Strong Together
Love makes us...12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This etheree, Strong Together, has the proper line 1-10 syllable progression and makes the statement for a bond that aches when isn't actually holding two people physically together.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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This etheree, Strong Together, has the proper line 1-10 syllable progression and makes the statement for a bond that aches when isn't actually holding two people physically together.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading and understanding my poem..I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Nice entry for the Etheree Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is nice.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Hello anonymous
Nice entry for the Etheree Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is nice.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you, I appreciate you reading my poem. Have a wonderful holiday. :)
Comment from Leigh Lawhon
simple yet powerful. The repeating of the word "gone" took me out of the poem for a second. Was thinking you might have missed a rhyming opportunity by replacing "gone" with "not near."
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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simple yet powerful. The repeating of the word "gone" took me out of the poem for a second. Was thinking you might have missed a rhyming opportunity by replacing "gone" with "not near."
Comment Written 24-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading. I'm going to take a second look..I appreciate your input. Have a great holiday. :)
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Very nicely written poem for the etheree writing prompt entry. Your photo is beautiful and goes quite nicely with your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is a Very nicely written poem for the etheree writing prompt entry. Your photo is beautiful and goes quite nicely with your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. I had my husband in mind when I wrote it, I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
This is so beautiful! You are a very skilled writer indeed. You don't see this kind of intense love as much now a days. So if you have experienced it, you are truly blessed. Love it!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is so beautiful! You are a very skilled writer indeed. You don't see this kind of intense love as much now a days. So if you have experienced it, you are truly blessed. Love it!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from equestrik
This is a good presentation for the Etheree Poem writing prompt. I like the picture which goes well with your writing. Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is a good presentation for the Etheree Poem writing prompt. I like the picture which goes well with your writing. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thanks, I was thinking about my husband when I wrote it. A hopeless romantic I guess. Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Etheree about time that stands still when lovers are apart. We can only think about that person day and night and whatever we do in their absence we share with them.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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A very well-written Etheree about time that stands still when lovers are apart. We can only think about that person day and night and whatever we do in their absence we share with them.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
This is nicely stated. The etheree is similar to the nonet in one respect a triangular shape should be the aim of the writer along with correct syllable count. It is all too easy otherwise. This won't be mentioned in the regulations but some of the judges may be looking for it.
You have so nearly got that shape here it would be worth tinkering a bit to get the shape smooth. For example 'and I lose all fear' can be made that little bit longer without affecting the syllable count by writing 'and I'll lose all fear'. Similarly, 'when you're gone can be reduced by writing 'with you gone'.
These tweaks would smooth your hypotenuse a bit.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is nicely stated. The etheree is similar to the nonet in one respect a triangular shape should be the aim of the writer along with correct syllable count. It is all too easy otherwise. This won't be mentioned in the regulations but some of the judges may be looking for it.
You have so nearly got that shape here it would be worth tinkering a bit to get the shape smooth. For example 'and I lose all fear' can be made that little bit longer without affecting the syllable count by writing 'and I'll lose all fear'. Similarly, 'when you're gone can be reduced by writing 'with you gone'.
These tweaks would smooth your hypotenuse a bit.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is what is so great about fanstory...wonderful writers like you that help me improve my work. Thank you so much for the advice and have very happy holidays. :)
Comment from Wendy G
A well-written poem in the etheree format. It is gentle and lyrical celebrating the closeness and unity of love. The accompanying photo is well chosen.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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A well-written poem in the etheree format. It is gentle and lyrical celebrating the closeness and unity of love. The accompanying photo is well chosen.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Thank you for taking time to read my poem. I really appreciate it. Have a wonderful holiday. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
OOOohh.. very nice! I like the images here - we are good as individuals, but some of us are even better when connected to our 'better halves'. I get it. Thanks and good luck (your syllable counts are all just right, btw.)
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
OOOohh.. very nice! I like the images here - we are good as individuals, but some of us are even better when connected to our 'better halves'. I get it. Thanks and good luck (your syllable counts are all just right, btw.)
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reading. I guess l was just feeling romantic today. I never trust counting sllyables, so I put in on a sllyable counter..lol. Thanks again for reading and have a happy holiday. :)
