue him.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Thank you for such a fun review and reading my chapter. You're right, most do go out and do it again. And he gets necrotizing fascitis from the electrical burns, lol. I think I would have turned up the juice, said oops wrong way, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship and encouragement. It always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Seven or eight? Jamal and Toni should hook the man back up to the electricity and turn on the TV! The vigilante is one smart cookie. Great story!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Seven or eight? Jamal and Toni should hook the man back up to the electricity and turn on the TV! The vigilante is one smart cookie. Great story!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading my story. I agree, they should turn the device on high and TV up as loud as it'll go then sit back and watch him fry. I'm sure they wish they could probably would if it wasn't for their darn oath.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
These are the kind of things you'd love to see happen to these men. I'm sure the police wouldn't mind it either. =] Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter and seeing what else the vigilante does. Rox
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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These are the kind of things you'd love to see happen to these men. I'm sure the police wouldn't mind it either. =] Well done. Looking forward to the next chapter and seeing what else the vigilante does. Rox
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading my chapter and your encouraging review. I'm sure they were debating whether to save him or not. Think I would've turned the machine on high saying oops, wrong way, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your character development in the beginning is so realistic it is like watching some scenes out of a movie. When my sister tattled on me after setting me up, I was sent to my room. I used to slam the
door so hard so often, the door had a full length crack going down two of the panels. You can use that image if you ever need it. I like the humor with the cops' reaction. This is a great mystery.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Your character development in the beginning is so realistic it is like watching some scenes out of a movie. When my sister tattled on me after setting me up, I was sent to my room. I used to slam the
door so hard so often, the door had a full length crack going down two of the panels. You can use that image if you ever need it. I like the humor with the cops' reaction. This is a great mystery.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading my chapter and warm review. Growing up I slammed the door once to many times. Mom took the door off the hinges said I had to earn it back. That stunk. Of course Randy would stand at my door and laugh just to irriate me more. Darn brat.
Thank you so much for reading my chapter and all your encouragment, your friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
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Of course Randy would do that....lol
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mistydawn.
You worked the is and bedraggled mother into the story in a clever fashion. She gave a clue about the Internet that was well done.
The perp is that is hanging on the wall in his basement was a good place to add in a little humor as well as the serious nature of his crimes. The humor didn't last long as the two young girls were found on the bed.
These are evil people with no regard for human life except their own.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Hello Mistydawn.
You worked the is and bedraggled mother into the story in a clever fashion. She gave a clue about the Internet that was well done.
The perp is that is hanging on the wall in his basement was a good place to add in a little humor as well as the serious nature of his crimes. The humor didn't last long as the two young girls were found on the bed.
These are evil people with no regard for human life except their own.
Robert
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for such a warm review and for your praise. The mother's sceen was taking from when my kids were young. They always seemed to torment each other. Your right, they only see the girls as commadities. I don't understand how anyone can me so heartless, so crass.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
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You're very welcome Mistydawn.
Robert
Comment from country ranch writer
Did the perp kill the girl? If he did I am surprised the person left him alive to face the consequences. Wow it must be awful to be zapped
Ike this dude was
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Did the perp kill the girl? If he did I am surprised the person left him alive to face the consequences. Wow it must be awful to be zapped
Ike this dude was
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such a marvelous review. I am honored. We can assume he did them being in his home in his care. The vigilante wanted to do more almost did, but she didn't want to stoop to their level. Figures they'll get what's coming to them in prison. I'm sure it was horrible, especially starting off at his penis. Guess the vigilante wanted a weenie roast, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Missy,
you did so well keeping my attention that seem so real that the unknown person or people did to the two innocence girls, before he/they killed them.
And by the way your scene of the naked man getting zapped, was very shocking.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Missy,
you did so well keeping my attention that seem so real that the unknown person or people did to the two innocence girls, before he/they killed them.
And by the way your scene of the naked man getting zapped, was very shocking.
Gert
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your kind review and for the laugh. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I guess he can truly say he has the power, lol.
Thank you again for your kind review. All your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You are most welcome Mistydawn
Comment from royowen
How shocking finding girls that age dead, when they should be home, safe and sound, I think of my granddaughter when I hear of these things, what horror for them. I can see why Toni and Jamal wouldn't want to catch the vigilante, but then, all your heroes are vigilantes. Well done, good scribing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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How shocking finding girls that age dead, when they should be home, safe and sound, I think of my granddaughter when I hear of these things, what horror for them. I can see why Toni and Jamal wouldn't want to catch the vigilante, but then, all your heroes are vigilantes. Well done, good scribing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such a warm review. It would be horrible for sure. The vigilante is bringing more down than them and the FBI together. I wonder if it has anything to do with watching underdog and super friends as a kid.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragment and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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Well done
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Vigilantes take just into their hands to a certain point, and then let's the authority to take care of the problem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Vigilantes take just into their hands to a certain point, and then let's the authority to take care of the problem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for your warm wishes. Yes, the vigilantes are helping to clean up the town.
Thank you again for your support, it's always greatly appreciated, take care.
