Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Colour and movement are well expressed in these three short lines. Sound is there too by association with the word 'squall' so, for my money, you have met the requirements of this prompt well.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

This is beautiful and dramatic, the rhyme reinforces the effect. The picture is perfect, and we can easily imagine the squalling wind, almost smell the salt spray. Best wishes for the contest.

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 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020

Thanks for your comments. I've been for a beach walk today but it was a nice day so I had to imagine it in winter to fit that northern hemisphere season.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 about the winter sea that is dark and raging with foam-tossed spray squall across the bay with dark stormy clouds above to make the storm more fierce.

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