Soul -un-soul
love of life8 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written interpretation of the soul of man that needs a body to carry from point A to B but when the body cannot function any longer the soul is set free.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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A very well-written interpretation of the soul of man that needs a body to carry from point A to B but when the body cannot function any longer the soul is set free.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and I wish you a wonderful Christmas.
Comment from equestrik
I think i understand but am not sure. Your writing seems a bit unclear as I am still not sure what your idea of soul really is. it almost seems this person chose to die.?
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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I think i understand but am not sure. Your writing seems a bit unclear as I am still not sure what your idea of soul really is. it almost seems this person chose to die.?
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you, and the idea of soul for me it's something that you can see, it's something that carries the God's blessing.
Comment from LisaMay
I like your personification of what a soul might be thinking about its purpose. The telling carries some interesting concepts so it is thought-provoking, which I enjoyed.
Some suggestions:
I come (came) here thousands of years ago.
I remember where I come and I started to pray.
This would read better as: I remembered where I came from and started to pray. (it still uses the same number of words)
The commas in the following part could be changed to semi-colons, full stops, or dashes:
Now I'm floating, I am flying. My soul is rejoicing, I found my purpose to believe again. I found myself, I am an Angel again.
such as:
Now I'm floating. I am flying. My soul is rejoicing; I found my purpose to believe again. I found myself - I am an Angel again.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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I like your personification of what a soul might be thinking about its purpose. The telling carries some interesting concepts so it is thought-provoking, which I enjoyed.
Some suggestions:
I come (came) here thousands of years ago.
I remember where I come and I started to pray.
This would read better as: I remembered where I came from and started to pray. (it still uses the same number of words)
The commas in the following part could be changed to semi-colons, full stops, or dashes:
Now I'm floating, I am flying. My soul is rejoicing, I found my purpose to believe again. I found myself, I am an Angel again.
such as:
Now I'm floating. I am flying. My soul is rejoicing; I found my purpose to believe again. I found myself - I am an Angel again.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Alchera
A well written beautiful spiritual story throughout its narration storyline. I have loved how you let the paradisiacal angel fall on earth and after his earthy duty can regain his place in Paradise. I hope one day we could do the same.Good work indeed!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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A well written beautiful spiritual story throughout its narration storyline. I have loved how you let the paradisiacal angel fall on earth and after his earthy duty can regain his place in Paradise. I hope one day we could do the same.Good work indeed!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your beautiful review, I am so happy that you got my story)
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You are always welcome, dearest sincere friend of mine.Blessings!
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Soul-un-soul, brings us to the parting of the ways between the trapped soul and the 'earthly shell' holding it in abeyance.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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This story, Soul-un-soul, brings us to the parting of the ways between the trapped soul and the 'earthly shell' holding it in abeyance.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and Merry Christmas:)
Comment from mermaids
I like how this individual is an angel and becomes one again at the end. You have a smooth flow of prose that has a spiritual feel to it. The feeling of the soul comes through clearly.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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I like how this individual is an angel and becomes one again at the end. You have a smooth flow of prose that has a spiritual feel to it. The feeling of the soul comes through clearly.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and Merry Christmas:)
Comment from Anissha Blackwell1
"Soul own soul", is a masterwork. You speak from the depth of the heart to mankind. We all have a purpose, but do to the carnal nature we can lose focus of it, or never discover it at all. According to your creative writing you have found your purpose as an angel on the Earth.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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"Soul own soul", is a masterwork. You speak from the depth of the heart to mankind. We all have a purpose, but do to the carnal nature we can lose focus of it, or never discover it at all. According to your creative writing you have found your purpose as an angel on the Earth.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and Merry Christmas:)
Comment from sammielwf
Dear Mystery Angel Writer,
Soul in soul is a very strong and powerful piece- it touched my heart.
The struggle of life, the brilliance and wonder of rebirth and taking the former angelic form. Very interesting and clever dear soul writer.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Dear Mystery Angel Writer,
Soul in soul is a very strong and powerful piece- it touched my heart.
The struggle of life, the brilliance and wonder of rebirth and taking the former angelic form. Very interesting and clever dear soul writer.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and Merry Christmas:)