Comment from greyson ernst

Excellent

aaaa this is good but it does not make much sense hope it be better year want to delete this year and delete has 2 syllables so you will be eliminated from the contest also a picture would be good i still liked so no offense and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday


sincerely Greyson Ernst

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020

thanks for the comments

Comment from Pantygynt

Good

I think many of us would like to delete this year and while we are talking about deletions. You would do well to delete a syllable from your third line because at the moment this poem is a 5-7-6:

Want - to - de - lete - this - year.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020

thanks for the comment I will revise accordingly

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

You are expressing something that we all agree with - even though this year has been bad, we can't delete it but I like that word "hope" and that is what we all are hanging on to.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020

thanks for the comments

reply by Anne Johnston on 24-Dec-2020

You are welcome

Comment from Patricia Cammish

Good

This is a nice topical idea.
As a 5 7 5 contest entry, it conforms to the syllable count, but in my opinion, syllable counting is not the only criterion: word choice, layout and rhythm are also to be considered.
Perhaps you might think about the use of capital letters in the title and first lines: it seems a bit arbitrary.
Your middle line is awkwardly expressed and awkward to say.
How about 'Hoping for a better year'?
Your repetition of 'year' on the line ends works well.
Have you considered doing something similar with the line beginnings? eg. Hope for a better year.
I hope you find this useful.
Good luck

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020

thanks for the constructive feedback